[QUOTE=CommanderMayhem;23908166]Move on people leave this thread to pass away.[/QUOTE]
I would agree. I only placed this thread so people could read my book nothing more
Alright, I'm sorry, I read your back story thing, and I MUST copypaste it.
You can't put 50 animes together with Aliens and call it a great work of fiction.
It's fan fiction.
Full Name: Mitchell Terrance Nethanial Olson
Age: Well over 1000000000, even he doesn't know exactly
Blood Type: Unknown
Height: 6' 0"
Weight: 220 lbs
Preffered Nickname: Mitchell "God Warrior" Olson
Family:
• Son: Michael Olson
• Wife: Naayna Olson
• Father: Terry Michael Olson (Deceased)
• Mother: Tina Olson (Deceased)
Mentors:
• Thrall Durotan
• Cairne Bloodhoof
• Vul'Jin
• Sonic the Hedgehog
• Miles "Tails" Prower
• Knuckles
• Naruto Uzimaki
• Sakura Haruno
• Kakashi Hatake
• Cloud Strife
• Tifa Lockhart
• Barret Wallace
• Aeris Gainsborrough
• Nanaki "Red XIII"
• Yuffie Kisaragi
• Cait Sith
• Vincent Valentine
• Cid Highwind
Students:
• Naruto Uzamaki
• Sakura Haruno
• Sasuke Uchiha (Removed as a Student)
• Sonic the Hedgehog
• Michael Olson
• Sora
• Donald
• Goofy
• Naayna Olson
• Mike Firebane
• Thomas Firebane
Occupation: Traveler of Worlds, Jack of All Trades
Weapon of Choice: Sword (Large Two-Handed), One-Hand Wield
Armor of Choice: Light Leather to Heavy Full Metal Armor
Fighting Style: Mix of Naruto's and Cloud's, named "Naruto's Strife", has many others
Ultimate Attack: Omnislash Mark 2 (Meta Angel Version)
Ultimate Form: Red Meta Angel (Ten Tailed Jinchuriki w/ Meta Angel combination)
Distinctive Features: Always has his sword on his back, scar over his right eye (vertically cutting through the eye lid), missing elbow down of right arm, replaced with machine arm covered in a fake layer of skin, wears a shield bracer on left arm, deploys large shield, covered in fake layer of skin, blue eyes, blonde spikey hair much like Clouds.
Story: Began as a normal mortal, but by the age of 16, he warped through time and space; a stimulative Chaos Control without a Chaos Emerald. His first destination was the world of Azeroth, the land of Orcs or Durotar, there he met the Warchief, Thrall. Gaining assistance and tutoring from Thrall, he soon became a warrior that defeated the Alliance single handedly, without killing a single human, dwarf or gnome, the most hateful of the Horde and most fierce of the Alliance. That ended the fourth war, which broke out when the Alliance discovered his existence in the world. The war was named, "The War of the Traveler," due to Mitchell's new occupation. Thrall soon gave Mitchell the right to leave the land, Kalimdor, and even the world as he pleased. Mitchell asked Thrall for manuscripts dictating what he should do, Thrall obliged, and sent him off through a Chaos Control hole, perhaps the first ever made. He soon landed on Sonic the Hedgehog's world, where Sonic, Tails and Knuckles trained him to be more deadly and fierce, as self defense. Sonic had also heard that he'd have come, but when Eggman heard of this, he was hot on their tails. Mitchell swiftly executed his first ever Homing Attack, and sent Eggman flying back to his lab. Sonic, seeing that Mitchell needed a way to travel between worlds without exausting himself by using magic, gave him a Chaos Emerald, but Mitchell, refused and created a fake one to suit him. Mitchell soon went to other worlds, trained by various people, growing older through each warp through time and space. His mortal enemy, Shadow Mitchell, soon gave him trouble. Mitchell rallied the best of his teachers, Thrall, Sonic, Naruto, Kakashi and Cloud, to face his Shadow, in hopes of defeating him. Little did Mitchell know, that he would have to face near death before winning. On a rock spire that went thousands of feet off the ground, it was a fight to the death between Mitchell and Shadow Mitchell. The sparred for some time, until Mitchell lost his footing at the edge, and fell off. Screaming in terror and anger, Mitchell attempted to plant his sword in the stone to stop his fall, only to lose it, stuck in the rock he hoped to have saved him, not kill him. As he fell, he was engulfed in a bright light, that allowed him to be saved. His first instance of turning into the fabled Meta Angel or God Warrior. He defeated his shadow without insident after transforming. As thousands of years for him passed, he soon developed super natural strength, but keeping his body at the age of thirty for traveling through time and space so much. He settled down and married his medicinal experiment, who never said anything about being an experiment, Naayna Lightangel. To Mitchell, another thousand years passed until he had his first child, Michael.
