This is the second army base I have made, I think it is a great improvement since the first.
Please give me feedback as I may make another video.
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pRB1nKuJqDE[/media]
Constructive criticism is hardly rating someone dumb now is it. Please, I would like to have some feedback.
GrassyBat, giving someone a box is not criticism.
It's just PHX squares, nothing special.
[QUOTE=ZapDing;25619473]It's just PHX squares, nothing special.[/QUOTE]
The video.
Also don't look at what it is made of, it is what it is meant to be.
Your criticism is not that of high standard.
[QUOTE=joshdasmif;25619564]The video.[/QUOTE] Half of the video is pointless credits and music. The rest of the video bored me. The music doesn't fit at all.
[QUOTE=GrassyBat;25619684]Half of the video is pointless credits and music. The rest of the video bored me. The music doesn't fit at all.[/QUOTE]
How does the music not fit?
Explain to me why it does not and tell me what you would put there instead.
Just because you don't like the music does not mean it does not fit.
[QUOTE=joshdasmif;25619718]How does the music not fit?
Explain to me why it does not and tell me what you would put there instead.
Just because you don't like the music does not mean it does not fit.[/QUOTE] Some random crappy pop song does not fit bland combat footage. I would never make a video like this anyways, but something that you would hear in a combat-oriented game would be good. I'm sure you have played a game that has "epic" background music for battles.
[QUOTE=GrassyBat;25619823]Some random crappy pop song does not fit bland combat footage. I would never make a video like this anyways, but something that you would hear in a combat-oriented game would be good. I'm sure you have played a game that has "epic" background music for battles.[/QUOTE]
Pop song? It is not pop, it is trance.
Not many people would make a video like this but when you have a lot of spare time on your hands you think of a lot of things to do. The video is not completely combat orientated, it is basically showing you around the base and giving you a small but adequate combat preview.
Bear in mind this is the second video I have ever made as well.
[QUOTE=joshdasmif;25619903]Pop song? It is not pop, it is trance.
Not many people would make a video like this but when you have a lot of spare time on your hands you think of a lot of things to do. The video is not completely combat orientated, it is basically showing you around the base and giving you a small but adequate combat preview.[/QUOTE]
His point still stands; the question shouldn't be "Just because you don't like the music does not mean it does not fit" but "Just because you like the music does not mean it fits" and it doesn't all. The video itself is boring as nothing is happening, and the 'ending' shouldn't take 2 whole minutes especially if the video itself is around 4 minutes, actually it shouldn't take more than 10 seconds. You can also skip the introduction at the beginning, it's annoying.
Basically the video is pretty bad and beyond boring, use this constructive criticism if you want, but try doing something more interesting instead of some bases that I can find on an advance dupe on garrysmod.org
[editline]24th October 2010[/editline]
[QUOTE=joshdasmif;25619903][b]bear[/b] in mind this is the second video I have ever made as well.[/QUOTE]
That's not a valid excuse, it doesn't make your video appear better.
[QUOTE=Plastical;25620315]His point still stands; the question shouldn't be "Just because you don't like the music does not mean it does not fit" but "Just because you like the music does not mean it fits" and it doesn't all. The video itself is boring as nothing is happening, and the 'ending' shouldn't take 2 whole minutes especially if the video itself is around 4 minutes, actually it shouldn't take more than 10 seconds. You can also skip the introduction at the beginning, it's annoying.
Basically the video is pretty bad and beyond boring, use this constructive criticism if you want, but try doing something more interesting instead of some bases that I can find on an advance dupe on garrysmod.org[/QUOTE]
You are not wrong there, I do like the music but I put it there because the song is about zombies.
Nothing is meant to happen it is not a story or a machinima, it is simply a view of my base.
The last 2 minutes is for anyone who would like to listen to the rest of the final song, putting a 30 second piece of the music would not fit very well.
If you didn't like the video because you found it boring then that is fine, I feel as though I should raise the face that this is only the second video I have ever made.
