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And there were days the whispering from the mine shaft a little ways over the hill just past the treeline were coherent and could be understood in perfect English, but only just above a whisper, and only in the deadliest of silences. It affected me not as my life was the simple one of a hermit in the woods who lived from off the land. Washing myself in the deeper parts of the river, and cooking up delicious stews and broths from the meat of smaller rodents and assortments of herbs. Fish was also rather nice on warm summer evenings when the wind picked up strong enough to make the oak trees creak in protest. There were those days; and there were also those night. Those nights when I could see shadows passing by the windows and quiet conversations being held just beyond my bedroom walls. The scratching on the prefabricated door and the whistling winds that seemed unnatural in their resonation and direction were more than enough to drive any normal man mad...it's kind of ironic. But I was no normal man. True it was I had lived amongst these spirits and trees for many a year. Enough now that I couldn't recall their number even in my most vivid moments of clarity. But I am old now and such numbers and factual information eludes me to the point of apathy beyond apathy. The trees did their little dance, and the spirits talked their little talk, and we all have lived together here in peace for quite sometime. I can only imagine the kind of thoughts that would stir up to any explorers who might stumble upon my little settlement in the woods. First I believe they would ask who I was, and I would tell them just as any friendly old timer might, and then they would ask that dreaded question I'd never be able to give an answer to. "Why did you build so many other houses?"
[QUOTE=BigOwl;34810517]And there were days the whispering from the mine shaft a little ways over the hill just past the treeline were coherent and could be understood in perfect English, but only just above a whisper, and only in the deadliest of silences. It affected me not as my life was the simple one of a hermit in the woods who lived from off the land. Washing myself in the deeper parts of the river, and cooking up delicious stews and broths from the meat of smaller rodents and assortments of herbs. Fish was also rather nice on warm summer evenings when the wind picked up strong enough to make the oak trees creak in protest. There were those days; and there were also those night. Those nights when I could see shadows passing by the windows and quiet conversations being held just beyond my bedroom walls. The scratching on the prefabricated door and the whistling winds that seemed unnatural in their resonation and direction were more than enough to drive any normal man mad...it's kind of ironic. But I was no normal man. True it was I had lived amongst these spirits and trees for many a year. Enough now that I couldn't recall their number even in my most vivid moments of clarity. But I am old now and such numbers and factual information eludes me to the point of apathy beyond apathy. The trees did their little dance, and the spirits talked their little talk, and we all have lived together here in peace for quite sometime. I can only imagine the kind of thoughts that would stir up to any explorers who might stumble upon my little settlement in the woods. First I believe they would ask who I was, and I would tell them just as any friendly old timer might, and then they would ask that dreaded question I'd never be able to give an answer to. "Why did you build so many other houses?"[/QUOTE] I like it, I would have added and changed a few things though. The first sentence needs to get broken up a bit more. I would have put a comma after "little" and "hill". "It affected me not" also seems to be very formal. In the sentence "those were the days; and those were also the night." you forgot to add an "S" to the nights. Other than that, it's good and I like it. It depicts compulsion (to build houses) as an extraneous and intangible thing, which is what compulsions are sort-of like. You did well with this, though.
[QUOTE=Martut;34810654]I like it, I would have added and changed a few things though. The first sentence needs to get broken up a bit more. I would have put a comma after "little" and "hill". "It affected me not" also seems to be very formal. In the sentence "those were the days; and those were also the night." you forgot to add an "S" to the nights. Other than that, it's good and I like it. It depicts compulsion (to build houses) as an extraneous and intangible thing, which is what compulsions are sort-of like. You did well with this, though.[/QUOTE] It's always the damn grammar and shit that gets me. I do these in as little as 10 minutes so the grammar never really get's revised. I also like who you translated why those other houses were there :v: Not what I was going for but that's actually a very good thing. [editline]22nd February 2012[/editline] Another one I'm sure is riddled with embarrassing mistakes. The sun sets and rises and I turn in my sleep as the cold unforgiving ground chafes my back and ribs beneath me. The sleeping bag is worn and sand ridden; thread-bare and torn in one too many places. What once was a life preserver, boasting buoyancy was now a place I rested my head. The tree I slept under was more than just a stagnant organism frozen forever in a sea of dark delayed synapses and motionless antiquity, but it was also a guardian of me and all that was. It's fruits were bountiful and ripe though I plucked not a single of them for I knew they were more than just cherries. They were the beating hearts of hopes and dreams all through the world and they all hung delicately from single stems, only needing little effort to liberate them from their suspension in risks. The breeze blows and the cherries bend and lean with the wind in unison. Dangling back and forth as the gales and gusts shift their perspectives and ideologies. They lack eyes but I know when I sleep they all stare at me in wonder; and when I do pluck them, they both curse me a praise me. They look to me for guidance and they follow me through thick and thin though they and I are motionless, for they cannot move, and I choose not to. Without this cherry tree I am nothing, and I would not exist, and yet for some reason the cherries still thank and love me as if I were the very one that planted their seed. It was not I that planted the seed but merely another cherry. That hatchet is starting to look very friendly.
