[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fm2IA2EBP50[/media]
[b]EDIT: NEW VIDEO IS UP -- ADJUSTED THE VOLUME AND ADDED A MISSING VOICE TRACK[/b]
Sorry about the volume inconsistencies with the people's voices, when I dragged the clips over into the trailer's project file it screwed with some of them. It will be fine on the full movie.
The music is too loud
I'm going to go back and do a second edit -- too many complaints about the audio.
Captain comedy lines are bad, you may need to have them re-recorded.
the editing was bad to IE the pacing
IE the meaningless space shot at 1 minute in was too long.
the posing too at some points..
IE the black guy reviving, and the guy holding he clip board being green screen..
and use some color correction on a few shots, hell use it just on the green screen so the guy isn't bright bright purple and yelling "green screening was used right here, and quite hastily too"
Audio
Greenscreening
pacing
is my major issue here.
[QUOTE=ScoutKing;24793515]Captain comedy lines are bad, you may need to have them re-recorded.
the editing was bad to IE the pacing
IE the meaningless space shot at 1 minute in was too long.
the posing too at some points..
IE the black guy reviving, and the guy holding he clip board being green screen..
and use some color correction on a few shots, hell use it just on the green screen so the guy isn't bright bright purple and yelling "green screening was used right here, and quite hastily too"
Audio
Greenscreening
pacing
is my major issue here.[/QUOTE]
Lol ok
Looks pretty cool.
I laughed at the end though...
Stay... Away... Fff.
Fiddlesticks, that editing was seriously awful by your standards
GLINT EVERYWHERE
ALIASING EVERYWHERE
Piss-poor compositing (although I applaud your choice of background assets)
And to top it all, at the end, LENS FLARE ([del]which makes everything better[/del])
Also, I feel I must mention that the music was over-the-top... way over-the-top.
I'd give it a 6/10
[QUOTE=Max of S2D;24798830]Fiddlesticks, that editing was seriously awful by your standards
GLINT EVERYWHERE
ALIASING EVERYWHERE
Piss-poor compositing (although I applaud your choice of background assets)
And to top it all, at the end, LENS FLARE ([del]which makes everything better[/del])
Also, I feel I must mention that the music was over-the-top... way over-the-top.
I'd give it a 6/10[/QUOTE]
The only excuse I'll give you was for the editing. I've never cut a trailer before, and so I just did my best dragging clips into it. I have to take 10-ish minutes (at this point that's how much i've finished) and condense it into two minutes, so it just makes it somewhat difficult :P
The rest, alright.
A lot of people have made this mistake. The citizen's uniform turns blue when a chroma key is involved. Use a MAGENTA screen if you have to but why does everyone do this?
[QUOTE=The Robster;24818248]A lot of people have made this mistake. The citizen's uniform turns blue when a chroma key is involved. Use a MAGENTA screen if you have to but why does everyone do this?[/QUOTE]
its really easy to fix, takes 2 minutes.
ive told fumples how to fix it, its just laziness.
[QUOTE=ScoutKing;24829423]its really easy to fix, takes 2 minutes.
ive told fumples how to fix it, its just laziness.[/QUOTE]
No, I know how to fix it, but here's the thing:
It's the difference between purple and blue during a 30 second scene. It's not really a huge issue in my book.
[QUOTE=FumplesAlt;24829743]No, I know how to fix it, but here's the thing:
It's the difference between purple and blue during a 30 second scene. It's not really a huge issue in my book.[/QUOTE]
its a sign of fucking laziness, its a fluke everyone makes due to them not putting effort forwards.
heres a common example
a hud is shown for 5 seconds.
its a common problem
its a sign of laziness
and it is commonly due to people not putting effort forward.
the fix for the purple shits is just as easy as using a command in console to remove the hud.
fix your mistakes, stop trying to make excuse's
[QUOTE=ScoutKing;24832664]its a sign of fucking laziness, its a fluke everyone makes due to them not putting effort forwards.
heres a common example
a hud is shown for 5 seconds.
its a common problem
its a sign of laziness
and it is commonly due to people not putting effort forward.
the fix for the purple shits is just as easy as using a command in console to remove the hud.
fix your mistakes, stop trying to make excuse's[/QUOTE]
Okay, now let's look back at Meet the Zombine thread.
Someone says:
[url]http://www.facepunch.com/showpost.php?p=24023723&postcount=7[/url]
You respond with:
[url]http://www.facepunch.com/showpost.php?p=24023867&postcount=8[/url]
Sorry, don't accept criticism from hypocrites.
