[QUOTE=Biscuit-Boy;44357202]I think there are much more important things to be said about the horse than the lines around its eyes not implying bone structure properly.[/QUOTE]
The cartoonish mouth, smooth transition between neck and front leg, no 'bump' on the jaw, neck not being bent forward, the tail being solid rather than hair, the bottom of the body not curving down then up towards the back, and the hind legs being poorly defined.
[t]http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/9/9a/Avenger_-_Westphalian_horse.jpg[/t]
Better? Yay, nay? Also screenshot until I can find a way to have the format not be an eyesore.
[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/aevJ5rw.jpg[/IMG]
[editline]26th March 2014[/editline]
Change 'Holt's massive plated chest armor' to 'Holt's massive chest armor' . Left plated in there on accident.
[editline]26th March 2014[/editline]
also 'his face', and 'He was laying prone among some dried up foliage.' **
screenshots suck.
[t]http://i.imgur.com/HZ2CytV.jpg[/t]
[t]http://i.imgur.com/PFC0tlJ.jpg[/t]
Critique please!
Should I stop using the soft brush?
Made a vector of myself, took me abit.
[img]http://i.imgur.com/Gsfpn5U.png[/img]
([img_thumb]https://fbcdn-sphotos-f-a.akamaihd.net/hphotos-ak-frc1/t1.0-9/575199_141344149409930_782863110_n.jpg[/img_thumb])
[QUOTE=StupidUsername67;44357603]Better? Yay, nay? Also screenshot until I can find a way to have the format not be an eyesore.
[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/aevJ5rw.jpg[/IMG]
[editline]26th March 2014[/editline]
Change 'Holt's massive plated chest armor' to 'Holt's massive chest armor' . Left plated in there on accident.
[editline]26th March 2014[/editline]
also 'his face', and 'He was laying prone among some dried up foliage.' **
screenshots suck.[/QUOTE]
Broken tenses, more informal.. actually I think this is worse than the last revision :v: in any case the words have changed but the quality has not. You need an author's sensibility, which you lack. Go away and read a hundred books and then give it another whirl. (I'm serious, 100. Tick them off as you finish them!)
Don't stop writing though. Just make sure you are reading as well, and reading broadly - as many genres and authors and formats as you can.
[QUOTE=Biscuit-Boy;44345545]Dude you'd better read through some Tim Clare before I enturbulate your colon with a rusty pickaxe.
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How do I submit something of my own?
[IMG]http://i.cubeupload.com/eEuzTV.jpg[/IMG]
[IMG]http://s8.postimg.org/jv181nd45/IMG_0998.jpg[/IMG]
Fuck midterms. Fuck them up their asses :suicide:
[editline]26th March 2014[/editline]
Sorry for the shitty camera quality
Jeez, the little metal scratches really make that first one stand out. Are you gonna upload scanned versions some time?
[t]http://i.imgur.com/dsRNBkI.png[/t]
I'm really proud of how this one is turning out. I think I'm almost done with the background so I'll soon be adding in a scrawny archaeologist and a (wo)man whose name may or may not be Olga.
[QUOTE=dnqboy;44363089]How do I submit something of my own?[/QUOTE]
[url]http://www.timclarepoet.co.uk/?p=2016[/url]
Be aware, the backlog is immense. I submitted a story before Christmas, so he's either skipped it over or it's going to be a hell of a long time before your work sees the light of day.
[t]http://i.imgur.com/77a3ZlC.jpg[/t]
Made a flag for a school project; It has a few issues with symmetry and some wonky bumps on it, but if they like the concept, i'll fix it up.
[QUOTE=JoeyZ;44366072][IMG]http://s8.postimg.org/jv181nd45/IMG_0998.jpg[/IMG]
Fuck midterms. Fuck them up their asses :suicide:
[editline]26th March 2014[/editline]
Sorry for the shitty camera quality[/QUOTE]
Holy shit. I wanna reach out and pull something out of the drawing.