[QUOTE=BigOwl;34810923]It's always the damn grammar and shit that gets me. I do these in as little as 10 minutes so the grammar never really get's revised. I also like who you translated why those other houses were there :v: Not what I was going for but that's actually a very good thing. [editline]22nd February 2012[/editline] Another one I'm sure is riddled with embarrassing mistakes. The sun sets and rises and I turn in my sleep as the cold unforgiving ground chafes my back and ribs beneath me. The sleeping bag is worn and sand ridden; thread-bare and torn in one too many places. What once was a life preserver, boasting buoyancy was now a place I rested my head. The tree I slept under was more than just a stagnant organism frozen forever in a sea of dark delayed synapses and motionless antiquity, but it was also a guardian of me and all that was. It's fruits were bountiful and ripe though I plucked not a single of them for I knew they were more than just cherries. They were the beating hearts of hopes and dreams all through the world and they all hung delicately from single stems, only needing little effort to liberate them from their suspension in risks. The breeze blows and the cherries bend and lean with the wind in unison. Dangling back and forth as the gales and gusts shift their perspectives and ideologies. They lack eyes but I know when I sleep they all stare at me in wonder; and when I do pluck them, they both curse me a praise me. They look to me for guidance and they follow me through thick and thin though they and I are motionless, for they cannot move, and I choose not to. Without this cherry tree I am nothing, and I would not exist, and yet for some reason the cherries still thank and love me as if I were the very one that planted their seed. It was not I that planted the seed but merely another cherry. That hatchet is starting to look very friendly.[/QUOTE] The tense got a little mixed up in the sentence "was now a place I rested my head". I think it would be "was then a place I rested my head.". "organism" would probably have a comma after it. Small [del]type[/del] typo (oh the irony) at "they both curse me a praise me.". I don't know if you're doing it intentionally but you're repeatedly depicting madness very well. The way that a person feels and how they're interpreting their strange anxieties and compulsions. It specifically seems very slightly obsessive-compulsive, so probably just mid-grade neurotic, but nevertheless it makes it an interesting read. I wouldn't post too many things too quickly, and if you have tons of stuff to post maybe you could make the first (that I've seen) "Journal" thread for your writing. But, that would be up to you.
[QUOTE=Martut;34811114]The tense got a little mixed up in the sentence "was now a place I rested my head". I think it would be "was then a place I rested my head.". "organism" would probably have a comma after it. Small [del]type[/del] typo (oh the irony) at "they both curse me a praise me.". I don't know if you're doing it intentionally but you're repeatedly depicting madness very well. The way that a person feels and how they're interpreting their strange anxieties and compulsions. It specifically seems very slightly obsessive-compulsive, so probably just mid-grade neurotic, but nevertheless it makes it an interesting read. I wouldn't post too many things too quickly, and if you have tons of stuff to post maybe you could make the first (that I've seen) "Journal" thread for your writing. But, that would be up to you.[/QUOTE] Meh, I dabble in writing as something I do when I'm bored, I never intend to get serious.
More kag [IMG]http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2012/051/7/6/bomberman_by_waloumi-d4qfpi0.png[/IMG]
[QUOTE=Martut;34808534][t]http://www.mohrresults.com/wp-content/uploads/image/Beach.jpg[/t] Nothing? :v: Shorelines are pretty random, I could see that happening on a beach, Maya just needs to add more depth to it to make it look like it's going farther out than it is if it's going to get that close. If Maya happens to plan otherwise (totally talking like you can't read this Maya), then he/she should do what you suggested.[/QUOTE] That is a view of a shoreline receding away from the camera Usually the comparison pictures you pull out of google or whatever are pretty apt, but this is not at all :v: Just look at Maya's picture, and look at where that waterline is going, and consider how far away the horizon line is supposed to be It doesn't bear thinking about! [editline]22nd February 2012[/editline] [QUOTE=waloumi;34812195]More kag [IMG]http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2012/051/7/6/bomberman_by_waloumi-d4qfpi0.png[/IMG][/QUOTE] The perspective on that sword is very odd
I find it really hard to critique poetry. It seems to me that poetry is to literature what fine art is to popular culture. It's very hard to critique something which by its very nature often breaks from the norm.
