[QUOTE=Wickerman123;43043952]From the way your writing, it's like we are just looking down on what is happening.
I'm no writer but you need to write more from the first person to engage the readers more. You jumped into the story really quickly too - that's not always a bad thing but it feels like your piece is rushed.[/QUOTE]
First person isn't strictly necessary. It all comes down to the skill of the writer and how well they can capture your imagination.
my last work for a internship
first 2 are old work
[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/rpk5x7D.jpg?1[/IMG]
damn that compression
Tomorrow I'm going to send my internship applications. I would like to do a 2D/Animation intership.
This is my portfolio website: [url]http://timvdhoek.nl[/url] if you have c&c they are more than welcome.
[url=http://tombulju.tumblr.com/post/68780650962/this-is-what-being-bored-at-midnight-causes]This[/url] is what being bored at midnight causes:
[img]http://25.media.tumblr.com/cab6afb88dfbf47e1451c343bb1b07c5/tumblr_mx6ot4IHFw1sq4jjoo1_500.png[/img]
I’m a bit proud of the head, considering all I did was take a crash course on bird anatomy, but I wish I could say the same about the left hand and foot. I can’t fix them for the life of me.
...maybe I should be bored more often.
(Also holy shit my scanner is so bad, I upped the contrast so much that you can actually see the dirt on the sheet and some of the lines still look blurry. Ugh)
[QUOTE=lintz;43045822]oh boy, umm
where do i start.
i shan't[/QUOTE]
Look, if you're gonna say something say it. One thing I hate more than unconstructive criticism is no criticism at all. I something I hate even more is teasing.
Go ahead, say what you want, I don't bite.
[IMG]http://puu.sh/5zScz.png[/IMG]
Redid a past design.
[QUOTE=Manibogi;43045694][url=http://tombulju.tumblr.com/post/68780650962/this-is-what-being-bored-at-midnight-causes]This[/url] is what being bored at midnight causes:
[img]http://25.media.tumblr.com/cab6afb88dfbf47e1451c343bb1b07c5/tumblr_mx6ot4IHFw1sq4jjoo1_500.png[/img]
I’m a bit proud of the head, considering all I did was take a crash course on bird anatomy, but I wish I could say the same about the left hand and foot. I can’t fix them for the life of me.
...maybe I should be bored more often.
(Also holy shit my scanner is so bad, I upped the contrast so much that you can actually see the dirt on the sheet and some of the lines still look blurry. Ugh)[/QUOTE]
Stiff & unbalanced pose, over simplistic limb shape/form, strange clothing dynamics. Proportions aren't terribly off but it seems pretty wonky; especially on the lower section. If you're going to practice anatomy, study from reference (and if you did, provide the ref). Don't focus on drawing the lines for the muscles themselves (like the bicep curve), try and get the general outline of the limb instead. You seem to understand which way muscles face based on hand orientation so it's a step in the right direction.
I should note his neck appears to be attached directly to the top of his head behind the ear, which is rather confusing.
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wow gnikegap
[editline]2nd December 2013[/editline]
here have this shit someone was like "ur do art cool draw pic me" so I am not really going that well i made them look super fugg so far
[t]http://puu.sh/5zTCy.jpg[/t]
[QUOTE=imMonkeyGOD;43045982][IMG]http://puu.sh/5zScz.png[/IMG]
Redid a past design.[/QUOTE]
Pretty nice! Good form and decent proportions. Her right calf is a bit too thin compared to the left, and I think the knee could use some definition. The line weight could be reorganized; the lines seem to get thicker on the leg section for no real reason and it makes it stand out more. I would say the thighs/hips need more shape but I'm not really sure it matters because I can still tell it's a female regardless. The cell shading seems rather inconsistent and contrast-less. I'm not too keen on clothing design so I can't really comment on that.
[QUOTE=Anax;43046131]Stiff & unbalanced pose, over simplistic limb shape/form, strange clothing dynamics. Proportions aren't terribly off but it seems pretty wonky; especially on the lower section. If you're going to practice anatomy, study from reference (and if you did, provide the ref). Don't focus on drawing the lines for the muscles themselves (like the bicep curve), try and get the general outline of the limb instead. You seem to understand which way muscles face based on hand orientation so it's a step in the right direction.[/QUOTE]
Thanks, I see what you mean by all that so I'll try to keep it in mind for future projects. I'm not sure why I drew the lower section at an angle and disproportionate to the rest of the body, but I must've been too tired. Though, to be honest, I did throw that section in at the last minute, trying to finish it asap. Shouldn't do that.
[QUOTE=Biscuit-Boy;43046149]I should note his neck appears to be attached directly to the top of his head behind the ear, which is rather confusing.
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An eagle's neck does attatch to near the top of its head, although I'll admit mine is slightly off.