I could make a video about anything but I have not got any inspiration for anything else so instead I resorted to doing it on my base which would make deciding whether you want to download my dupe or not easier.
That is the point to the video.
Please tell me this video is a joke
Wow triple post.
No the video is not a joke, does it look like a joke?
[editline]24th October 2010[/editline]
[QUOTE=Plastical;25620315]That's not a valid excuse, it doesn't make your video appear better.[/QUOTE]
It is not meant to make is appeal, it is just that most of you are expecting hollywood quality entertainment.
It looks like a joke. And you being butthurt about this sounds like a joke.
Hey guys give me constructive criticism, so i can make up excuses why your opinion is wrong.
You could just name the songs used in the credits, and the viewers will just look it them on their own.
Here's another advice, learn how to use Source Recorder for Source games instead of Fraps, because the final output is much smoother, especially when there's a lot of action going on the screen like explosions and whatnot.
[QUOTE=Demolitions2;25620657]It looks like a joke. And you being butthurt about this sounds like a joke.[/QUOTE]
What? No.
Please try and criticise rather than petty trolling.
[editline]24th October 2010[/editline]
[QUOTE=Plastical;25620663]You could just name the songs used in the credits, and the viewers will just look it them on their own.
Here's another advice, learn how to use Source Recorder for Source games instead of Fraps, because the final output is much smoother, especially when there's a lot of action going on the screen like explosions and whatnot.[/QUOTE]
Yeah thanks, I was looking for something a little faster than FRAPS but I couldn't find anything.
I will get source recorder now as a matter of fact.
[editline]24th October 2010[/editline]
Source recorder is built in? Cool. I did not know this, now to figure out how to use it.
[QUOTE=joshdasmif;25620677]What? No.
Please try and criticise rather than petty trolling.[/QUOTE]
That's exactly what I'm talking about. You want criticism? Fine.
Your movie was absolutely horrible. There was no point to it, making it INCREDIBLY boring to watch. The ending was terrible, and way drawn out. The music was completely unfitting, and stuck out so bad i had to mute it half way through. There was little to no direction anywhere in it, you just slapped a bunch of stuff together, then put music to it. And on that you didn't seem to put much effort into this at ALL. You just took the LAZY way in making a movie, then hide behind the excuse "OH ITS ONLY MY FIRST VIDEO".
Who gives a shit what video number it is? I've seen first and second videos that were 100 times better than someone's 50th video. you know why? Because they didn't make excuses. They actually learned how to make it good, instead of slapping a shit video together just to get people to say "WOW YOU'RE SO GOOD" as soon as possible. You want people to voice their opinions, and tell you how it is. But you're too immature to take what people are saying and learn from it. You only want to hear praise, and call anyone who speaks otherwise a troll.
If that's how you react, and think so highly of yourself then please DON'T make another video, or at the least don't post anymore here.
Gosh i'm so trolllllll guiseee.
[QUOTE=Demolitions2;25620954]That's exactly what I'm talking about. You want criticism? Fine.
Your movie was absolutely horrible. There was no point to it, making it INCREDIBLY boring to watch. The ending was terrible, and way drawn out. The music was completely unfitting, and stuck out so bad i had to mute it half way through. There was little to no direction anywhere in it, you just slapped a bunch of stuff together, then put music to it. And on that you didn't seem to put much effort into this at ALL. You just took the LAZY way in making a movie, then hide behind the excuse "OH ITS ONLY MY FIRST VIDEO".
Who gives a shit what video number it is? I've seen first and second videos that were 100 times better than someone's 50th video. you know why? Because they didn't make excuses. They actually learned how to make it good, instead of slapping a shit video together just to get people to say "WOW YOU'RE SO GOOD" as soon as possible. You want people to voice their opinions, and tell you how it is. But you're too immature to take what people are saying and learn from it. You only want to hear praise, and call anyone who speaks otherwise a troll.
