• The Generally Just Creepy Stuff Thread V2: Hyperrealism, Content, or GTFO.
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[url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Psp9cj9LsQs[/url] remember this?
[QUOTE=UberMunchkin;30393936][media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BswkYHQSLrQ[/media] No scary, but this safety video is creepy...[/QUOTE] who was this made for?
[QUOTE=Thief;30379952]Stop acting like Morpheus you dip wit. Anyone with common knowledge of the Internet can understand that story easily.[/QUOTE] Screw off 11'er. Ghostwork, old joke is old. Get over it. [highlight](User was banned for this post ("Join date elitism / Shit posting" - Swebonny))[/highlight]
[QUOTE=SeverePapercut;30394456]who was this made for?[/QUOTE] People who want an excuse to stay off work. And accident insurance lawyers.
Time for me to make up a random creepy story... It will probably suck ass. A couple of years ago, at the start of another pointless summer, my family decided that we should get together and go someplace nice. My family, and my relatives decided we needed to get together for a "relaxing getaway" Somewhere here in California would have been my choice, but I wasn't planning this trip. A hotel located somewhere in southern Florida was our destination. I have never been to Florida myself, but i can't say wasn't looking forward to it. Everything Florida has is right here in California, and better, most likely. All the flights from Los Angeles, to Chicago, to whichever dirty airport in Florida we flew into, were too long for my comforts. I honestly paid no attention to the names of anything... I just followed my parents, and my older sister around the terminals, not paying attention to anything, or anyone. In the end, it was a long day for me. We finally arrived at the hotel, in some town, somewhere. This place we were staying at literally looked as if it was about to collapse on itself. We walked into what seemed like the lobby, and were greeted by a shady looking hotel staff. That stood there smiling with an dark glare in there eyes... There was something about this hotel... I don't know if anyone else in my family noticed it, but something was wrong here. Made more suspicious by the fact that we were the only ones staying here besides the rest of my relatives. "Welcome to the Westbrook, sir." Came the bold voice behind the reception desk. "How can i help you this evening?" The receptionist and my father discussed who was staying in what room, my sister and I got our own rooms.. Which was a good thing in my case, my sister isn't exactly the friendliest. That night however, I couldn't sleep at all. Those flights were long, and I was awake through all of them. My sleep escaped me. With nothing else to do, I flipped on the TV and surfed through the standard analog channels. They were limited to about 10, and none of them were interesting. I left the TV on, and glanced at the time from the old wooden clock barely hanging on the wall. 12:25 AM. With the TV on, I closed my eyes for any attempt at sleep. I woke up almost instantly to the sudden static of the TV... which i swear was normal when i fell asleep. The clock read 12:36 AM. Where the hell did this static come from? Maybe it was just the channel, but when i attempted to switch channels, it didn't change... The TV didn't even power off when i tried. I was about to throw something at it when suddenly it turned black... a few seconds later, it flashed back on. But i wasn't paying attention... i was staring in horror at the 4 figures that were all suddenly standing in a circle that surrounded my bed... These creatures resembled humans, but were the complete opposite. Their faces were mangled and disfigured, and were bleeding horrendously, their bodies had no shape or proportion, and twitched erratically. The creatures' limbs seemed to stretch in directions impossible. The TV blared static, louder then before.. I stared in horror, as my mind tried to process what i was witnessing... The creatures started walking towards my bed.. I yelled at the top of my lungs for anybody... No one came. The TV went out again, and when it came back, The number 318 was shining with a blank background.. 318 was the number of my hotel room. [editline]11th June 2011[/editline] Sorry for any grammer mistakes... :downswords:
[QUOTE=SeverePapercut;30393079][url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Psp9cj9LsQs[/url] remember this?[/QUOTE] Pffffft hahaha I actually have a VHS of that somewhere.
[QUOTE=Lizzrd;30335114]Stare long enough and john will become a zombie. [IMG]http://i.imgur.com/qoZKn.gif[/IMG][/QUOTE] I dont know why, but when i look at this i really get an uneasy feeling. I start to feel a bit sick and scared.
Holy shit thanks for posting this thread, this is seriously interesting .
[QUOTE=GoDLik3;30395130]Story [editline]11th June 2011[/editline] Sorry for any grammer mistakes... :downswords:[/QUOTE] Doesn't really build up to a climax, it feels like it's unfinished. You dug too fast into the creatures appearing: I didn't feel that you built up an uneasy/spooky feeling at all. It was just: -Travelling, set up -TV doesn't work -Oh shit, weird things coming towards me Before that the descriptions and lead up to the scary scene seemed really stilted, without any leading or storytelling purpose, kind of boring really. But good try, you did start building an uneasy feeling with the "oh spooky feeling about hotel" stuff, just needs some lengthening and keep it going. You just need to flesh out your descriptions like instead of "Golly this place sure makes me uneasy" maybe something like " There's something stagnant in here; even though it's just lassy and I in here, I feel as if 50 CCTV cameras have their albino eyeballs trained on my crotch. Even though there's no one else in here, my paranoia still clings to me... It smells weird too, like roasted cabbage" Even though that example's a bit silly, hopefully that explains what I mean. Oh yeah, and since you have it in a first person narritive, you might want to inject some more personality in there.. maybe some anecdotes or something.
