Video about a guy that has to live with a Superhero. A bit like adsf movies. Hope you enjoy! I created it so any constructive criticism would be nice.
[video=youtube;ImN_GAFwgOk]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ImN_GAFwgOk[/video]
the idea has a nice bit of potential.
The pacing is waaaay too slow, though, as is a lot of the animation.
jokes need a setup and a payoff, and currently you're only throwing the payoffs in there. timing is also one of the most important things you need to keep in mind, and like hybridtheory said, it's just way too slow.
if i were you, i'd have made the whole thing into a single segment instead of cutting from one joke to the other. they'd be having a regular conversation and the jokes would be more sudden and unexpected, say, with the superhero getting up to go to the kitchen, out of frame, and throwing the bottle as soon as the guy asks for one, or with the guy's girlfriend walking in and the superhero saying she's cheating on him right away.
the last part of those gags would come at the end of the episode with, for example, the guy walking in on the girlfriend and the superhero in bed, yelling at them and being interrupted by the bottle flying into the room from the opposite direction
I personally hate the TV static between scenes in videos. It's loud and irritating. Overall, the quality of graphics and the way the camera worked seemed really nice. The animation itself was a bit slow, and there wasn't a lot of emotion in the voice acting (Which is kind of irrelevant, because I'd rather discuss the animation itself, but I just wanted to mention it). If you made the motions a bit more 'to the point' I think it'd dramatically increase the general mood of it. Overall I think it's pretty great.
Thanks for the criticism guys. I've got two very different responses. One for more of a story and the other for quicker jokes. I'm going to take it all into account for the next one but I'm trying to work out which will be more of a benefit. The animation is 12fps, i'm actually unsure why I chose this frame rate. I'll boost it to 24fps and speed the animation up to make it look more 'fluid'.
He should live with the guy from Saw next or a jedi
[QUOTE=jameslove1;46952949]Thanks for the criticism guys. I've got two very different responses. One for more of a story and the other for quicker jokes. [/QUOTE]
Please don't confuse yourself by thinking those criticisms are contradictory. When we say "quicker jokes" we mean pretty much every motion or thought your character makes is too drawn out and it makes the overall pacing terribly slow which hinders comedic timing. Definitely didn't mean for you to take it as "less time between jokes".
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