[QUOTE=MakoSkyDub;34812622]That is a view of a shoreline receding away from the camera Usually the comparison pictures you pull out of google or whatever are pretty apt, but this is not at all :v: Just look at Maya's picture, and look at where that waterline is going, and consider how far away the horizon line is supposed to be It doesn't bear thinking about![/QUOTE] The shoreline rises above the horizon in the background of the ref image, so if the beach happened to go backwards towards the horizon, then it makes sense just fine. The water is below the shore. It's just his/her frequency of shoreline waves stayed the same so it looks like it's flat. [QUOTE=Maloof?;34812816]I find it really hard to critique poetry. It seems to me that poetry is to literature what fine art is to popular culture. It's very hard to critique something which by its very nature often breaks from the norm.[/QUOTE] Every poem (and therefore every person who makes them) has a purpose that it's trying to push. Take Sylvia Plath's "Mirror": [quote=Sylvia Plath never] I am silver and exact. I have no preconceptions. What ever you see I swallow immediately Just as it is, unmisted by love or dislike. I am not cruel, only truthful--- The eye of a little god, four-cornered. Most of the time I meditate on the opposite wall. It is pink, with speckles. I have looked at it so long I think it is a part of my heart. But it flickers. Faces and darkness separate us over and over. Now I am a lake. A woman bends over me, Searching my reaches for what she really is. Then she turns to those liars, the candles or the moon. I see her back, and reflect it faithfully. She rewards me with tears and an agitation of hands. I am important to her. She comes and goes. Each morning it is her face that replaces the darkness. In me she has drowned a young girl, and in me an old woman Rises toward her day after day, like a terrible fish.[/quote] That is amazing poetry without stating "This is about how people obsess over their looks." "This is what a mirror might say if it were to speak." or "Don't throw your life away staring at yourself in the mirror, because you'll grow old eventually." But it means all of those things in a way that we can derive naturally if we are able read it in such a way. This is the reason why poetry is really hard. You have to learn how people think and learn to get them to think. It's much easier said than done and I have yet to sit through a room of people listening to a poem without a person going "THIS IS STUPID, IT MAKES NO SENSE." audibly, in whispers to a friend, or silently but they say it all with a look. There's no way to make it perfect which is why it's such an interesting thing to do. There's no goal in mind of "I want to be the best at this!". There is no "best" person, just like in visual art, and you're exploring how to make people who are receptive to you think and feel. You're studying yours and other's emotions. Poetry is about taking a meaning and then not stating it specifically so that it's immediately snatched up and digested by the intellect, but instead drives itself forth straight to the heart and then drifts its way up to our minds so that we can slowly imbibe it through strong emotions and dissipate it into wordless thoughts. You just have to look for that meaning in a poem, and then you can help people get there further. It's also why critiques on poetry are very personal and draw forth a bit of the critique-giver's inner self and they more or less let you know what they're thinking of while reading your poem. Poetry is also intricately related to any form of art. Paintings and Poetry are both striving for the same thing; they want to make an impact on their audience in some way. [editline]February 22 2012[/editline] I have a sandwich waiting for me in the fridge. [editline]February 22 2012[/editline] As it turns out its delicious.
So I did my background first this time. I think I got a hang on painting ocean xD Pushed tide line forward to avoid the connection with horizon, lol [img]http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2012/052/f/1/vacation_color_wip_by_fadingz-d4qketl.png[/img]
[QUOTE=Maya2008;34813739]So I did my background first this time. I think I got a hang on painting ocean xD Pushed tide line forward to avoid the connection with horizon, lol [img]http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2012/052/f/1/vacation_color_wip_by_fadingz-d4qketl.png[/img][/QUOTE] What are those wires? Power lines or hand-rail-things? Too loose to be hand rails, too short to be powerlines. Poles too flimsy to be hand rails.
should be hand rails. I think I sag it down every iteration subconsciously, by the time I realized, which is now, it has become this state lol. I'll tight them up.
If they're hand rails then the posts are also too far apart to imply any sort of sturdiness
Something not quite right about her right foot... might just be me.
