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[QUOTE=Parakon;41673379]Has Toady given any indication when the next release will be?[/QUOTE] [QUOTE]Just a few more steps and you will walk with us to the next phase in the journey.[/QUOTE] Maybe by the end of this month ?

Okay Jollybastion was giving LNP some grief, I'll be switching to Phoebus for my turn, sorry.

[QUOTE=Neo Kabuto;41673236]There's a new [URL=http://www.bay12forums.com/smf/index.php?topic=100851.msg4454200#msg4454200]Future of the Fortress[/URL] post. Apparently trees are going to be incredibly moddable and "skulls are more powerful now".[/QUOTE] so other death causes than penetrated brains? woo!

Our fortress is officially called CityCradles!! I have high fucking hopes for this one. [editline]1st August 2013[/editline] Could 2 more people request dwarfing, please? I need a couple more so I can fill out the original 7 and make fun of the lazy fucks.

I'll be a dwarf if you need one

Imagine failed lobotomies that give the dwarf instant, permanent insanity. Or suddenly unlocks the full power of the dwarf brain and allows them to use godlike spells.

[QUOTE=Trekintosh;41673931]Our fortress is officially called CityCradles!! I have high fucking hopes for this one. [editline]1st August 2013[/editline] Could 2 more people request dwarfing, please? I need a couple more so I can fill out the original 7 and make fun of the lazy fucks.[/QUOTE] You can make me into one, if you want. Just tell me how horribly I die.

Requesting dwarfing as Logarithm

After Lijitsu, I guess :v: Edit: Wait, what happened to automerge

I volunteer for dwarfing as well.

[QUOTE=APinAP;41675992]After Lijitsu, I guess :v: Edit: Wait, what happened to automerge[/QUOTE] We posted right about the same time, I think it glitched and isn't sure who posted first.

If anyone would like a custom profession, preference for initial profession, or gender, please let me know. Otherwise I give you an embarrassing title that reflects your job while making fun if you. :v:

ohgod this kinda fell apart last time we did this but fuckit lets do this shit. YEARHH [editline]1st August 2013[/editline] I'll opt for whatever title you give me. :v:

I just had a competent hammerdwarf smash three axe goblins and come out with nothing but bruises and a single cut. [editline]1st August 2013[/editline] What else is terrifying is that he killed all three of them in less then a page of combat at the same time.

So what, is this the same thing as Boatmurdered or something?

Basically.

[B]Is everyone ready for our first official update? Well I sure as fuck ain't, but here it is anyways! :v:[/B] We arrive at The Plains of Entering in a nice pleseant temperate Grassland. There's a pleseant babbling brook here, Bulwarkline the Menace of Carnality. I'm not entirely sure I like the message, but that's ok, I wasn't paid to bring these cocksuckers out here because I like things. No, the Mountainhomes havs some grand fucking ideas for us. They said, and I'm paraphrasing ever so slightly here because they summoned me right in the middle of an exciting night with a barrel of imported fisher berry wine and an also imported elven maiden, "Go and prepare a fortress for our best and brightest mechanical engineers, you cocksucker! We'll start sending them to you as soon as we hear it's livable there, not that that will ever happen because you're a [B]cunt[/B]! In the meantime take this bumbling [I]idiot mechanic[/I] as your first 'guest of fucking honor'!" What a bunch of overpaid faggots. So here we are, approaching the border between The Plains of Entering and the Horn of Loot. Suddenly the cart throws a fucking wheel and one of the draft animals sprains its widdle ankle. "[B]Welp, WE'VE FUCKING ARRIVED, FUCKWITS! HOPE YOU FUCKING LOVE WHERE WE ARE CAUSE WE'RE HERE![/B]" [img]http://i.imgur.com/xA2kaDK.png[/img] I now shall call this place Citycradles, cause I'm such a motherfucking optimist. I hope those [B][I][U]CUNTS[/U][/I][/B] back at Kabsin are pleased with this place, cause this is where the mechanics shall be arriving. They say I have a "Deep well of patience," but I have no idea what they're talking about. [img]http://i.imgur.com/KhRRggA.png[/img] Speaking of things I don't have patience for, Scratch BrokenFingers is our resident idiot mechanic. She's a strang one, bizarrely cheerful for being on a journey to buttfuck nowhere. The dumb bitch actually enjoys working outdoors! Anyways, if this is the kind of person I have to put up with, I'm going to retire by the time the year's out. [img]http://i.imgur.com/HnX5N7s.png[/img] Kyle McUrist is the fat bastard they sent us as our military. Yes, I said that right, as our military. Not to lead our military, not to be the fattest fuck in our military, no, he IS our fucking military. Not only is he very, and I mean seriously morbidly, fat, he's also clumsy, weak, and slow to heal. And old! [B]Our military is 88 years old![/B] He's going to die very soon, but apparently he's a decent teacher, so I'll have him hide in the barracks most of the time. He also does double duty as our other miner, alongside myself. That means i get to spend tons of fucking quality time with the fucker. Fan-fucking-tastic. Have I mentioned how much I fucking enjoy being here? [I]No?[/I] [B]WELL THAT'S BECAUSE I FUCKING DON'T![/B] [img]http://i.imgur.com/5NgkENt.png[/img] Draugur is our resident hunter, whom Scratch has taken to calling the fortress "Animal Murderer." Great, not only is Scratch an idiot mechanic, but also a [I]hippy[/I]. [img]http://i.imgur.com/zeYeGDZ.png[/img] Devodier is our resident Deforestation Specialist, meaning he cuts wood. The tryhard prick is also our mason, architect, carpenter, and metalworker. [img]http://i.imgur.com/6ddoYtP.png[/img] Also we have a cook/farmer and a crafts/tradesdwarf that nobody fucking cares about. I don't even remember their names. [img]http://i.imgur.com/s12rNtV.png[/img] They're probably assholes. Anyways apparently there's some odd wildlife here or something because I found a dead wolverine corpse. [img]http://i.imgur.com/Vp2rwaf.png[/img] [I]HOLY FUCK THAT THING JUST STARTED MOVING![/I] [B][I]WHAT. THE. FUCK.[/I][/B] Are you cockslurping cuntsacks telling me that we just HAPPENED to break down in the middle of a [B]FUCKING [/B]haunted wasteland?![B] FUCK ALL OF YOU! START DIGGING NOW, WE ARE GOING INSIDE![/B] [img]http://i.imgur.com/lWX61NT.png[/img] [B]BY ARMOK'S HAIRY JIZZ-ENCRUSTED ASSHOLE, THE GRASS IS MADE OF FUCKING EYEBALLS! HOLY FUCK FUCK FUCK FUCK DIG DIG DIG DIG FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK!!![/B] [B]THE HORSE IS ACTUALLY EATING THE EYEBALL SHIT! WHAT THE FUCK![/B] [I][B]OH ARMOK SOME OF THE MORE NORMAL LOOKING GRASS JUST STARTED SQUIRMING AND REACHED OUT AND GRABBED ME!!! WHAT THE DICK? WHAT DID I DO TO DESERVE THIS?![/B][/I] [img]http://i.imgur.com/ZiipIIf.png[/img] Uh oh. I activate Kyle McUrist, the Military. [img]http://i.imgur.com/cAEGFWh.png[/img] [B]YEAH! GO FAT COCKSUCKING USELESS BASTARD![/B] So the corpse has been re-corpsified, and now Kyle McUrist has a new place in my heart as not entirely fucking useless. And get this, right after the man finishes putting that corpse back in the ground, he goes right back to mining with me! Maybe this crew isn't so bad after all. Not a bad first couple days. I've ordered Kyle to be stationed over the Wolverine Corpse so that he can strike it down whenever it gets back up. Miners have dug out the Trade Depot and main entrance hall, which is nice and long for trap usage. Sorry about the two unnamed dwarfs in this update. It was all typed and screenshotted before I got back from school. How I do?

