Romeo and Juliet from Romeo's point of view (original song)

[pyrofiliac]

I used to post music i made here occasionally but then i stopped. Anyway, here's this song i wrote to send to this girl that i like. I played guitar, violin, sang and shook a container full of grain sugar for a shaker sound:

[url]https://dl.dropbox.com/u/99892/romeo%20and%20juliet.mp3[/url]

[B]Lyrics:[/B]

hey juliet come to the balcony
open your window, say hello to me
i see you every night, you say
that tomorrow will be the day,
when we will fly away
to places new and different

i see you've met my friend mercutio
he's kind of cool,
but kind of silly though
he always says that seeing you
will be the death of me, but
maybe the dead one won't be me

we won't have everything, at least
we'll have each other
and that's fine for me
if it's fine for you

we can do anything
if we have one another
please don't cry for me
though i cry for you

hey juliet i made a big mistake
they want to throw me out
so i can't be with you
don't know what i can do
what it will take
but i'll see you if its
the last thing that i do

we won't have everything, at least
we'll have each other
and that's fine for me
if it's fine for you

we can do anything
if we have one another
please don't cry for me
though i would die for you

[B]It helps if you're familiar with the story of romeo and juliet just fyi[/B]

[KanonieR]

Why would you make that for a girl you only like

Seems a bit over the top

[pyrofiliac]

ur a poop

[KanonieR]

Alright, this is basically what I thought about the song

The production quality is great as is the instrumentation and the singing, however I feel that it's all a bit generic. I feel like I've heard the chords and that vocal style a thousand times before.

Overall, it's a nice song, though.

[pyrofiliac]

ur too generic

[Kaburorne]

[QUOTE=pyrofiliac;23032425]ur too generic[/QUOTE]

You handle criticism very well.

[pyrofiliac]

u handle criticism very well

[Ducksink]

I like it. If you added some change in the tones in a middle of a verse the cut to the chorus would have been awesome.
But I like the plain idea, also, you play really good.

[GhostG45]

[QUOTE=pyrofiliac;23036947]u handle criticism very well[/QUOTE]

You're a nice person.

[pyrofiliac]

validation :D

[Mosquito]

I really like this! sounds romantic.

Needs more variation in the chorus/verses maybe. They look like one.

[Pepin]

Wait I'm confused, I thought you were gay. Or you are you bi? That aside, still think it needs some bass.

[BagMinge101]

[QUOTE=Pepin;23072492]Wait I'm confused, I thought you were gay. Or you are you bi? That aside, still think it needs some bass.[/QUOTE]

He's gay, although songs about two guys unfortunately lacks public appeal.

I liked it, although I swear to god I heard that violin part somewhere else.

[Tyvak]

I liked it, but I think it needed a stronger chorus. Great job.

[pyrofiliac]

[QUOTE=BagMinge101;23073150]He's gay, although songs about two guys unfortunately lacks public appeal.

I liked it, although I swear to god I heard that violin part somewhere else.[/QUOTE]

wtf im not gay

[Pepin]

[QUOTE=pyrofiliac;23088915]wtf im not gay[/QUOTE]

Well I'm a bit confused then, unless you mean you are bi. But anyways, this song will be well passed good enough to impress a girl.

[demented]

This whole it's to generic thing is stupid. It sounds fantastic OP, good production, clean vocals, good playing.