one time I woke up with a boner I think a gay ghost raped me in my sleep
[QUOTE=Str4fe;30395887]I dont know why, but when i look at this i really get an uneasy feeling. I start to feel a bit sick and scared.[/QUOTE] I keep on expecting something to jump out at me. [editline]11th June 2011[/editline] Automerge :frown:
[QUOTE=Lizzrd;30335114]Stare long enough and john will become a zombie. [IMG]http://i.imgur.com/qoZKn.gif[/IMG][/QUOTE] I have no idea why, but the fact that it's a 3 frame gif of the same picture, makes it so much more creepier.
I just found this Creepypasta. It is a bit long, but really good. [quote]Let me start off by saying that Peter Terry was addicted to heroin. We were friends in college and continued to be after I graduated. Notice that I said “I”. He dropped out after 2 years of barely cutting it. After I moved out of the dorms and into a small apartment, I didn’t see Peter as much. We would talk online every now and them (AIM was king in pre-facebook years). There was a period where he wasn’t online for about five weeks straight. I wasn’t worried. He was a pretty notorious flake and drug addict, so I assumed he just stopped caring. But then one night I saw him come on. Before I could initiate a conversation, he sent me a message. “David, man, we need to talk.” That was when he told me about the NoEnd House. It got that name because no one had ever reached the final exit. The rules were pretty simple and cliche: reach the final room of the building and you win $500, nine rooms in all. The house was located outside the city, roughly four miles from my house. Apparently he had tried and failed. He was a heroin and who knows what the fuck addict, so I figured the drugs got the best of him and he wigged out at a paper ghost or something. He told me it would be too much for anyone. That it was unnatural. I didn’t believe him. Why would I? I told him I would check it out the next night, and no matter how hard he tried to convince me otherwise, $500 sounded too good to be true, I had to. I set out the following night. This is what happened. When I arrived, I immediately noticed something strange about the building. Have you ever seen or read something that shouldn’t be scary, but for some reason a chill crawls up your spine? I walked toward the building and the feeling of uneasiness only intensified as I opened the front door. My heart slowed and I let a relieved sigh leave me as I entered. The room looked like a normal hotel lobby decorated for Halloween. A sign was posted in place of a worker. It read “Room 1 this way. Eight more follow. Reach the end and you win!” I chuckled and made my way to the first door. The first area was almost laughable. The decor resembled the Halloween aisle of a K-Mart, complete with sheet ghosts and animatronic zombies that gave a static growl when you passed by. At the far end was an exit, the only door besides the one I entered through. I brushed through the fake spider webs and headed for the second room. I was greeted by fog as I opened the door to room 2. The room definitely upped the ante in terms of technology. Not only was there a fog machine, but a bat hung from the ceiling and flew in a circle. Scary. They seemed to have a Halloween soundtrack that one would find in a 99 cent store on loop somewhere in the room. I didn’t see a stereo, but I guessed they must have used a PA system. I stepped over a few toy rats that wheeled around and walked with a puffed chest across to the next area. I reached for the doorknob and my heart sank to my knees. I did not want to open that door. A feeling of dread hit me so hard I could barely even think. Logic overtook me after a few terrified moments, and I shook it off and entered the next room. Room 3 is when things began to change. On the surface, it looked like a normal room. There was a chair in the middle of the wood paneled floor. A single lamp in the corner did a poor job of lighting the area, and it cast a few shadows across the floor and walls. That was the problem. Shadows. Plural. With the exception of the chair’s, there were others. I had barely walked in the door and I was already terrified. It was at that moment that I knew something wasn’t right. I didn’t even think as I automatically tried to open the door I came through. It was locked from the other side. That set me off. Was someone locking it as I progressed? There was no way. I would have heard them. Was it a mechanical lock that set automatically? Maybe. But I was too scared to really think. I turned back to the room and the shadows were gone. The chair’s shadow remained, but the others were gone. I slowly began to walk.I used to hallucinate when I was a kid, so I wrote off the shadows as a figment of my imagination. I began to feel better as I made it to the halfway point of the room. I looked down as I took my steps, and that’s when I saw it. Or didn’t see it. My shadow wasn’t there. I didn’t have time to scream. I ran as fast as I could to the other door and flung myself without thinking into the room beyond. The fourth room was possibly the most disturbing. As I closed the door, all light seemed to be sucked out and put back into the previous room. I stood there, surrounded by darkness, and couldn’t move. I’m not afraid of the dark, and never have been, but I was absolutely terrified. All sight had left me. I held my hand in front of my face and if I didn’t know I was doing so I would never have been able to tell. Darkness doesn’t describe it. I couldn’t hear anything. It was dead silence. When you’re in a sound-proof room, you can still hear yourself breathing. You can hear yourself being alive. I couldn’t. I began to stumble forward after a few moments, my rapidly beating heart the only thing I could feel. There was no door in sight. Wasn’t even sure there was one this time. The silence