If that's how you react, and think so highly of yourself then please DON'T make another video, or at the least don't post anymore here.
Gosh i'm so trolllllll guiseee.[/QUOTE]
1. This was not a movie.
2. There is a point to it, to show you my base.
3. It's boring if you are expecting a movie.
4. The ending was to let you listen to the rest of the final song.
5. The music was not unfitting, the woman was singing about a zombie.
6. There was direction, look at point number 2.
7. I didn't slap a bunch of stuff together and put music to it, this video took me 2 months of perfecting it as a matter of fact.
8. I put a lot of effort into it, look at point number 7.
9. I didn't make a movie, I made a video.
10. I didn't hide behind the excuse "OH ITS ONLY MY FIRST VIDEO" I actually did not type in full caps and this is my second video, learn to read.
11. You have seen better videos? Okay.
12. I didn't call everyone else a troll, I said you made a petty attempt at trolling. Which you did.
13. Who said I think highly of myself? You are making this up as you go along aren't you?
14. Now who sounds butthurt?
[QUOTE=joshdasmif;25621245] 14. Now who sounds butthurt?[/QUOTE] You do.
[QUOTE=GrassyBat;25621564]You do.[/QUOTE]
Oh really, I don't think that is quite right.
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[QUOTE=joshdasmif;25621245]1. This was not a movie.
2. There is a point to it, to show you my base.
3. It's boring if you are expecting a movie.
4. The ending was to let you listen to the rest of the final song.
5. The music was not unfitting, the woman was singing about a zombie.
6. There was direction, look at point number 2.
7. I didn't slap a bunch of stuff together and put music to it, this video took me 2 months of perfecting it as a matter of fact.
8. I put a lot of effort into it, look at point number 7.
9. I didn't make a movie, I made a video.
10. I didn't hide behind the excuse "OH ITS ONLY MY FIRST VIDEO" I actually did not type in full caps and this is my second video, learn to read.
11. You have seen better videos? Okay.
12. I didn't call everyone else a troll, I said you made a petty attempt at trolling. Which you did.
13. Who said I think highly of myself? You are making this up as you go along aren't you?
14. Now who sounds butthurt?[/QUOTE]
Oh god now I'm laughing. You have to be trolling.
[QUOTE=Demolitions2;25621648]Oh god now I'm laughing. You have to be trolling.[/QUOTE]
Nope, I am stating the facts, you want another fact? Your not actually laughing. :v:
Josh i used to have some respect for you from some of your older posts, but the fact that you can't accept any criticism is just terrible. Instead of changing things you are arguing that you made it properly, when really some of them bring up incredibly valid points.
[editline]24th October 2010[/editline]
Also, the "footage" you took is terrible. You need to take things in multiple shots, instead you are just flying overhead taking everything in one big shot.
You could've at least used the color tool to color the squares.
[QUOTE=joshdasmif;25619564]
Your criticism is not that of high standard.[/QUOTE]
Neither is your video/base.
Shit video, let's give him a boxfo-OH WAIT
Oh wow. The thread itself is better then the video :v:
Okay, I have taken a look back on this thread and I realise that I was being quite a little bitch. However, I have now taken a look at these posts imagining I was talking to an actual movie director.
He would probably have said a lot worse things to me about my video so I guess the next time I make a video I will come to this thread.
I especially like the point by bomber who said: "You need to take things in multiple shots, instead you are just flying overhead taking everything in one big shot." I do believe that this point will become a very valuable one.
Also, Demolitions2 sorry for being a cunt. It's just me I am afraid, the large hint is the avatar.
I also seem to have made GrassyBat leave without giving much criticism probably because he knew this was going to happen.
The main reason I was so pissed it because I took 2 months to make this video, all my friends said it was good but then I realised they were all fucking lying to me and that the truth was that it was shit.
I am going to jot down all these points and thank you for giving them, this will indeed help me in the future.
The level of feedback required to make this video good is extreme.
How did this video take 2 months to make?
I built better when I took a shit.
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