Mitchell is considered by many the ultimate of fighters, as his war scar over his right eye prooves, as well as his machine arm shows. Every now and again he has to assist his son, who is living up to the name of Olson. His wife is also a fighter much like him, but mortal, as she defends their home world, never Chaos Controlling. He considers Truely an ally, but is always saying he'll break something important someday.
His left arm, though not always shown, is infected by the Scourge, but he has complete control over it, since he and many others of both the Alliance and Horde, defeated Arthas, the Lich King. In honor of Arthas' remembrance of Jaina and his change of heart right before his final breath, he named his arm's curse, "Arthas."
Mortal Enemies:
• Alliance
• Sasuke Uchiha and "Taki"
• The Akatski
• Shinra
• Sephiroth
• Heartless
• Orginization XIII
• Covenant
• Deepground
• Tsviets
• General Shephard
Immortal Enemies:
• Shadow Mitchell
• Kyuubi (Nine Tailed Jinchuriki, Fox)
Allies:
• Horde
• Leaf Village
• AVALANCHE
• Sora and Co.
• UNSC
• WRO
• CCWD
• Samus Aran
• USMC
• SAS (Task Force 141)
• Rangers
• Truely and his troop
Nice Sonic and Modern Warfare references.
Was this created to be inherently and intentionally campy, or is this a product of the author's horrible writing skills?
[QUOTE=CommanderMayhem;23908193]Alright, I'm sorry, I read your back story thing, and I MUST copypaste it.
You can't put 50 animes together with Aliens and call it a great work of fiction.
It's fan fiction.
Full Name: Mitchell Terrance Nethanial Olson
Age: Well over 1000000000, even he doesn't know exactly
Blood Type: Unknown
Height: 6' 0"
Weight: 220 lbs
Preffered Nickname: Mitchell "God Warrior" Olson
Family:
• Son: Michael Olson
• Wife: Naayna Olson
• Father: Terry Michael Olson (Deceased)
• Mother: Tina Olson (Deceased)
Mentors:
• Thrall Durotan
• Cairne Bloodhoof
• Vul'Jin
• Sonic the Hedgehog
• Miles "Tails" Prower
• Knuckles
• Naruto Uzimaki
• Sakura Haruno
• Kakashi Hatake
• Cloud Strife
• Tifa Lockhart
• Barret Wallace
• Aeris Gainsborrough
• Nanaki "Red XIII"
• Yuffie Kisaragi
• Cait Sith
• Vincent Valentine
• Cid Highwind
Students:
• Naruto Uzamaki
• Sakura Haruno
• Sasuke Uchiha (Removed as a Student)
• Sonic the Hedgehog
• Michael Olson
• Sora
• Donald
• Goofy
• Naayna Olson
• Mike Firebane
• Thomas Firebane
Occupation: Traveler of Worlds, Jack of All Trades
Weapon of Choice: Sword (Large Two-Handed), One-Hand Wield
Armor of Choice: Light Leather to Heavy Full Metal Armor
Fighting Style: Mix of Naruto's and Cloud's, named "Naruto's Strife", has many others
Ultimate Attack: Omnislash Mark 2 (Meta Angel Version)
Ultimate Form: Red Meta Angel (Ten Tailed Jinchuriki w/ Meta Angel combination)
Distinctive Features: Always has his sword on his back, scar over his right eye (vertically cutting through the eye lid), missing elbow down of right arm, replaced with machine arm covered in a fake layer of skin, wears a shield bracer on left arm, deploys large shield, covered in fake layer of skin, blue eyes, blonde spikey hair much like Clouds.