was then broken by a low hum. I felt something behind me. I spun around wildly but could barely even see my nose. I knew it was there though. Regardless of how dark it was, I knew something was there. The hum grew louder, closer. It seemed to surround me, but I knew whatever was causing the noise was in front of me, inching closer. I took a step back, I had never felt that kind of fear. I can’t really describe true fear. I wasn’t even scared I was going to die, I was scared of what the alternative was. I was afraid of what this thing had in store for me. Then the lights flashed for less than a second and I saw it. Nothing. I saw nothing and I know I saw nothing there. The room was again plunged into darkness, and the hum was now a wild screech. I screamed in protest, I couldn’t hear this goddamn sound for another minute. I ran backwards away from the noise and fumbled for the door handle. I turned, and fell into room 5. Before I describe room 5 you have to understand something. I am not a drug addict. I have had no history of drug abuse or any sort of psychosis short of the childhood hallucinations I mentioned earlier, and those were only when I was really tired or just waking up. I entered the NoEnd House with a clear head. After falling in from the previous room, my view of room 5 was from my back, looking up at the ceiling. What I saw didn’t scare me, it simply surprised me. Trees had grown into the room and towered above my head. The ceilings in this room were taller than the others, which made me think I was in the center of the house. I got up off the flow, dusted myself off, and took a look around. It was definitely the biggest room of them all. I couldn’t even see the door from where I was, various brush and trees must have blocked my line of sight with the exit. Up to this point I figured the rooms were going to get scarier, but this was a paradise compared to the last room. I also assumed that whatever was back in room 4 stayed back there. I was incredibly wrong. As I made my way deeper into the room I began to hear what one would hear if they were in a forest, chirping bugs and the occasional flap of birds seemed to be my only company in this room. That was the thing that bothered me the most. I heard the bugs and other animals, but I didn’t see any of them. I began to wonder how big this house was. From the outside when I first walked up to it, it looked like a regular house. It was definitely on the bigger side, but this was almost a full forest in here. The canopy covered my view of the ceiling, but I assumed it was still there, however high it was. I couldn’t see any walls though. The only way I knew I was still inside was the floor matched the other rooms, the standard dark wood paneling. I kept walking, hoping that the next tree I passed would reveal the door. After a few moments of walking, I felt a mosquito fly onto my arm. I shook it off and kept going. A second later, I felt about ten more land on my skin at different places. I felt them crawl up and down my arms and legs, and a few made their way across my face. I flailed wildly to get them all off but they just kept crawling. I looked down and let out a muffled scream, more of a whimper to be honest. I didn’t see a single bug. Not one bug was on me, but I could feel them crawl. I heard them fly by my face and sting my skin, but I couldn’t see a single one. I dropped to the ground and began to roll wildly. I was desperate. I hated bugs, especially ones I couldn’t see or touch. But these bugs could touch me, and they were everywhere. I began to crawl. I had no idea where I was going, the entrance was nowhere in sight, and I still hadn’t even seen the exit. So I just crawled, my skin wriggling with the presence of those phantom bugs. After what seemed like hours I found the door. I grabbed the nearest tree and propped myself up, mindlessly slapping my arms and legs to no avail. I tried to run but I couldn’t, my body was exhausted from crawling and dealing with whatever it was that was on me. I took a few shaky steps to the door, grabbing each tree on the way for support. It was only a few feet away when I heard it. The low hum from before. It was coming from the next room, and it was deeper. I could almost feel it inside my body, like when you stand next to an amp at a concert. The feeling of the bugs on me lessened as the hum grew louder. As I placed my hand on the doorknob, the bugs were completely gone, but I couldn’t bring myself to turn the knob. I knew that if I let go, the bug would return, and there was no way I would make it back to room 4. I just stood there, my head pressed against the door marked 6 and my hand shakily grasping the knob. The hum was so loud I couldn’t even hear myself pretend to think. There was nothing I could do but move on. Room 6 was next, and room 6 was hell. I closed the door behind me, my eyes held shut and my ears ringing. The hum was surrounding me. As the door clicked into place the hum was gone. I opened my eyes in surprise, and the door I had shut was gone. It was just a wall now. I looked around in shock. The room was identical to room 3, the same chair and lamp but with the correct amount of shadows this time. The only real difference was that there was no exit door, and the one I came in through was now gone. As I said before, I had no previous issues in terms of mental instability, but at that moment I fell into what I now know was insanity. I didn’t scream. I didn’t make a sound. At first I scratched softly. The wall was tough, but I knew the door was there somewhere. I just knew it was. I scratched at where the doorknob was. I clawed at the wall frantically with both hands, my nails being filed down to the skin against the wood. I fell silently to my knees, the only sound in the room was the incessant scratching against the wall. I knew it