• My new book
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[QUOTE=TheDiddler;23909160]You ripped of "Kick out the jams" so you are the one that is going to be paying the money.[/QUOTE] i used two power chords kick out the jams does not own these two power chords i want my money now
Your post reports don't do anything because it takes 2 reports (each from a different person) on the same post in order for it to even show up on the moderator's report list.
Can you at least tell us what the book is about in the OP?
[QUOTE=CommanderMayhem;23908791]Here, OP I feel bad about mocking your writing, have a piece of my shitty writing to mock. I wrote this for a music class that I did not give a shit about had to write a family friendly poem with onomatapieas I couldn't be arsed to put effort into it I think I failed poem[/QUOTE] I can definitely hear this as a cover of that crappy Kesha song.
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23906829]ok then it's 23 chapters. It's about a genetic experiment(main character) who escapes from an experimental lab and goes through the storylines of the alien movies(alien, aliens, alien 3, alien resurrection, aliens versus predator, and aliens versus predator requiem)[/QUOTE] if you are not trolling I swear to god I am going to download a tracing software, find out where you live, drive to your house, and personally smash your computer into no less than 35 consecutive pieces, burn it in a blast furnace, and bury it in a sand dune in the fucking sahara desert.
I call I get to read chapter 2, we will stitch all the chapters together to make an audio book!
[QUOTE=lolzone;23910571]if you are not trolling I swear to god I am going to download a backtracing software and backtrace you, find out where you live, drive to your house, and personally smash your computer into no less than 35 consecutive pieces, burn it in a blast furnace, and bury it in a sand dune in the fucking sahara desert.[/QUOTE] Fixed.
If you did a spellcheck, it would be a nice piece of work.
*is OP, poops on my keyboard. takes the letters the landing turd hits and saves them in notepad, calls it a book*
[QUOTE=Trogdon;23909126]I turn your song into song [url]http://filesmelt.com/dl/zombie_song.mp3[/url] YOU PAY ME NOW[/QUOTE] You nearly put me in tears Thanks a lot bro No seriously, that is too funny, a shitty poem I wrote in grade 8 gets turned into a song
[QUOTE=CommanderMayhem;23908791]Here, OP I feel bad about mocking your writing, have a piece of my shitty writing to mock. I wrote this for a music class that I did not give a shit about had to write a family friendly poem with onomatapieas I couldn't be arsed to put effort into it I think I failed Beep! Beep! I wake up in the morning at quarter to four, Rawr! Scratch! That sound... Oh no! The undead are at my door! Schreech! The window pops open with a bit of strength, Growl...the zombies are in my room. At arms length! Ahhhh! Jump out my window, and hit the ground with a thud! RoooAR! More zombies are coming! They can smell my blood! Huff!Puff! I sprint away, I need to get away fast. Huff puff... I hope these breaths wont be my last. Ding Dong! I ring my neighbours bell. Creaaak.... He opens the door... he's a zombie, how swell. Click!Click! BANG! I hear a gun, I'm not alone! Click!! Click! I run away, escaping his moan. Eek! Oh no! I was to late! I left the poor man to his fate! But since he's dead, Im sure he wont mind, I'll take the gun, and kick some zombie behind. Click! Click! Bang! Bang! This apocalypse is better with a gun. Click. Click. In fact im even thinking im having a little fun. The zombie hits the ground, making a splatter! But over the distance, I hear radio chatter. Sprint up the hill, it's quite a hike, I hear a voice yell, WE Are oscar Mike! Beep! Beep! Beep! The armies, here, in a jeep. Ratatatat! The gun mows down zombies, they fall to a heap. GO GO GO GOGO the sarge lets out a roar. Go go go ! Delta two one four! Thanks a lot army, i was nearly dissected. Huh? Put the gun down. Im not infected![/QUOTE] Dr. Seuss after the fall of civilization.
[QUOTE=LCBADs;23911649]Dr. Seuss after the fall of civilization.[/QUOTE] I am so imagining the Cat in The Hat with a Spas-12 blowing zombies apart.
Your book is about as good as Tim Buckleys comics Which aren't.
[QUOTE=Aw_Hell;23911086]I call I get to read chapter 2, we will stitch all the chapters together to make an audio book![/QUOTE] good idea is well
:golfclap: Master piece! Pure work of art!
After listening to Trogdon's audio chapter, I was glad I didn't read it. Trogdon's narration made me laugh on the poor quality of the chapter.
Text is too clumped up. You say "said" too much. I couldn't get through a quarter of the way through the first chapter, spice it up a little.
[img]http://img3.visualizeus.com/thumbs/09/02/01/lol,gif,move,haters,animated,drawing-f23c7f2136d053d0aa78199b3bd7a128_h.jpg[/img] Seriously this is fucking terrible
After reading 6 sentences all I can say is this. Improve your writing and grammar skills.
[QUOTE=CommanderMayhem;23908791]Here, OP I feel bad about mocking your writing, have a piece of my shitty writing to mock. I wrote this for a music class that I did not give a shit about had to write a family friendly poem with onomatapieas I couldn't be arsed to put effort into it I think I failed Beep! Beep! I wake up in the morning at quarter to four, Rawr! Scratch! That sound... Oh no! The undead are at my door! Schreech! The window pops open with a bit of strength, Growl...the zombies are in my room. At arms length! Ahhhh! Jump out my window, and hit the ground with a thud! RoooAR! More zombies are coming! They can smell my blood! Huff!Puff! I sprint away, I need to get away fast. Huff puff... I hope these breaths wont be my last. Ding Dong! I ring my neighbours bell. Creaaak.... He opens the door... he's a zombie, how swell. Click!Click! BANG! I hear a gun, I'm not alone! Click!! Click! I run away, escaping his moan. Eek! Oh no! I was to late! I left the poor man to his fate! But since he's dead, Im sure he wont mind, I'll take the gun, and kick some zombie behind. Click! Click! Bang! Bang! This apocalypse is better with a gun. Click. Click. In fact im even thinking im having a little fun. The zombie hits the ground, making a splatter! But over the distance, I hear radio chatter. Sprint up the hill, it's quite a hike, I hear a voice yell, WE Are oscar Mike! Beep! Beep! Beep! The armies, here, in a jeep. Ratatatat! The gun mows down zombies, they fall to a heap. GO GO GO GOGO the sarge lets out a roar. Go go go ! Delta two one four! Thanks a lot army, i was nearly dissected. Huh? Put the gun down. Im not infected![/QUOTE] Not bad, actually.
I did it, it sucks but a little on purpose: [url]http://filesmelt.com/dl/Chapter2.wav[/url]
OP why are you mocking the ALIEN movies?
This is... my god what the fuck is this???? i cant believe i downloaded such a shitty ZIP file.
This isn't a really good Science Fiction, and the title picture you have (with title words simply put over it) isn't encouraging. Try going for something original rather than use parts from existing novels/films.
I really enjoy the audio versions even though Aw_hell sounded like he was reading several parts of the chapter at the same time around 1:40. Also, somehow a superhuman who's just about invincible gets knocked out by a missile hitting him in the back?
You know that if you post any kind of short story on facepunch it better be good or at least decent. Don't get mad at anyone here giving you criticism. It's your fault you wrote this
just stop your book is a beat up P.O.S. End of discussion.
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