Hats - The Poem

[Gamefinisher]

Hats

You helped us when we were Irish and poor
You opened our lifes just like opening a door
Our lives were great with you by our side
Enemies were shocked and taken by a ride

Idling helped us aquire you
It seperated the ranks between our crew
There were many different sizes and shapes
There were misc items too, sadly no fashionable capes

Then valve took idling away
The new hat, the halo, came to stay
Our lives were never the same
Without all our hats, all our fame

The story doesn't end here
Now don't worry, there's nothing to fear
Many more great things will happen in the game
And the great creators, valve, is there name!

[NanoSquid]

[QUOTE]lifes[/QUOTE]
[QUOTE]there name[/QUOTE]

:downs:

[Machete]

I would say its pretty good, not brilliant, but good.

[Gamefinisher]

Thanks for reading guys!

[ironman17]

Not bad at all. Coupla typos here an' there, but otherwise a good job.

Speaking of TF2 creative stuff, I made a TF2 lyrical transcript based on Land Down Under by Men At Work. I dunno if it's any good, I made it a long time ago, but should I post it here for C&C?

[AutomataReturns]

[QUOTE=ironman17;22554290]Not bad at all. Coupla typos here an' there, but otherwise a good job.

Speaking of TF2 creative stuff, I made a TF2 lyrical transcript based on Land Down Under by Men At Work. I dunno if it's any good, I made it a long time ago, but should I post it here for C&C?[/QUOTE]

Command and Conquer? Sure.

Nah, I know what it means. Post it. It could be interesting.

[ironman17]

Okay, here it is.

Fort Down Under by ironman17.

Travelling with the cart on Hoodoo,
On a laggy trail, head full of voodoo,
I met a strange Medic, gave me a strange feeling,
He took me in and gave me healing.

And he said: "Do you come from ze fort down under?
Where Pyros blow and Spies plunder?
Can't you hear ze Heavies thunder?
You'd better run, you'd better take cover!" (mach schnell!)

Buying Ammo from a Heavy in Ravine,
He was the biggest man that i've ever seen,
I said, "Do you speaka my language?"
He just grinned and gave me a duplicate Sandvich.
And he said,

"I am come from fort down under,
Where scrumpy flow and Demos chunder. (hah hah!)
Can't you hear my cousins thunder?
Good time to run, good time to take cover!" (yeeeeaaaaah!)

Lying in the spawn at 2fort,
I was too stoned on Kritz to report,
I said to the Scout, "Are you trying to tempt me?
Because I come from the fort of plenty!"
And he said,

"Whoa! You come from a fort down unda? (oh yeah yeah)
Where Pyros blow and Spies plunda?
Can't ya hear them Fatties thunda?
Ya betta run, ya betta take cover!"

Livin' in a fort down under,
Where Pyros blow and Spies plunder,
Can't you hear the Heavies thunder?
You better run, you better take cover!

(repeat last verse a few times as the music fades)

Well, is it any good? Or is it a flop?

[Evanlution]

Brilliant but awful.

[ironman17]

Hmmm, I expected that kinda reaction. Any pointers to what should be tweaked?

[Meat]

Way down deep in the middle of the Congo,
A heavy took an apricot, a guava and a mango.
He stuck it with the others, and he danced a dainty tango.
The medic said, "I know, we'll call it Um Bonk-o"
Um Bonk-o, Um Bonk-o, They drink it in the Congo.
The pyro picked the passion fruit, the demoman the mandarin.
The sniper painted packets, that the whole caboodle landed in.
So when it comes to sun and fun and goodness in the jungle,
They all prefer the sunny funny one they call Um Bonk-o!