Maybe before you tell people to fix their mistakes and don't make excuses, you should fix your own mistakes and don't make excuses. You're pathetic, buddy.
[QUOTE=FumplesAlt;24832947]Okay, now let's look back at Meet the Zombine thread.
Someone says:
[url]http://www.facepunch.com/showpost.php?p=24023723&postcount=7[/url]
You respond with:
[url]http://www.facepunch.com/showpost.php?p=24023867&postcount=8[/url]
Sorry, don't accept criticism from hypocrites.
Maybe before you tell people to fix their mistakes and don't make excuses, you should fix your own mistakes and don't make excuses. You're pathetic, buddy.[/QUOTE]
I don't try and claim my trailers are "EIPIC" (sic)
stop trying to take shit i said to a troll, hypocritical or not, you're being lazy.
Fumples. I respect the fact that the trailer was put together from a collaboration of a much longer piece. I will admit this was not your best entry. The one voice actor was not good; he needs to redo his lines. If the whole film is like this, you need to redo it. I will not lie. I am a fan of your work, and will always be. I have to agree with scoutking tho. You are being lazy, for the trailer at least. Remember Fumples. Its not what you want, its the consumer. As a consumer I am telling you this.
Good luck with the project.
Hello people I can't be arsed to make a color correction fix for my chroma keying then saving it as a preset I could easily drag on all the clips that need to be fixed
My name is Fumples
Thanks the the words, Mendel. While I will agree that the trailer was not cut well, I can assure all of you that the completed product will be much better paced, edited and such.
As for the voice, I cannot do anything about it. There's nothing WRONG with it, however if you're unhappy with it that's not my problem :)
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As for color correction, I've used it in almost every scene, however I must have accidentally skipped past it while editing the movie. I understand that it's a different color than it should be, but it's not particularly a sign of laziness. I work hard to make my films the best I can make them. I'm not being lazy. Also, I'm a somewhat colorblind so I don't really see the shirt being purple.. :P
[QUOTE=FumplesAlt;24838546]I did do color correction for most of the movie[/QUOTE]
really
i didn't notice it
[QUOTE=FumplesAlt;24838546]Only scene I forgot to do was the purple shirt scenes and you guys seem to think that that's the most important part of the movie, LOL[/QUOTE]
we didn't say it was the most important part, but when you're trying to do something that looks like a movie, every single little detail counts
[QUOTE=Max of S2D;24838595]really
i didn't notice it
we didn't say it was the most important part, but when you're trying to do something that looks like a movie, every single little detail counts[/QUOTE]
It's there.
And every detail counts, but last time I checked someone's shirt doesn't need to be a specific color. Do you criticize a movie because you don't like the protagonist's shirt? Not really.
[QUOTE=FumplesAlt;24838676]And every detail counts, but last time I checked someone's shirt doesn't need to be a specific color.[/QUOTE]
"hey look everyone my shirt just changed its color when depth of field appeared"
[QUOTE=Max of S2D;24840191]"hey look everyone my shirt just changed its color when depth of field appeared"[/QUOTE]
Different environment. Different lighting. Anyways that scene as you'll find out in the movie is not actually real.
[editline]08:34PM[/editline]
[QUOTE=Mendelevius;24833561]Remember Fumples. Its not what you want, its the consumer. As a consumer I am telling you this.
Good luck with the project.[/QUOTE]
Thought I'd point out that this is wrong, wrong, wrong, wrong and wrong.
I make a film, I make it because I want to make it. So do any of you here like Avatar? James Cameron listened to consumers and he made that movie. I'm sure none of you here liked it for the exact reason that James Cameron tried appealing to the general public.
So I don't mean to offend you, but it's not what you want. You don't get what you want. I get what I want the film to be, regardless of any of your opinions.
good luck with your project man
also, why are you overusing the Male 07 models?
I'm not much of a video guy, but I die a little inside every time I see citizen uniforms being used in a sci-fi environment. The reskin of your main character looks like it came straight from 2005, it really kills the environment you're trying to create.
I mean, I've made stuff that can be used [url=http://www.garrysmod.org/downloads/?a=view&id=109436]specifically for this purpose.[/url]
Besides that, most of the things I saw wrong have already been addressed, and it was better then most of the stuff here.
Clearly you're all intimidated by Fumples' e-peen
Also, I don't think you guys get the fact this is a fucking Machinima. He made it for fun, and he doesn't get paid, he does it in his own spare time. It does not have to be fucking perfect. Admittedly it would be nice, but everyone makes mistakes in their movies. And if you don't, then you clearly have too much time on your hands.