Pretty good i'd say, but I think you relied on vivid swear words a little too much. Having creative swear words can be great but if you are constantly using them then it diminishes their effect and starts to look lazy. Use the more colourful ones only very rarely. For instance if you hadn't sworn up until the point when the wolverine came back to life and instead used a normal but slightly grumpy tone, then the outburst would be more humorous and surprising. Keep in mind this is all just my opinion and others may have entirely different ideas. You are supposed to be a dwarf afterall and those buggers can be pretty foulmouthed. But you have a character which you stuck to, and the character wasn't just reporting things but giving his own interpretation which is important, so nice job.

I suggest you start working on an atom smashing chamber for the corpses. [editline]1st August 2013[/editline] I also love starting as the first military dwarf on a haunted biome. I will either become legendary or die horribly and get reanimated.

[QUOTE=Kyle902;41680103]I suggest you start working on an atom smashing chamber for the corpses. [editline]1st August 2013[/editline] I also love starting as the first military dwarf on a haunted biome. I will either become legendary or die horribly and get reanimated.[/QUOTE] Well if the corpse is anything to go by, you're not half bad for being a fat weak slow clumsy old man.

Hey, am I on that turn list yet? If not I'd like to be.

that was embarrassing to read, constantly swearing isn't funny, and you're leaving yourself no wheres to go when shit actually happens. Focus more on being descriptive instead of trying to make every part of it as good as the best parts of other stories. Try using less pictures, you really only need a couple establishing shots and a few for when something interesting happens. Use more descriptive words, and don't repeat them often, you used pleasant twice in the first sentence and that really just set the tone to how unimaginative it was going to be.

Oh yeah with pictures if you want to use a lot, just screen cap small portions of the screen rather than the entire window, so you just include the part you want to emphasise.

I want to be cockbash, great and mighty, grandmaster biter.

And with the 'use more descriptive words and don't repeat them' you also have to be careful, you don't want to end up with lots of 'flowery' adjectives. It's always better to try and find the right noun that describes something than to add an adjective to a commonplace noun. And with the don't repeat words you have to be careful not to fall in to thesaurus syndrome which is where you refer to the same thing using like three different words in quick succession. So if you have a brochure, don't call it a leaflet in the next sentence and a pamphlet in the next. Repetition of adjectives like the example parakon gave is probably not the best idea though. Don't be discouraged, writing is complex if you want to do it well. I wouldn't say it was embarrassing to read, you just made some mistakes that a lot of casual creative writers do.

You've got the content there, so at least it's something to work with. I'm not so good with Dwarf Fortress but I'll be glad to do some editing for your writing then compile it all into a .pdf at the end.

[QUOTE=Trekintosh;41679676] How I do?[/QUOTE] You're like a kid who has just learned how to swear. I thought I'd count: cock x 4 fuck/fucking x 27 cunt x 3 faggot x 1 bitch x 1 bastard x 2 prick x 1 asshole x 2 jizz x 1 dick x 1

What graphics mod thing is that. Pretty new to this whole thing.

[QUOTE=Blockhead;41680748]What graphics mod thing is that. Pretty new to this whole thing.[/QUOTE] He said in a post near the top of this page that it was Phoebus.

I don't think you did too terrible at writing, I mean, you're clearly not a college level writer, but that's really not a terrible thing. You at least stuck to the character, and even if it was a tad vulgar and over the top in that sense, it could have been much worse.