So I made a fan made film machinima and I would like some feedback

[mousedroidz21]

So I decided to make a fan made film type of video. You can watch my 26 minute movie here:

[video=youtube;_I9WrpbdM8c]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_I9WrpbdM8c[/video]

Now I haven't used facepunch in a long time but I think I need to share my video to all you guys, the main thing I really want is feedback because it improves everything when I make a new machinima.

the film is a fan made Hitman film and it's called Hitman: Testimonial If you've played hitman: contracts you'll understand some of the events in this machinima, heres a quick summary of the video:

Testimonial is taking place during the events of hitman contracts when agent 47 is hallucinating. Eventually his bullet wound gets worse and his mind changes and he now thinks he is in a parallel universe. In this universe 47 kills targets that his mind is commanding him to do instead of the agency, and what he doesn't know is that the people he is killing may not even exist.

Here are also a few things you should know about this film:

-all voices where in speakonia, I couldn't find any voice actors
-the video is playable in 1080p HD
-the game used for this is blockland
-all songs in the video are from Jesper Kyd's hitman contracts and blood money soundtracks

So if you've seen it, please tell me if it was good, bad and what I need to improve on.

Thanks for reading

[HoodedSniper]

Just gonna warn you now, I hope you can take criticism well.

[Bora]

amazing 10/10

[urundeadmom]

I just don't understand why you would use this game to make machinima, it just reminds me of how everyone who is 12 does "machinima" of minecraft.

[Makzu]

Heh, brings me back to the old days of machinema, when not everything was perfect but the creators kept going anyway. That was dedication.

Anyway, the voices could have been a lot louder, i could not hear them in several parts.

[Mark364]

I am not sure why this exists.

[Stimich]

Like Makzu said: the voices should be a lot louder, as it's the thing the viewer should be focusing on, not the rain or the thunder. I've only seen 5 minutes in,
but so far the most obvious is the camera panning, some weird camera angles, the audio issues where the SFX are louder than the voices and some awkward cuts.
If you're thinking of continuing doing this I would recommend you study some film production theory.

[Greendead]

Boring

[Olanov]

Agent 47 was shot by a police office. Damn. You rarely hear of these events.

[hybrid_theory]

[QUOTE=Mark364;48937069]I am not sure why this exists.[/QUOTE]

not like people create for fun or anything

[Arfbarf]

So what's with the Yaranaika face?