Story: Began as a normal mortal, but by the age of 16, he warped through time and space; a stimulative Chaos Control without a Chaos Emerald. His first destination was the world of Azeroth, the land of Orcs or Durotar, there he met the Warchief, Thrall. Gaining assistance and tutoring from Thrall, he soon became a warrior that defeated the Alliance single handedly, without killing a single human, dwarf or gnome, the most hateful of the Horde and most fierce of the Alliance. That ended the fourth war, which broke out when the Alliance discovered his existence in the world. The war was named, "The War of the Traveler," due to Mitchell's new occupation. Thrall soon gave Mitchell the right to leave the land, Kalimdor, and even the world as he pleased. Mitchell asked Thrall for manuscripts dictating what he should do, Thrall obliged, and sent him off through a Chaos Control hole, perhaps the first ever made. He soon landed on Sonic the Hedgehog's world, where Sonic, Tails and Knuckles trained him to be more deadly and fierce, as self defense. Sonic had also heard that he'd have come, but when Eggman heard of this, he was hot on their tails. Mitchell swiftly executed his first ever Homing Attack, and sent Eggman flying back to his lab. Sonic, seeing that Mitchell needed a way to travel between worlds without exausting himself by using magic, gave him a Chaos Emerald, but Mitchell, refused and created a fake one to suit him. Mitchell soon went to other worlds, trained by various people, growing older through each warp through time and space. His mortal enemy, Shadow Mitchell, soon gave him trouble. Mitchell rallied the best of his teachers, Thrall, Sonic, Naruto, Kakashi and Cloud, to face his Shadow, in hopes of defeating him. Little did Mitchell know, that he would have to face near death before winning. On a rock spire that went thousands of feet off the ground, it was a fight to the death between Mitchell and Shadow Mitchell. The sparred for some time, until Mitchell lost his footing at the edge, and fell off. Screaming in terror and anger, Mitchell attempted to plant his sword in the stone to stop his fall, only to lose it, stuck in the rock he hoped to have saved him, not kill him. As he fell, he was engulfed in a bright light, that allowed him to be saved. His first instance of turning into the fabled Meta Angel or God Warrior. He defeated his shadow without insident after transforming. As thousands of years for him passed, he soon developed super natural strength, but keeping his body at the age of thirty for traveling through time and space so much. He settled down and married his medicinal experiment, who never said anything about being an experiment, Naayna Lightangel. To Mitchell, another thousand years passed until he had his first child, Michael.
Mitchell is considered by many the ultimate of fighters, as his war scar over his right eye prooves, as well as his machine arm shows. Every now and again he has to assist his son, who is living up to the name of Olson. His wife is also a fighter much like him, but mortal, as she defends their home world, never Chaos Controlling. He considers Truely an ally, but is always saying he'll break something important someday.
His left arm, though not always shown, is infected by the Scourge, but he has complete control over it, since he and many others of both the Alliance and Horde, defeated Arthas, the Lich King. In honor of Arthas' remembrance of Jaina and his change of heart right before his final breath, he named his arm's curse, "Arthas."
Mortal Enemies:
• Alliance
• Sasuke Uchiha and "Taki"
• The Akatski
• Shinra
• Sephiroth
• Heartless
• Orginization XIII
• Covenant
• Deepground
• Tsviets
• General Shephard
Immortal Enemies:
• Shadow Mitchell
• Kyuubi (Nine Tailed Jinchuriki, Fox)
Allies:
• Horde
• Leaf Village
• AVALANCHE
• Sora and Co.
• UNSC
• WRO
• CCWD
• Samus Aran
• USMC
• SAS (Task Force 141)
• Rangers
• Truely and his troop[/QUOTE]
my friend made that for my book and i'm 15 you @$$
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23908207]my friend made that for my book[/QUOTE]
Of course he did
Honestly what the fuck he threw in every shitty reference he fucking could
Sonic, Modern Warfare, Kingdom hearts, WoW
[QUOTE=CommanderMayhem;23908221]Of course he did[/QUOTE]
He sent it to me for the use of my book
You shouldn't have included it
[QUOTE=CommanderMayhem;23908249]You shouldn't have included it[/QUOTE]
why not his character is in the book.
[QUOTE=CommanderMayhem;23908193]
Full Name: [b]Mitchell[/b] Terrance Nethanial Olson
Age: Well over 1000000000, even [b]he[/b] doesn't know exactly
[/QUOTE]
Isn't Mitchell a females name?
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23908252]why not his character is in the book.[/QUOTE]
Stop saying book... say fanfiction.
[QUOTE=Ninja Guy;23908264]Isn't Mitchell a females name?[/QUOTE]
your thinking of michell
[QUOTE=Ninja Guy;23908264]Isn't Mitchell a females name?[/QUOTE]
My best amigo is named Mitchell, granted I joke about his gender, but I can guarntee his gender.
