[B]Hello guys[/B] ! I know that the last time my video was very bad, But I have make efforts!
[B]
[DEL]* No MLG
* No horrible noise in ears[/DEL]
* And a little more animation ^^[/B]
I really listened to all the advice to improve me!
And I would continue!
Thank you for looking and I hope that you enjoy !
[video=youtube;8FxF5WlFqGs]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8FxF5WlFqGs[/video]
Besides some pretty funky camera work (Letterboxing, narrow angle FOV, shaking) it's not bad. The sentence splicing is actually nice and creative, though what ever happened in the short wasn't too apparent. Practice storytelling.
[QUOTE=BandClassHAH;48063001]Besides some pretty funky camera work (Letterboxing, narrow angle FOV, shaking) it's not bad. The sentence splicing is actually nice and creative, though what ever happened in the short wasn't too apparent. Practice storytelling.[/QUOTE]
Thx you for your advice, I would use them advisedly !
Fair warning: Facepunch isn't very good at being constructive about videos, try not to react negatively to anyone in the thread please.
To be honest, it has pacing issues. As a general rule a shot should never last more than 4 seconds. Nearly every shot you had was at or over 4 seconds long. With your longest shot being over 15 seconds long (holyshit).
You could easily break up the shots with more camera angle changes or shorter animations.
Also shots where you move the camera a lot could probably be better with still camera shots at varied angles and positions (like the shot from :50 to :54).
You should really never use a black screen as it's own shot either. Black is very boring and distracting. At :45 you literally make the screen black for a full 3 seconds. At first I thought it was a mistake, but you make the screen black at other points too, it's definitely a "tool" you should never use again. There's other ways to space and pace a video (or add suspense).
Finally incorporating the rule of thirds is pretty important in shots. You nailed it perfectly with the shot from :50 to :54, but you never used it anywhere else throughout the video. (The 15 second long shot at :25 could've been a 4 second shot using rules of thirds to position interesting geometry like the guy looking at him from behind.)
Everything else you could do better will come with more practice, keep up the good work. :)
[QUOTE=Naelstrom;48063055]Fair warning: Facepunch isn't very good at being constructive about videos, try not to react negatively to anyone in the thread please.
To be honest, it has pacing issues. As a general rule a shot should never last more than 4 seconds. Nearly every shot you had was at or over 4 seconds long. With your longest shot being over 15 seconds long (holyshit).
You could easily break up the shots with more camera angle changes or shorter animations.
Also shots where you move the camera a lot could probably be better with still camera shots at varied angles and positions (like the shot from :50 to :54).
You should really never use a black screen as it's own shot either. Black is very boring and distracting. At :45 you literally make the screen black for a full 3 seconds. At first I thought it was a mistake, but you make the screen black at other points too, it's definitely a "tool" you should never use again. There's other ways to space and pace a video.
Finally incorporating the rule of thirds is pretty important in shots. You surprisingly nailed it perfectly with the shot from :50 to :54, but you never used it anywhere else throughout the video. (The 15 second long shot at :25 could've been a 4 second shot using rules of thirds to position interesting geometry like the guy looking at him from behind.)
Everything else you could do better will come with just making more videos, keep up the good work. :)[/QUOTE]
Yes indeed I really made an excessive use of the black screen, it is a little my " Way to fill, when I had no idea "
Several times I am afraid of copying too much to videos already made.
But thank you, I would pay more attention in the future!
It is really very nice people who tries to use as you!
i must admit, i liked it, it wasn't funny in the sense of "LMAO AHAHAHAHA XDDDDDDDDDDDDD" but I took a couple of giggles.
[QUOTE=Dark RaveN;48063198]i must admit, i liked it, it wasn't funny in the sense of "LMAO AHAHAHAHA XDDDDDDDDDDDDD" but I took a couple of giggles.[/QUOTE]
So, IT'S FUCKINGG NICE if you had fit of the giggles
I loved the video but accidentally rated dumb I'm sorry.
EDIT: And no I'm not being sarcastic.
[QUOTE=AhoyMate;48063343]I loved the video but accidentally rated dumb I'm sorry.
EDIT: And no I'm not being sarcastic.[/QUOTE]
you can undo that, just re-rate it to whatever you want
[U]Thx you guys ![/U]
[B]I am really happy you like this ![/B]
:rock:
By the way, I forgot the feedback part: you should start working more on your animation.
I laughed, I thought it was pretty good!
[QUOTE=Dark RaveN;48064136]By the way, I forgot the feedback part: you should start working more on your animation.[/QUOTE]
Ok i will try to be better i promess ^^
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