Gonzalo the Chicken

[captinchikin]

I took a stupid pun and made a slight storyline out of it, and now I plan to do a prequel series.

[video=youtube;-95Ve4YZsp0]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-95Ve4YZsp0[/video]

What do you guys think? Criticism is welcomed, it'll only make the series better.

[Xieneus]

I have no clue what just happened.

RIP Gonzalo

[captinchikin]

[QUOTE=Xieneus;45242552]I have no clue what just happened.

RIP Gonzalo[/QUOTE]
The idea of the series is that 75% of it shouldn't make sense, so I guess this is progress. And I well send his family your rip in peace wishes.

[ClarkWasHere]

[QUOTE=captinchikin;45242579]The idea of the series is that 75% of it shouldn't make sense, so I guess this is progress. And I well send his family your rip in peace wishes.[/QUOTE]

Well, when you want to make something funny by not making any sense, you need it to make sense in a weird way. When it just doesn't make sense, it's not funny at all.

If you want to create a captivating story that people want to follow, the first thing you need to do is hook them into the story. Create likable characters and a plot that creates intrigue or mystery that'll make people want to keep watching.

And no child actors. At. All.

[Zuimzado]

-reads title-

So is this the son of Gonzo and Camilla the Chicken?

[captinchikin]

[QUOTE=ClarkWasHere;45242707]Well, when you want to make something funny by not making any sense, you need it to make sense in a weird way. When it just doesn't make sense, it's not funny at all.

If you want to create a captivating story that people want to follow, the first thing you need to do is hook them into the story. Create likable characters and a plot that creates intrigue or mystery that'll make people want to keep watching.

And no child actors. At. All.[/QUOTE]
Well, as for the actors part, my brother as the second person is what I'm stuck with. If I could change that part I would. And I don't feel like it makes [I]no[/I] sense, it's pretty easy to figure out that the sink killed the chicken and a stupid pun made him arrive at my door. That second section is what really helps though, thank you. I'll try to focus on that for writing the next one.