was there. The door was there I knew it was just there I knew if I could just get past this wall- “Are you alright?” I jumped off the ground and spun in one motion. I leaned against the wall behind me and I saw what it was that spoke to me, and to this day I regret ever turning around. The little girl was wearing a soft white dress that went down to her ankles. She had long blonde hair to the middle of her back and white skin and blue eyes. She was the most frightening thing I had ever seen, and I know that nothing in my life will ever be as unnerving as what I saw in her. While looking at her, I saw the young girl, but I also saw something else. Where she stood I saw what looked like a man’s body only larger than normal and covered in hair. He was naked from head to toe, but his head was not human, and his toes were hooves. It wasn’t the devil, but at that moment it might as well have been. The form had the head of a ram and the snout of a wolf. It was horrifying, and it was synonymous with the little girl in front of me. They were the same form. I can’t really describe it, but I saw them at the same time. They shared the same spot in that room, but it was like looking at two separate dimensions. When I saw the girl I saw the form, and when I saw the form I saw the girl. I couldn’t speak. I could barely even see. My mind was revolting against what it was attempting to process. I had been scared before in my life, and I had never been more scared than when I was trapped in the fourth room, but that was before room 6. I just stood there, staring at whatever it was that spoke to me. There was no exit. I was trapped here with it. And then it spoke again. “David, you should have listened.” When it spoke, I heard the words of the little girl, but the other form spoke through my mind in a voice I won’t attempt to describe. There was no other sound. The voice just kept repeating that sentence over and over into my mind, and I agreed. I didn’t know what to do. I was slipping into madness yet couldn’t take my eyes off what was in front of me. I dropped to the floor. I thought I had passed out, but the room wouldn’t let me. I just wanted it to end. I was on my side, my eyes wide open and the form staring down at me. Scurrying across the floor in front of me was one of the battery-powered rats from the second room. The house was toying with me. But for some reason, seeing that rat pulled my mind back from whatever depths it was headed, and I looked around the room. I was getting out of there. I was determined to get out of that house and live and never think about this place again. I knew this room was hell, and I wasn’t ready to take up a residency. At first it was just my eyes that moved. I searched the walls for any kind of opening. The room wasn’t that big, so it didn’t take long to soak up the entire layout. The demon still taunted me, the voice growing louder as the form stayed rooted where it stood. I placed my hand on the floor and lifted myself up to all fours, and I turned to scan the wall behind me. And then I saw something I couldn’t believe. The form was now right at my back, whispering into my ming how I shouldn’t have come. I felt it’s breath on the back of my neck but I refused to turn around. A large rectangle was scratched into the wood, with a small dent shipped away in the center of it. And right in front of my eyes I saw the large 7 I had mindlessly etched into the wall. I knew what it was. Room 7 was just beyond that wall where room 5 was moments ago. I don’t know how I had done it, and maybe it was just my state of mind at the time, but I had created the door. I knew I had. In my madness I had scratched into the wall what I needed the most, an exit to the next room. Room 7 was close. I knew the demon was wight behind me, but for some reason it couldn’t touch me. I closed my eyes and placed moth hands on the large 7 in front of me. And I pushed. I pushed as hard as I could. The demon was now screaming in my ear. It told me I was never leaving. It told me that this was the end but that I wasn’t going to die, I was going to live there in room 6 with it. I wasn’t. I pushed and screamed at the top of my lungs. I knew I was going to push through the wall eventually. I clenched my eyes shut and screamed, and the demon was gone. I was left in silence. I turned around slowly and was greeted by the room as it was when I entered, just a chair and a lamp. I couldn’t believe it, but I didn’t have time to dwell. I turned back to the 7 and jumped back slightly. What I saw was a door. Not one that I had scratched in, but a regular door with a large 7 on it. My whole body was shaking. It took me a while to turn the knob. I just stood there for a while, staring at the door. I couldn’t stay in room 6, I couldn’t. But if this was only room 6, I couldn’t imagine what 7 had in store. I must have stood there for an hour, just staring at the 7. Finally, with a deep breath, I twisted the knob and opened the door to room 7. I stumbled through the door mentally exhausted and physically weak. The door behind me closed, and I realized where I was. I was outside. Not outside like room 5, but I was actually outside. My eyes stung. I wanted to cry. I fell to my knees and tried but I couldn’t. I was finally out of that hell. I didn’t even care about the prize that was promised. I turned and saw that the door I just went through was the entrance. I walked to my car and drove home, thinking of how nice a shower sounded. As I pulled up to my house I felt uneasy. The joy of leaving NoEnd House had faded, and dread was slowly building in my stomach. I shook it off as residual from the house and made my way to the front door. I entered and immediately went up to my room. I entered and there on my bed was my cat Baskerville. He was the first living thing I had seen all night, and I