[QUOTE=GodlyT;24847748]He made it for fun, and he doesn't get paid, he does it in his own spare time. It does not have to be fucking perfect.[/QUOTE]
Pretty much.
I don't even make this for YouTube popularity. I make it just because it's fun making them. You guys completely remove the 'just for fun' aspect of it and act like this is a serious production. Which it is, to some extent, but not to the extent that it's being taken. Sorry, you guys are still on a forum talking shit about a 16 year old's video that he works on when he's not at school. We're not in Paramount's studios here.
Enjoy the video, that's all I ask. Okay, I made a character's the wrong color. So? What are you going to do, shave a point off of your bullshit little rating scale because of it?
Entertain me some more, I dare you.
I agree with Godly's statement.
Granted, when posting in a forum like this, you're pretty much telling people to post criticism (even though nowhere did I see you ask for it), and a lot of people don't know how to deliver constructive criticism without putting some kind of offense in (or in Lt_C's case, shamelessly plugging his own work, although the uniforms are quite nice).
That being said, great job, I say. Perfect? No, but very much worth watching. Certainly better than my own GMOD skills.
[QUOTE=FumplesAlt;24847973]Pretty much.
I don't even make this for YouTube popularity. I make it just because it's fun making them. You guys completely remove the 'just for fun' aspect of it and act like this is a serious production. Which it is, to some extent, but not to the extent that it's being taken. Sorry, you guys are still on a forum talking shit about a 16 year old's video that he works on when he's not at school. We're not in Paramount's studios here.
Enjoy the video, that's all I ask. Okay, I made a character's the wrong color. So? What are you going to do, shave a point off of your bullshit little rating scale because of it?
Entertain me some more, I dare you.[/QUOTE]
well you are spending a lot of time into it, it would be nice if you didn't fixed some easy mistakes.
also again stop making excuses
also I think you do care a little about the quality of your movies
[editline]12:25AM[/editline]
[QUOTE=Docnfoid;24850939]I agree with Godly's statement.
Granted, when posting in a forum like this, you're pretty much telling people to post criticism (even though nowhere did I see you ask for it), and a lot of people don't know how to deliver constructive criticism without putting some kind of offense in (or in Lt_C's case, shamelessly plugging his own work, although the uniforms are quite nice).
That being said, great job, I say. Perfect? No, but very much worth watching. Certainly better than my own GMOD skills.[/QUOTE]
you scream faolco1 alt.
Im talking about the mistakes, the consumer doesn't want to see that; It turns a lot of people off. You said the actual movie will be better, and I have no doubt that it will be. Like you I do this as a hobby and out of my own time, so I have to respect that. As I said I really enjoy your work and I am sure this entry will be no different.
Your DOP is superb, you know what you are doing and the time you devote to your work is why I am such a fan.
[QUOTE=Docnfoid;24850939]I agree with Godly's statement.
Granted, when posting in a forum like this, you're pretty much telling people to post criticism (even though nowhere did I see you ask for it), and a lot of people don't know how to deliver constructive criticism without putting some kind of offense in (or in Lt_C's case, shamelessly plugging his own work, although the uniforms are quite nice).[/QUOTE]
Thank you for being realistic. I understand it's not perfect, I am not being serious. And Lt_C WAS plugging his own work, but still it's actually pretty good. I may use it later, may not.
[editline]02:00AM[/editline]
[QUOTE=Mendelevius;24851656]Im talking about the mistakes, the consumer doesn't want to see that; It turns a lot of people off. You said the actual movie will be better, and I have no doubt that it will be. Like you I do this as a hobby and out of my own time, so I have to respect that. As I said I really enjoy your work and I am sure this entry will be no different.
Your DOP is superb, you know what you are doing and the time you devote to your work is why I am such a fan.[/QUOTE]
Okay, I understand what you mean now. I thought you meant how the film was going to be made. Thanks for the word.
[editline]02:01AM[/editline]
[QUOTE=ScoutKing;24851190]you scream faolco1 alt.[/QUOTE]
don't call bloody murder on someone who has a different opinion than you do, it's not mat
I was advertising, no doubt, but it's frustrating when I and other custom content creators put a great deal of effort into something and the target audience doesn't even know it exists.
I wasn't, however, telling you that the selection of default models was bad because I want you to use my stuff, it was bad because it just doesn't fit with the story and can ruin the aesthetics of the piece. Use whatever you find; there is always something in the releases section that will fit the bill. Half of the props and characters from mass effect have recently been released, they'd work great for this. Take a look in the screenshot and comics sections. Nothing that people put great effort into used all vanilla models.
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