[quote=commandermayhem;23908272]stop saying book... Say fanfiction.[/quote]
it"s a f**king book!!!!!!!!!!
Mitchell as in Mitch?
You're thinking Michelle.
[QUOTE=TheDiddler;23908287]Mitchell as in Mitch?
You're thinking Michelle.[/QUOTE]
Exactly
[QUOTE=Ninja Guy;23908264]Isn't Mitchell a females name?[/QUOTE]
There are hundreds of reasons the writing posted in this thread is sub par. This isn't one of them.
Reposting for Page 5 epic justice
Full Name: Mitchell Terrance Nethanial Olson
Age: Well over 1000000000, even he doesn't know exactly
Blood Type: Unknown
Height: 6' 0"
Weight: 220 lbs
Preffered Nickname: Mitchell "God Warrior" Olson
Family:
• Son: Michael Olson
• Wife: Naayna Olson
• Father: Terry Michael Olson (Deceased)
• Mother: Tina Olson (Deceased)
Mentors:
• Thrall Durotan
• Cairne Bloodhoof
• Vul'Jin
• Sonic the Hedgehog
• Miles "Tails" Prower
• Knuckles
• Naruto Uzimaki
• Sakura Haruno
• Kakashi Hatake
• Cloud Strife
• Tifa Lockhart
• Barret Wallace
• Aeris Gainsborrough
• Nanaki "Red XIII"
• Yuffie Kisaragi
• Cait Sith
• Vincent Valentine
• Cid Highwind
Students:
• Naruto Uzamaki
• Sakura Haruno
• Sasuke Uchiha (Removed as a Student)
• Sonic the Hedgehog
• Michael Olson
• Sora
• Donald
• Goofy
• Naayna Olson
• Mike Firebane
• Thomas Firebane
Occupation: Traveler of Worlds, Jack of All Trades
Weapon of Choice: Sword (Large Two-Handed), One-Hand Wield
Armor of Choice: Light Leather to Heavy Full Metal Armor
Fighting Style: Mix of Naruto's and Cloud's, named "Naruto's Strife", has many others
Ultimate Attack: Omnislash Mark 2 (Meta Angel Version)
Ultimate Form: Red Meta Angel (Ten Tailed Jinchuriki w/ Meta Angel combination)
Distinctive Features: Always has his sword on his back, scar over his right eye (vertically cutting through the eye lid), missing elbow down of right arm, replaced with machine arm covered in a fake layer of skin, wears a shield bracer on left arm, deploys large shield, covered in fake layer of skin, blue eyes, blonde spikey hair much like Clouds.
Story: Began as a normal mortal, but by the age of 16, he warped through time and space; a stimulative Chaos Control without a Chaos Emerald. His first destination was the world of Azeroth, the land of Orcs or Durotar, there he met the Warchief, Thrall. Gaining assistance and tutoring from Thrall, he soon became a warrior that defeated the Alliance single handedly, without killing a single human, dwarf or gnome, the most hateful of the Horde and most fierce of the Alliance. That ended the fourth war, which broke out when the Alliance discovered his existence in the world. The war was named, "The War of the Traveler," due to Mitchell's new occupation. Thrall soon gave Mitchell the right to leave the land, Kalimdor, and even the world as he pleased. Mitchell asked Thrall for manuscripts dictating what he should do, Thrall obliged, and sent him off through a Chaos Control hole, perhaps the first ever made. He soon landed on Sonic the Hedgehog's world, where Sonic, Tails and Knuckles trained him to be more deadly and fierce, as self defense. Sonic had also heard that he'd have come, but when Eggman heard of this, he was hot on their tails. Mitchell swiftly executed his first ever Homing Attack, and sent Eggman flying back to his lab. Sonic, seeing that Mitchell needed a way to travel between worlds without exausting himself by using magic, gave him a Chaos Emerald, but Mitchell, refused and created a fake one to suit him. Mitchell soon went to other worlds, trained by various people, growing older through each warp through time and space. His mortal enemy, Shadow Mitchell, soon gave him trouble. Mitchell rallied the best of his teachers, Thrall, Sonic, Naruto, Kakashi and Cloud, to face his Shadow, in hopes of defeating him. Little did Mitchell know, that he would have to face near death before winning. On a rock spire that went thousands of feet off the ground, it was a fight to the death between Mitchell and Shadow Mitchell. The sparred for some time, until Mitchell lost his footing at the edge, and fell off. Screaming in terror and anger, Mitchell attempted to plant his sword in the stone to stop his fall, only to lose it, stuck in the rock he hoped to have saved him, not kill him. As he fell, he was engulfed in a bright light, that allowed him to be saved. His first instance of turning into the fabled Meta Angel or God Warrior. He defeated his shadow without insident after transforming. As thousands of years for him passed, he soon developed super natural strength, but keeping his body at the age of thirty for traveling through time and space so much. He settled down and married his medicinal experiment, who never said anything about being an experiment, Naayna Lightangel. To Mitchell, another thousand years passed until he had his first child, Michael.