reached to pet him. He hissed and swiped at my hand. I recoiled in shock, as he had never acted like that. I thought “Whatever, he’s an old cat”. I jumped in the shower and got ready for what I was expecting to be a sleepless night. After my shower, I went to my kitchen to make some food. I descended the stairs and turned into the family room, and what I saw would be forever burned into my mind. My parents were lying on the ground, naked and covered in blood. They were mutilated to near unidentifiable states. Their limbs were removed and placed next to their bodies, and their heads were placed on their chests facing me. The most unsettling part was their expressions. They were smiling, as though they were happy to see me. I vomited and sobbed there in the family room. I didn’t know what had happened, they didn’t even live with me at the time. I was a mess. And then I saw it. A door that was never there before. A door with a large 8 scrawled on it in blood. I was still in the House. I was standing in my family room but I was in room 7. The faces of my parents smiled wider as I realized this. They weren’t my parents, they couldn’t be. But they looked exactly like them. The door marked 8 was across the room, behind the mutilated bodies in front of me. I knew I had to move on, but at that moment I gave up. The smiling faces tore into my mind, they grounded me where I stood. I vomited again and nearly collapsed. Then the hum returned. It was louder than ever, and it filled the house and shook the walls. The hum compelled me to walk. I began to walk slowly, making my way closer to the door, and the bodies. I could barely stand let alone walk, and the closer I got to my parents the closer I came to suicide. The walls were now shaking so hard it seemed as though they were going to crumble, but still the faces smiled at me. As I inched closer, their eyes followed me. I was now between the two bodies, a few feet away from the door. The dismembered hands clawed their way across the carpet towards me, all the while the faces continued to stare. New terror washed over me and I walked faster. I didn’t want to hear them speak. I didn’t want the voices to match those of my parents. They began to open their mouths, and the hands were now inches from my feet. In a dash of desperation I lunged toward the door, threw it open, and slammed it behind me. Room 8. I was done. After what I had just experienced I knew there wasn’t anything else this fucking house could throw at me that I couldn’t live through. There was nothing short of the fires of hell that I wasn’t ready for. Unfortunately, I underestimated the abilities of NoEnd House. Unfortunately, things got more disturbing, more terrifying, and more unspeakable in Room 8. I still have trouble believing what I saw in room 8. Again, the room was a carbon copy of rooms 4 and 6, but sitting in the usually empty chair was a man. After a few seconds of disbelief, my mind finally accepted the fact that the man sitting in the chair was me. Not someone who looked like me, it was David Williams. I walked closer. I had to get a better look even though I was sure of it. He looked up at me and I noticed tears in his eyes. “Please… please, don’t do it. Please, don’t hurt me.” “What?” I said. “Who are you? I’m not going to hurt you.” “Yes you are…” he was sobbing now. “You’re going to hurt me and I don’t want you to.” He sat in the chair with his legs up and began rocking back and forth. It was actually really pathetic looking, especially since he was me, identical in every way. “Listen, who are you?” I was now only a few feet from my doppelganger. It was the weirdest experience yet, standing there talking to myself. I wasn’t scared, but I would be soon. “Why are you-?” “You’re going to hurt me you’re going to hurt me if you want to leave you’re going to hurt me.” “Why are you saying this? Just calm down, alright? Let’s try and figure this-” And then I saw it. The David sitting down was wearing the same clothes as me, except for a small red patch on his shirt embroidered with the number 9. “You’re going to hurt me you’re going to hurt me don’t please you’re going to hurt me…” My eyes didn’t leave that small number on his chest. I knew exactly what it was. The first few door were plain and simple, but after a while they got a little more ambiguous. 7 was scratched into the wall, but by my own hands. 8 was marked in blood above the bodies of my parents. But 9 – this number was on a person, a living person. And worse still, it was on a person that looked exactly like me. “David?” I had to ask. “Yes… you’re going to hurt me you’re going to hurt me…” He continued to sob and rock. He answered to David. He was me, right down to the voice. But that 9. I paced around for a few minutes while he sobbed in his chair. The room had no door, and similarly to room 6, the door I came through was gone. For some reason I assumed that scratching would get me no where this time. I studied the walls and floor around the chair, sticking my head underneath and seeing if anything was below. Unfortunately, there was. Below the chair there was a knife. Attached was a tag that read: To David – From Management. The feeling in my stomach as I read that tag was something sinister. I wanted to throw up, and the last thing I wanted to do was remove that knife from under that chair. The other David was still sobbing uncontrollably. My mind was spinning into an attic of unanswerable questions. Who put this here and how did they get my name? Not to mention the fact that as I knelt on the cold wood floor I also sat in that chair, sobbing in protest of being hurt by myself. It was all too much to process. The house and the management had been playing with me this whole time. My thoughts for some reason turned to Peter, and whether or not he got this far. And if he did, if he