I'm so glad I'll never have to draw a still life again :v:
I don't know if this is the right place to ask
what is a good reason for someone to do evil things, know that it's evil and that they're wrong yet do it anyways because they have to
yet a good enough flaw in the plan to allow the protagonist to defy them and still achieve the good goal
a basic story idea that's repeated over and over but i have no reasons for why it'd happen
but not having to do with utopia's or alien invaders
i am having a brain fart
maybe it should be more simple than i'm trying to think about
[QUOTE=Fire Kracker;44367709]I don't know if this is the right place to ask
what is a good reason for someone to do evil things, know that it's evil and that they're wrong yet do it anyways because they have to
yet a good enough flaw in the plan to allow the protagonist to defy them and still achieve the good goal
but not having to do with utopia's or alien invaders
i am having a brain fart[/QUOTE]
Your situation sounds extremely specific, it's kind of hard to tailor a response to something like that. Does the antagonist know that they're evil and [I]still[/I] want to do it, or do they not want to do the evil thing but their hand is forced? And what do you mean by wrong, as in morally wrong or logically wrong? (the latter being something like "I'm committing genocide because this species was responsible for the destruction of a whole planet but deep down I know it wasn't actually their fault and so the genocide isn't justified")
[QUOTE=Fire Kracker;44367709]I don't know if this is the right place to ask
what is a good reason for someone to do evil things, know that it's evil and that they're wrong yet do it anyways because they have to
yet a good enough flaw in the plan to allow the protagonist to defy them and still achieve the good goal
a basic story idea that's repeated over and over but i have no reasons for why it'd happen
but not having to do with utopia's or alien invaders
i am having a brain fart
maybe it should be more simple than i'm trying to think about[/QUOTE]
Antag wants to cure cancer
Antag designs virus to kill everyone that has the DNA that makes them most likely to have cancer
Protag modifys the virus to change DNA instead, making everyone cancer resistant
Protag heralded as hero
Happy days :v:
[sp]dont take that seriously though[/sp]
[QUOTE=ElectricSquid;44367803]Your situation sounds extremely specific, it's kind of hard to tailor a response to something like that. Does the antagonist know that they're evil and [I]still[/I] want to do it, or do they not want to do the evil thing but their hand is forced? And what do you mean by wrong, as in morally wrong or logically wrong? (the latter being something like "I'm committing genocide because this species was responsible for the destruction of a whole planet but deep down I know it wasn't actually their fault and so the genocide isn't justified")[/QUOTE]
they're not really forced to do it but they do still want to do it
morally wrong yet i don't want them to look like they're wrong for doing it
[editline]27th March 2014[/editline]
the still wanting to do it is more of a "we've come too far" kind of thing like "we've escalated this so if we stop then it'd have been for nothing"
they wouldnt really be evil i guess but when they're gone i kind of want a feeling of wonder if stopping them was really the right thing to do
they're also heroes in their own way
[editline]27th March 2014[/editline]
it just sounds so weak
but i need a reason for an antagonist to not be hated neither for his personality nor his actions but just that it is what it is
mmm like a starving bear attacking a child, the bear isn't doing anything wrong but we kill the bear because to us it's wrong to kill a child
[editline]27th March 2014[/editline]
only that they both have to be human
[editline]27th March 2014[/editline]
and the bear is killing the child to feed it's own family
[QUOTE=Fire Kracker;44367839]they're not really forced to do it but they do still want to do it
morally wrong yet i don't want them to look like they're wrong for doing it
[editline]27th March 2014[/editline]
the still wanting to do it is more of a "we've come too far" kind of thing like "we've escalated this so if we stop then it'd have been for nothing"
they wouldnt really be evil i guess but when they're gone i kind of want a feeling of wonder if stopping them was really the right thing to do
they're also heroes in their own way
[editline]27th March 2014[/editline]
it just sounds so weak
but i need a reason for an antagonist to not be hated neither for his personality nor his actions but just that it is what it is
mmm like a starving bear attacking a child, the bear isn't doing anything wrong but we kill the bear because to us it's wrong to kill a child
[editline]27th March 2014[/editline]
only that they both have to be human
[editline]27th March 2014[/editline]
and the bear is killing the child to feed it's own family[/QUOTE]
Ah, the sunk costs fallacy, perhaps? "I've invested too much in this to turn back now".
[QUOTE=Fire Kracker;44367709]I don't know if this is the right place to ask
what is a good reason for someone to do evil things, know that it's evil and that they're wrong yet do it anyways because they have to
yet a good enough flaw in the plan to allow the protagonist to defy them and still achieve the good goal
a basic story idea that's repeated over and over but i have no reasons for why it'd happen
but not having to do with utopia's or alien invaders
i am having a brain fart
maybe it should be more simple than i'm trying to think about[/QUOTE]
Ooh, here's an idea - the antagonist is trying to maintain their ailing father's business, and in their efforts to keep it afloat they have to resort to cruel and illegal activities (child labor, slavery, drugs, etc?). Even though they know it's wrong, they can't stop because there's no alternative.