Mitchell is considered by many the ultimate of fighters, as his war scar over his right eye prooves, as well as his machine arm shows. Every now and again he has to assist his son, who is living up to the name of Olson. His wife is also a fighter much like him, but mortal, as she defends their home world, never Chaos Controlling. He considers Truely an ally, but is always saying he'll break something important someday.
His left arm, though not always shown, is infected by the Scourge, but he has complete control over it, since he and many others of both the Alliance and Horde, defeated Arthas, the Lich King. In honor of Arthas' remembrance of Jaina and his change of heart right before his final breath, he named his arm's curse, "Arthas."
Mortal Enemies:
• Alliance
• Sasuke Uchiha and "Taki"
• The Akatski
• Shinra
• Sephiroth
• Heartless
• Orginization XIII
• Covenant
• Deepground
• Tsviets
• General Shephard
Immortal Enemies:
• Shadow Mitchell
• Kyuubi (Nine Tailed Jinchuriki, Fox)
Allies:
• Horde
• Leaf Village
• AVALANCHE
• Sora and Co.
• UNSC
• WRO
• CCWD
• Samus Aran
• USMC
• SAS (Task Force 141)
• Rangers
• Truely and his troop
Nice Sonic and Modern Warfare references.
Okay, we'll compromise!
A shitty fanfiction that disguises itself as a book! Done.
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23908284]it"s a f**king book!!!!!!!!!![/QUOTE]
Book chapters typically consist of multiple paragraphs.
well then i don't see any point in talking to you morrons
And by the way it's a fictional, digital BOOK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23908207]my friend made that for my book and i'm 15 you @$$[/QUOTE]
So, basically it's every good video game character against every bad one.
Also, It's spelled ass. You don't have to censor it, and you aren't cool for doing so.
[QUOTE=Cognomen;23908306]Book chapters typically consist of multiple paragraphs.[/QUOTE]
And usually have some form of paper... covery... thing.
[editline]07:20PM[/editline]
[QUOTE=ManningQB18;23908318]So, basically it's every good video game character against every bad one.
Also, It's spelled ass. You don't have to censor it, and you aren't cool for doing so.[/QUOTE]
Ass damn fuck shit bitch balls
You can swear on the internet.
YOUR PARENTS WILL NEVER FIND OUT
[QUOTE=CommanderMayhem;23908322]And usually have some form of paper... covery... thing.
[editline]07:20PM[/editline]
Ass damn fuck shit bitch balls
You can swear on the internet.
YOUR PARENTS WILL NEVER FIND OUT[/QUOTE]
The cover(title) comes with it. and i censor it because i want to
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23908316]well then i don't see any point in talking to you morrons
And by the way it's a fictional, digital BOOK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!![/QUOTE]
See you later then
A book usually has something called effort and intellect. And it normally doesn't make you stupider for reading it.
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23908347]The cover(title) comes with it. and i censor it because i want to[/QUOTE]
Alright, it seems weird to put extra effort in to censoring things.
Plus, ass isn't even that offensive. T.V doesn't censor it.
congratulations you both have been reported.
[QUOTE=dragonhawk;23908378]congratulations you both have been reported.[/QUOTE]
For what?
Hey guys, check out this sample chapter from my new book:
Chapter One: The Sad Family
Once there was a guy whom everybody loved. "We love you!" said the family "We love you so much!" But then he died, and his family was sad.
Exeunt.
Alright guys, I think we really should stop
Advice OP, work on creating a story that's completely original.
It can be hard, others universes are already created, but work at it, and make something new.
We'll review that.
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