met a Peter Terry sobbing in this very chair, rocking back and forth. I shook those thoughts out of my head, they didn’t matter. I took the knife from under the chair, and immediately the other David went quiet. “David,” he said in my voice, “what do you think you’re going to do?” I lifted myself from the ground and clenched the knife in my hand. “I’m going to get out of here.” David was still sitting in the chair, though he was very calm now. He looked up at me with a slight grin. I couldn’t tell if he was going to laugh or strangle me. Slowly he got up from the chair and stood facing me. It was uncanny. His height and even the way he stood matched mine. I felt the rubber hilt of the knife in my hand and gripped it tighter. I didn’t know what I was planning on doing with it, but I had a feeling I was going to need it. “Now,” his voice was slightly deeper than my own. “I’m going to hurt you. I’m going to hurt you and I’m going to keep you here.” I didn’t respond. I just lunged and tackled him to the ground. I had mounted him and looked down, knife poised and ready. He looked up at me terrified. It was like I was looking in a mirror. Then the hum returned, low and distant, though I still feel it deep in my body. David looked up at me as I looked down at myself. The hum was getting louder, and I felt something inside me snap. With one motion I slammed the knife into the patch on his chest and ripped down. Blackness fell on the room, and I was falling. The darkness around me was like nothing I had experienced up to that point. Room 3 was dark, but it didn’t come close to what was completely engulfing me. I wasn’t even sure if I was falling after a while. I felt weightless, covered in dark. And then a deep sadness came over me. I felt lost, depressed, and suicidal. The sight of my parents entered my mind. I knew it wasn’t real, but I had seen it, and the mind has trouble differentiating between what is real and what isn’t. The sadness only deepened. I was in room 9 for what seemed like days. The final room. And that’s exactly what it was, the end. NoEnd House had an end, and I had reached it. At that moment I gave up. I knew I would be in that in between state forever, accompanied by nothing but darkness. Not even the hum was there to keep me sane. I had lost all senses. I couldn’t feel myself. I couldn’t hear anything, sight was useless here, and I searched for taste in my mouth and found nothing. I felt disembodied and completely lost. I knew where I was. This was hell. Room 9 was hell. And then it happened. A light. One of those stereotypical lights at the end of the tunnel. Then I felt ground come up from below me, and I was standing. After a moment or two of gathering my thoughts and senses, I slowly walked toward that light. As I approached the light, it took form. It was a vertical slit down the side of a door, this time unmarked. I slowly walked through the door and found myself back where I started, the lobby of NoEnd House. It was exactly how I left it. Still empty, still decorated with childish Halloween decorations. After everything that had happened that night, I was still wary of where I was. After a few moments of normalcy, I looked around the place trying to find anything different. On the desk was a plain white envelope with my name handwritten on it. Immensely curious, yet still cautious, I mustered up the courage to open the envelope. Inside was a letter, again handwritten. David Williams, Congratulations! You have made it to the end of NoEnd House! Please accept this prize as a token of your great achievement. Yours forever, Management With the letter was five $100 bills. I couldn’t stop laughing. I laughed for what seemed like hours. I laughed as I walked out to my car and laughed as I drove home. I laughed as I pulled into my driveway, and laughed as I opened my front door to my house and laughed as I saw the small 10 etched into the wood.[/quote]
[QUOTE=Archonet;30394544]Screw off 11'er. Ghostwork, old joke is old. Get over it.[/QUOTE] An alt mate. Pretty pro elitism there sunshine.
[QUOTE=booster;30396064]I have no idea why, but the fact that it's a 3 frame gif of the same picture, makes it so much more creepier.[/QUOTE] There's probably a preconceived notion that .gif = screamer pic, so a gif that [i]isn't[/i] a screamer creates tension. It would almost be less scary if there was a screamer. (Don't tempt fate and post one though :angry:)
[IMG]http://i51.tinypic.com/vobvo4.jpg[/IMG]
[QUOTE=jenny7332;30395993]Doesn't really build up to a climax, it feels like it's unfinished. You dug too fast into the creatures appearing: I didn't feel that you built up an uneasy/spooky feeling at all. It was just: -Travelling, set up -TV doesn't work -Oh shit, weird things coming towards me Before that the descriptions and lead up to the scary scene seemed really stilted, without any leading or storytelling purpose, kind of boring really. But good try, you did start building an uneasy feeling with the "oh spooky feeling about hotel" stuff, just needs some lengthening and keep it going. You just need to flesh out your descriptions like instead of "Golly this place sure makes me uneasy" maybe something like " There's something stagnant in here; even though it's just lassy and I in here, I feel as if 50 CCTV cameras have their albino eyeballs trained on my crotch. Even though there's no one else in here, my paranoia still clings to me... It smells weird too, like roasted cabbage" Even though that example's a bit silly, hopefully that explains what I mean. Oh yeah, and since you have it in a first person narritive, you might want to inject some more personality in there.. maybe some anecdotes or something.[/QUOTE] Thanks for the advice i guess, I do see what you mean. At the time, i was in a hurry, and ill probably finish it tonight for shitz n giggles.
