[img]http://fc02.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2010/202/1/a/Drowning_in_Time_by_Dclone2.jpg[/img]
Had this idea. Turned out pretty well I think. I didn't know if I should experiment with a background or not.
actually, it's really nice.
A gradient could work for a background.
The rope is around incredebly loose, makes it feel like it's intentsional or something. Pose is absolutely horrible, as is the left hand around the rope.
The other figures in the background, instead of proving your point further just give us a glimplse of what the pose would've been.
Shading is weird, there is no definite light source, each object is differently shaded. and there are far to few stuff happening in the background to make it intresting. composition needs serious work, too.
[QUOTE=3v3ryb0dy;23523417]A gradient could work for a background.
The rope is around incredebly loose, makes it feel like it's intentsional or something. Pose is absolutely horrible, as is the left hand around the rope.
The other figures in the background, instead of proving your point further just give us a glimplse of what the pose would've been.
Shading is weird, there is no definite light source, each object is differently shaded. and there are far to few stuff happening in the background to make it intresting. composition needs serious work, too.[/QUOTE]
I didn't want it to seem like there was a lot of tension. I wanted it more of a slow, dreadful thing really.
The left hand isn't around the rope (or at least that's not what I was going for) it's just kind of out in front.
Could you suggest a better pose for someone who's drowning?
I don't know what you mean about the background people.
As I said, I didn't really know what to do for the background.
Could you elaborate on the composition bit?
Thanks for the criticism anyhow.
the huge room in the bottom should be on top cause he's looking there.
I caught that the left hand is not around the rope, it's still absolutely FUBAR. No excuse exists for it, never.
Any pose is better, this one looks like he's trying to do a very rigid boogy out of the gravity pull of a fucking jupiter, not drowning in a water. It's as rigid as a brick made of carbon-nanotube polygons.
Background - simple gradient.
[QUOTE=3v3ryb0dy;23523647]the huge room in the bottom should be on top cause he's looking there.
I caught that the left hand is not around the rope, it's still absolutely FUBAR. [b]No excuse exists for it, never.[/b]
Any pose is better, this one looks like he's trying to do a very rigid boogy out of the gravity pull of a fucking jupiter, not drowning in a water. It's as rigid as a brick made of carbon-nanotube polygons.
Background - simple gradient.[/QUOTE]
Okay then :raise:
Anyway, some small edits. [b]This is just for comparison's sake.[/b] The left hand still looks terrible but would that arrangement make more sense?
I moved stuff around and added a quick gradient. I can't really re-arange the pose in photoshop, so I'm stuck with a rigid boogie on Jupiter.
[img]http://i289.photobucket.com/albums/ll215/Dclone2/TimeDrownCropEdit.jpg[/img]
Hand looks better, before it looked just anatomically incorrect and overall weird. It looked like hand I'd do. Now it's a bit better.
I love it, the title drew me in. The black and white theme is great, don't even bother to color it in. The silhouettes actually show depth, instead of a 2D perspective. Never has a pocket watch seemed so deadly.
:ohdear:
Drowning in time? It's one of the best metaphors I've ever heard.
I really like the edited version.
The only things I dislike are the shading on the bubbles, I think it shouldn't exist there, and the hourglass that looks very flat.
I'm assuming you're done with this piece, and the edit is indeed just for comparison, but it is an improvement in my eyes, and you should touch it up, mainly the obvious editing around the pocket watch.
I'm a big fan of black and white art, and I do like this one a lot, keep it up!
That's really good. I really like this kind of art, and you're very good at it.
I like the new one a lot more. The gradient makes him look like he's being pulled into the abyss.
I think the pose is appropriate for drowning, but perhaps him trying to tear the rope off of him would be a bit better, more of a struggle. Maybe not depending on the feeling you're going for.
Its verry nice but i really don't understand whats going on with the rope?
It is actually a tentacle clock mr cake fingers. :ohdear:
But to be serious it's a nice picture and it's quite unique - rated artistic.
Thanks for all the comments! :D I really appreciate it. I shall perhaps post a refined edit up here later on in the day.
Again, thanks!
I like the first edit better.
Overall, this is a pretty powerful piece
[QUOTE=Dr. Fishtastic;23608767]I like the first edit better.
Overall, this is a pretty powerful piece[/QUOTE]
Thanks! That means a lot. Also, what turns you off about the second edit/what do you like more from the first?
there's a slight white outline around the pocket watch in the edits. it's barely noticeable but it's driving me crazy
Yea, I'd have to get rid of those white pixels one by one...
I kind of like it, for some reason.
I would like to have this as a poster to hang on my wall
I think he should be trying to swim back up to the surface or trying to slowdown
But as someone said this a really nice piece and i wouldn't mind hanging it up on my wall either
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