basically it takes place on gm atomic where there's the rebels vs the combine, and the rebels are gathering money to buy good guns and cars when the combines make an idea to steal money from them so they can't buy good guns and cars.. except theres a twist, basically one of the rebels you find out at the end that he's a combine that was sent in under secret agnet but he likes the rebels so he joins them and is helping protect the money
do you like the story? i could use some constructive criticism. and anyone who would like to help me film this should add me on steam.
be carful ppl might steal this. You never know there are some vultures out there.
[QUOTE=faolco1;23816395]be carful ppl might steal this. You never know there are some vultures out there.[/QUOTE]
its early in development that's only a taste of what this will be
how much of money will they have?
i hope you're being sarcastic, that's extremely stereotypical
actually it's like Avatar, replace the blue people by "rebels" and the humans by "combine"
[QUOTE=Max of S2D;23823029]i hope you're being sarcastic, that's extremely stereotypical
actually it's like Avatar, replace the blue people by "rebels" and the humans by "combine"[/QUOTE]
okay, do you have any suggestions to make it better?
[QUOTE=FumplesAlt;23825332]okay, do you have any suggestions to make it better?[/QUOTE]
i recomend u maek it so the rebel r reallty programmed bye the combine. But the rebels go against they're prugrumming and fight hte combine anyway. Its a great plot twist.
[QUOTE=FumplesAlt;23825332]okay, do you have any suggestions to make it better?[/QUOTE]
perhaps something more than a simple "lol i change my alliance" for the character
Seems like something done to many times.
I have another story that's the citizens vs the government. Should I do that?
[quote=fumplesalt;23838824]i have another story that's the citizens vs the government. Should i do that?[/quote]
hl2
redo citizen kane while you're at it, would you kindly
You should do a film where everyone from this forum site meet up and beat the shit into this dumbass called Kurit?
i like it it rly originalk
[QUOTE=GodlyT;23870844]You should do a film where everyone from this forum site meet up and beat the shit into this dumbass called Kurit?[/QUOTE]
[QUOTE=GodlyT;23870844]You should do a film where everyone from this forum site meet up and beat the shit into this dumbass called Kurit?[/QUOTE]
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[QUOTE=GodlyT;23870844]You should do a film where everyone from this forum site meet up and beat the shit into this dumbass called Kurit?[/QUOTE]
you've found your storyline
don't forget to include allies for Kurit
like Mr. Anisotropy but ultimately he betrays him at the end, frustrated that Kurit never actually knew what "anisotropy" was
I'll have his unknown enemy "Resolution" because in one of his endeavors Fumples asked Kurit what his resolution was and Kurit did not know what monitor resolution is.
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