I should really try writing a creepypasta. What is to be scared anyway? Disgruntlement, but urgent. To create disgruntlement, we have to create a dangerous situation, and to create urgency, we need surprise. And danger is future harm. Surprise is wrong expectations. So I have to make the reader think they are in harm's way after being violently shaken out of being safe. Hmm. This was actually pretty useless.
Do it. Im gonna edit mine right now.
[QUOTE=Lizzrd;30335114]Stare long enough and john will become a zombie. [IMG]http://i.imgur.com/qoZKn.gif[/IMG][/QUOTE] finished product of the infamous "mind games" picture? Looks similar too.
Does anyone have any more short creepy stories? I love those.
Edited Version: A couple of years ago, at the start of another pointless summer, my family decided that we should get together and go someplace nice. My family, and my relatives decided we needed to get together for a "relaxing getaway" - Somewhere here in California would have been my choice, but I wasn't planning this trip. A hotel located somewhere in southern Florida was our destination. I have never been to Florida myself, but i can't say im looking forward to it. Everything Florida has is right here in California, and better, most likely. All the flights from Los Angeles, to Chicago, to whichever dirty airport in Florida we flew into, were too long for my comforts. I honestly paid no attention to the names of anything... I just followed my parents, and my older sister around the terminals, not paying attention to anything, or anyone at all. The day seemed to go on forever. We finally arrived at the hotel, in some town, somewhere. This place we were staying at literally looked as if it was about to collapse on itself. We walked into what seemed like the lobby, and were greeted by a shady looking hotel staff, That stood there smiling with an dark glare in there eyes... There was something about this place... I don't know if anyone else in my family noticed it, but something was wrong here. Made more suspicious by the fact that we were the only ones staying here besides the rest of my relatives. I couldn't help but constantly look over my shoulder, and i swear that i could see something move in the shadows. "Welcome to the Westbrook, sir." Came the bold voice behind the reception desk. "How can i help you this evening?" The receptionist and my father discussed who was staying in what room, my sister and I got our own rooms.. Which was a good thing in my case, my sister isn't exactly the friendliest. That night however, I couldn't sleep at all. Those flights were long, and I was awake through all of them. My sleep escaped me. With nothing else to do, I flipped on the TV and surfed through the standard analog channels. They were limited to about 10, and none of them were interesting. I left the TV on, and glanced at the time from the old wooden clock barely hanging on the wall. 12:25 AM. With the TV on, I closed my eyes for any attempt at sleep. I woke up almost instantly to the sudden static of the TV... which i swear was normal when i fell asleep. The clock read 12:36 AM. Where the hell did this static come from? Maybe it was just the channel, but when i attempted to switch channels, it didn't change... The TV didn't even power off when i tried. I was about to throw something at it when suddenly it turned black... a few seconds later, it flashed back on. But i wasn't paying attention... i was staring in horror at the 4 figures that were all suddenly standing in a circle that surrounded my bed... Just standing there...they resembled humans, but were the complete opposite. Their faces were mangled and disfigured, and were bleeding horrendously, their bodies had no shape or proportion, and twitched erratically. The creatures' limbs seemed to stretch in directions impossible. The TV blared static, louder then before.. I stared in horror, as my mind tried to process what i was witnessing... I yelled at the top of my lungs for anybody. but no one came. I jumped out of my bed, and ran for the door as blood started to flow from the ceiling... through the walls. I got to the door, only to find it locked. I turned around, and what used to be my hotel was now a gruesome image of suffering. People screaming in agony as they were tortured, torn apart, and eaten by bizarre, hideous mounds of flesh, demons. I felt blasts of heat as flames blazed.. And i knew, that i was witnessing Hell itself. I fell to my knees, and witnessed the horror for what seemed like an eternity. Then, i closed my eyes, and felt my shoulder grabbed by a hand. I turned around to see my father's startled face. He said he heard loud noises coming from my room. When he came to check on me, i was sitting up straight in my bed, staring at the wall with my eyes wide open. I told my father about my experience, of course he didnt believe me. No sane human mind should have witnessed something of that horror... He didnt believe me until the next morning, we found my sister in her room with her throat slit, and the number 318 scrawled in blood on the wall... The number to my room.