Here's what I was using, as a reference:
[IMG]http://puu.sh/5zU26.png[/IMG]
[IMG]http://puu.sh/5zTUb.png[/IMG]
I'd mention my [I]other[/I] reference, but it's NSFW :v:
[QUOTE=Biscuit-Boy;43044800]Oh glad to know I wasted my time and effort trying to help. Thanks for disclosing that you didn't put any effort in or expect any effort out ahead of time.[/QUOTE]
if you feel like not wasting time you could give me feedback with this:
[QUOTE=wewt!;43040901]well, speaking of comics, I finished my practice scene
[IMG]http://i.cubeupload.com/C1vKUf.png[/IMG]
Her kid sister is not the main focus of the story, I hope her description didn't come off too mary sue-ish, as it was just building up her impressive skillset which is balanced/contrasted by her being dumb as a rock
I apologize for:
-ugly grey background
-placeholder font
-large amount of dialogue, it is a chatty scene but it feels off, so that's something to work on straight away[/QUOTE]
since I posted it on the previous page and received almost no feedback, and I am in dire need of it since I have a lot to learn
many sad :(
[QUOTE=lintz;43045405]First person isn't strictly necessary. It all comes down to the skill of the writer and how well they can capture your imagination.[/QUOTE]
Or indeed necessary in any way whatsoever.
[QUOTE=wewt!;43046420]if you feel like not wasting time you could give me feedback with this:
since I posted it on the previous page and received almost no feedback, and I am in dire need of it since I have a lot to learn
many sad :([/QUOTE]
The narrative and the drawings are okay but they could work a lot better together by changing some elements.
For example, with the second panel, you've written an impressive resumé for her but the scene is very static. I feel that it could work better perhaps, if you changed the scene to a close up of the two back to back shooting away. The lighting from the muzzle flashes of their rifles works to contrast their features and adds to the dramatic effect.
Having an impressive panel like that and [I]then[/I] following up with the final panel, where instead of standing front to front, we have the character on the right stomping forward with an irritated expression while the ditz walks behind her, with her arms behind her head and laughing without a care. That emphasises her stupidity, since she's shown to be rather competent in the previous panel but then you show her to be completely clueless and crass in this one.
[img]http://oi43.tinypic.com/14cr6nk.jpg[/img]
Mixed media illustration I did of a Cambodian kid. It's extremely rare I do anything with traditional media except just drawing with pencils. First time I've done this sort of process, and I think I did alright.
[thumb]http://s15.postimg.org/le4f5xzwb/Jesus02noglasses.png[/thumb][thumb]http://s15.postimg.org/fne8s7rwb/Jesus02.png[/thumb][thumb]http://s15.postimg.org/b2s2da86z/Jesus02beard.png[/thumb]
Its a demon-fighting hippie-jesus for a gameproject ill be part of these next two weeks.
Oh gosh, I wish that wasn't mirrored. Beyond creepsie.
he reminds me of master roshi
[QUOTE=Biscuit-Boy;43046149]I should note his neck appears to be attached directly to the top of his head behind the ear, which is rather confusing.
[editline]2nd December 2013[/editline]
wow gnikegap
[editline]2nd December 2013[/editline]
here have this shit someone was like "ur do art cool draw pic me" so I am not really going that well i made them look super fugg so far
[t]http://puu.sh/5zTCy.jpg[/t][/QUOTE]
So few and so large strokes...
how the fuck
They get smaller the closer you get to the face. The eyes were done with a veeery small brush.
Still, I'm glad it appears I'm moving towards my goal of not using tiny brushes!! Sweet :)
p much done with these
[img]http://25.media.tumblr.com/048558ae0651372beb2d3fa5ff2dbecd/tumblr_mx73whidqN1s32mjoo1_1280.jpg[/img]
[img]http://24.media.tumblr.com/2b6ecc95f359601810d883ebf1c026b2/tumblr_mx73whidqN1s32mjoo2_1280.jpg[/img]
in other news, some 3D work i did in like 10 minutes when i was bored got on the tumblr frontpage and got like 1500 notes which was really surreal
[t]http://25.media.tumblr.com/7ea6079054e87b76b9a5da659b88bc8c/tumblr_mx14p8OT2f1s32mjoo1_1280.jpg[/t]
sadly the pink windows 7 screenshot is not my own
Well, it happened because it's cool yet simple. As i've already said on deviantart, I really like it.
As for your portrets...welll, the woman looks like she's missing a part of her skull, and her ear is really small. Also, her shoulders are off too. I mean, they are almost horisontal and flat. And yeah, the nose looks like it goes directly from her forehead, which is kinda..wierd. Sorry :(
I like the second one, though. Looks like a typical adventurist or something Indiana Jones inspired.
i think the woman's face is pretty great tbh i think the slight mistakes or whatever make her look a lot more like someone who would actually exist and you would run into rather than the opposite of what i just said
dunno about the 2nd one though something seems off?? i think it's probably the expression being robotic/plain
nice rendering style w/e though really both of them own
thanks guys. really useful stuff
well for one, the focal points of the eyes don't match.
he reminds me of nathan drake, it's nice.
Hard highlights and deep shadows will actually make a portrait look less realistic and flatter. It basically makes it looks like a photograph. If you use more realistic highlights, midtones, and shadows it will stand out more. I would suggest always using a reference for the skin tones when drawing people. Never drown out any of the facial planes with the lighting.
[IMG]http://artlemon.ru/imagesbase/1/big/mattelson-marvin/karin-mattelson-artfond.jpg[/IMG]
WIP:
[img]http://fc09.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2013/336/f/3/fairy_wip_by_fadingz-d6v7vz6.png[/img]
Playing with water mostly.
C&C welcome!
The lighting on those rocks still doesn't make sense. The light is coming from behind those stones int he background so the top parts of the rock shouldn't be lighter.
I dont think the lighting looks perfect on the rocks either, but it's reasonable to assume the light is also coming from above in general, so it makes sense for them to be lit on top as well.
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