Or maybe the antagonist creates a cult that they genuinely believe in, but after it becomes huge and powerful they realizes its teachings are false. However, they cannot simply leave or tell everyone they were wrong or else they would be killed, so they need to maintain it.
Is that the kind of thing you were looking for?
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[t]https://31.media.tumblr.com/c89e5ebe57d2adeeef47ca23194ca240/tumblr_n2unvjOf5v1r3e2fho1_1280.png[/t][/QUOTE]
*barf* Frank, you sick fuck.
[t]https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/13086361/OC%27SAI/Sassbot.jpg[/t]
And another thing from yesterday
[t]https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/13086361/iScribble/sylviaref.png[/t][t]https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/13086361/OC%27SAI/sylvia.jpg[/t]
Fuck legs because hey I ain't gettin payed.
Can anyone tell me what tools is this guy using?
[url]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ksIsbwHqeks[/url]
Also heres some 3am scribbles to keep the content pumping, just a link because theyre a bit nsfw
[url]https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/65357207/3amblues.jpg[/url]
[img_thumb]http://i.imgur.com/O9M7245.jpg[/img_thumb]
[img_thumb]http://i.imgur.com/JOGy4q0.png[/img_thumb]
Am I doing this right? I'm gonna try and paint it but I have no idea what I am doing (just to be sure, the next step is where I paint with a grayscale softbrush right?)
[QUOTE=Fire Kracker;44367709]I don't know if this is the right place to ask
what is a good reason for someone to do evil things, know that it's evil and that they're wrong yet do it anyways because they have to
yet a good enough flaw in the plan to allow the protagonist to defy them and still achieve the good goal
a basic story idea that's repeated over and over but i have no reasons for why it'd happen
but not having to do with utopia's or alien invaders
i am having a brain fart
maybe it should be more simple than i'm trying to think about[/QUOTE]
what is a situation that would push you to do something evil in order to accomplish something that you see as being ultimately good?
For example; hunting down and killing all the babies with a specific heritage because you've discovered they've got a specific gene that makes them generators of a disease that could cause mass destruction. Your goal is good and decent (to prevent disease outbreak and save many many people) but the means to that goal are inherently nasty (stealing babies away from their mothers and killing them).
It's good that you're thinking of villains as more complex characters than the archetypal 'pure evil' big bad. Sauron was boring because (unless you invest time in reading supplementary material outside of the text of The Lord of the Rings itself) he's just a guy who is evil and wants power because he's evil and is evil because he wants power and is also a major dick. There's no depth or humanity to him - he is just there for the sake of being an evil thing for the good guys to fight.
I've been trying to get back into drawing recently so I've [url=http://smeargleusedsketch.tumblr.com/]started a sub-blog[/url] to post my various little cartoons/sketches on. There's just a couple Pokemon doodles on there so far but more stuff to come soon. I welcome your feedback/hate.
[IMG]https://31.media.tumblr.com/5e9db91359bafb3e7fa9a2fd96fc5590/tumblr_n30kloq5p81tq6nfgo1_1280.png[/IMG]
practice sketches, one for each tribe from the game i'm currently working on.
i like that you can kinda guess the personalities/environments of some of the tribes
[editline]27th March 2014[/editline]
also i went on your portfolio and i have a couple of recommendations:
have a home button on every page (this is a really bad mistake)
also probably have your email address somewhere on every page even it's just size 10 font in the corner - it can make all the difference
[QUOTE=EmRA;44371192]Can anyone tell me what tools is this guy using?
[url]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ksIsbwHqeks[/url][/QUOTE]
Taking a look around he himself doesn't even know:
[quote] A lot of them are Japanese and seeing as how I don’t speak the language and can’t read what it says on the pen or brush, I’m no help. If it got down to it, I can draw with a pencil and binder paper. No special pen or brush is going to make you better if you simply can’t draw to begin with.[/quote]
I'm thinking something refillable for the heavier brushes. I know you can buy ink by the bottle and I would expect he's be doing something like that considering the heavy use. I have a brush that can be filled with water to thin out water colors and ink but I've put in slightly thinned ink before and that wasn't a problem. For a better mileage on your ink pens get paper that feels dense. It shouldn't necessarily look glossy, just smooth and be thicker than your average copy paper.
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