Here's a short one. :buddy: [quote]I check into small hotel a few kilometers from Kiev. It is late. I am tired. I tell woman at desk I want a room. She tells me room number and give key. "But one more thing comrade; there is one room without number and always lock. Don't even peek in there." I take key and go to room to sleep. Night comes and I hear trickling of water. It comes from the room across. I cannot sleep so I open door. It is coming from room with no number. I pound on door. No response. I look in keyhole. I see nothing except red. Water still trickling. I go down to front desk to complain. "By the way who is in that room?" She look at me and begin to tell story. There was woman in there. Murdered by her husband. Skin all white, except her eyes, which were red. I tell her I don't give a shit. Stop the water trickling or give me refund. She gave me 100 ruble credit and free breakfast. Such is life in Moscow[/quote]
Ooh, Moscow stories. [quote]I start by announcing friend was capitalist. He stopped reading book of Marxism halfway through. He tell me about house of No End, called because all who enter become capitalist before the end and leave like capitalist coward, but if you reach end you are given lifetime supply of vodka. I go to house, and instead of man there is sign. The sign read 'Welcome proleteriat! You enter door and keep enter door 9 times. Final door will make you win!' I went inside door, and first room was dull, a picture of 'Uncle Sam' and letter about capitalism. I do not stop to read, and I go through fake freedom to next door. Room 2 is better, but contains portraits of American president, and some false capitalist propaganda. I go through door again. Room 3 is different. It contained chair, and chair had light, but there was more than one shadow. I looked at floor and I did not have shadow. This was obviously lying capitalist propaganda, so I enter next door to Room 4. This time there was very dark, and humming noise. Humming was to tune of 'Star Spangle Banner', and got louder and louder. This made me think about capitalism, but after some time I dismissed it as capitalist lies. Room 5 contained many trees and roots, and this made no sense since I was in house. I went on to next room. Room 6 was same as Room 3, but door to Room 4 was gone. I tried to go back through door, but door was locked. There must be capitalist following me and locking door when I go through. Suddenly, I hear voice- "Are you alright?" I turn around, and it is young girl with pale skin and blue eyes and blonde hair, like capitalist scum think is scary. But behind her was man, strange man with body of human but snout of wolf and head of ram and red, white and blue hat. He said: "Nikolai, you should have listen to capitalist friend and become capitalist." Man said this over and over and became louder. I use my nails to scratch 7 in wall, so I can leave. I was now outside, but sign said there was 9 room? I enter my slum in Moscow, and I stroke pet rat Stalin. Pet rat bites hand- this not happen before, but I think 'Is old rat' and go to bed. On way to bed, I see horrid sight. Bodies lying on floor, they are my parents. But they are not my parents, because they are wearing horrid bright shirts with flowers on and black boxes with glass lens around neck. They had become capitalist. They smile too. Number 8 was written in capitalist oil on wall, and I realise I was still in No End House. I had to walk past capitalist parents to get to Room 8. As I walk, parents smile more. I was unnerved by their capitalism. I got to room, and opened door. It slammed behind. In Room 8, there was chair like 6. But now man sat there, and I realise man was me. He said to himself, "Nikolai, do not hurt me." I say to him, "Why will I hurt you?" He removes shirt, and there is number 9 on chest. There is knife under chair he is sat on, and I take knife and cut open chest as Commissar had told me to do to capitalist scum. Suddenly I plunge into dark. I then wake up in lobby of No End House. I go back to slum, and there is note and crate. Note reads- 'Nikolai Cholerinski, You won No End! Here is lifetime supply of vodka.' I open crate and inside is vodka. I look at vodka bottle and there is number 10 on it. Such is life in Moscow.[/quote] Sorry it's a bit long for a Moscow joke, but I didn't want to condense it too much.
[QUOTE=ShnitzelKiller;30399086][IMG]http://i51.tinypic.com/vobvo4.jpg[/IMG][/QUOTE] If you made that, you are awesome!
[QUOTE=Roll_Program;30400978]Does anyone have any more short creepy stories? I love those.[/QUOTE] You should check out this channel [url]http://www.youtube.com/user/theLittleFears[/url] It has a bunch of amazing and creepy stories.
one day i felt something weird near my butthole and heard a loud noise after that. felt like some kind of gas went out of my body. is it dangerous? has it happened to any of you?
You're going to die.
A little while ago I was out getting coal for my fireplace. It was kinda dark but I was tired so I didn't really care. However, there was rustling behind me and I got a little nervous. After filling up the bucket the wind picked up and I felt a pinch on my arse. Facepunch, was I molested by a poltergeist?
[QUOTE=RetaDepa;30412264]A little while ago I was out getting coal for my fireplace. It was kinda dark but I was tired so I didn't really care. However, there was rustling behind me and I got a little nervous. After filling up the bucket the wind picked up and I felt a pinch on my arse. Facepunch, was I molested by a poltergeist?[/QUOTE] Sorry, that was me.
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