there is no ankle
I think a major thing to tackle before a billion more tiny anatomy tweak suggestions would be the dock. I know it's a little rickety by design, but the red/magenta marked tilt is buggin' me hard [img]http://img692.imageshack.us/img692/3301/ss20120222034723.png[/img] we've been picking this picture apart hard, sorry maya :I
Doodled these after getting an idea for a platformer game. (Blown up 3x for visibility) [IMG]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/52726455/shit%20sprites.png[/IMG] You play as an elemental being or something that can switch between fire, electricity and water. Each stance gives different abilities and bonuses. [editline]22nd February 2012[/editline] Original size for anyone curious [img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/52726455/shittysprites%20small.png[/img]
[QUOTE=Squeaken;34815462]Doodled these after getting an idea for a platformer game. (Blown up 3x for visibility) [IMG]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/52726455/shit%20sprites.png[/IMG] You play as an elemental being or something that can switch between fire, electricity and water. Each stance gives different abilities and bonuses. [editline]22nd February 2012[/editline] Original size for anyone curious [img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/52726455/shittysprites%20small.png[/img][/QUOTE] Make sure you remember how to animate the run cycle :v:
[QUOTE=Back_Slash;34802797]that dock size is perfect. Docks around my area sometimes are an arm in width. Albeit they are private.[/QUOTE] Why must people keep trying to use albeit in their sentences around here Just realised it's been an age since I posted something, so here's a crest I drew up for a fictional cigarette packet [img]http://i.imgur.com/LwOiZl.jpg[/img]
[QUOTE=Goodthief;34816125]Make sure you remember how to animate the run cycle :v:[/QUOTE] It's gonna be annoying, cause for every animation I'm gonna have to do each hairstyle flowing differently. Also thoughts on having clothes for each form on the character? Or would it kinda ruin the whole silhouette thing?
[QUOTE=Squeaken;34816413]It's gonna be annoying, cause for every animation I'm gonna have to do each hairstyle flowing differently. Also thoughts on having clothes for each form on the character? Or would it kinda ruin the whole silhouette thing?[/QUOTE] I think some clothing would definitely work if you tried it, but it gives a less "natural" feeling to it. I'd imagine Water might have something flowing. Maybe a gown or something similar. Definitely something that allows for it to make waves (but those can be hard to animate). Electricity might have different things depending on what kind of a mood you're going for. If you want a more modern I could imagine something like headphones and something easy to move around in, maybe a tank-top and some generic pants of some kind. I'd imagine you could add little sparks of electricity coming off of her. If you wanted to go for an older approach I don't know quite what you'd do, but irregardless I think the clothes should reflect energy (and somehow electricity, if you can get it in there). Fire I might make something like a T-shirt/tanktop, and shorts, because she's hot (not [i]that[/i] way) and it'd be cool to see it reflected. I think it might be cool if you're able to create little ephemeral and purely-visual flames that go where she walks, not just from her feet but maybe her hair too, just a thought. I've done a bit of 2D Sprite Making, it's loads of fun. [QUOTE=MakoSkyDub;34816301]Why must people keep trying to use albeit in their sentences around here Just realised it's been an age since I posted something, so here's a crest I drew up for a fictional cigarette packet [img]http://i.imgur.com/LwOiZl.jpg[/img][/QUOTE] Mako, I'm going to be honest I don't know what it might be... not sure if it was supposed to be something or what. I kind-of see a T-Rex fighting a giant pre-baked turkey without a head, both wielding polearms. [IMG]http://i.imgur.com/mxfS6.png[/IMG] If so, then grats, you have made the funniest cigarette package symbol I have ever seen.
[QUOTE=Squeaken;34815462]Doodled these after getting an idea for a platformer game. (Blown up 3x for visibility) [IMG]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/52726455/shit%20sprites.png[/IMG] You play as an elemental being or something that can switch between fire, electricity and water. Each stance gives different abilities and bonuses. [editline]22nd February 2012[/editline] Original size for anyone curious [img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/52726455/shittysprites%20small.png[/img][/QUOTE] Quick pro tip for pixel art, if you're going to blow it up so people can see it, make it either 2x, 4x, or 8x. Preferably not 8x, because the bigger the pixel art is, the less people seem to like it. Also make sure your dimensions are a power of 2, because computers render an image wit ha power of 2 faster, or something like that. So that means make your dimensions 16, 32, 64, etc. Dimensions like 24 and 48 work as well, if you need dimensions in between those first three.
I made a caricature entirely out of numbers [IMG]http://i42.tinypic.com/xcktwi.png[/IMG] I will call him Dewey Decimal.
[QUOTE=Squeaken;34816413]It's gonna be annoying, cause for every animation I'm gonna have to do each hairstyle flowing differently. Also thoughts on having clothes for each form on the character? Or would it kinda ruin the whole silhouette thing?[/QUOTE] maybe something small like necklaces or belts. Something to make each one unique.
[QUOTE=salmonmarine;34816607]Quick pro tip for pixel art, if you're going to blow it up so people can see it, make it either 2x, 4x, or 8x. Preferably not 8x, because the bigger the pixel art is, the less people seem to like it. Also make sure your dimensions are a power of 2, because computers render an image wit ha power of 2 faster, or something like that. So that means make your dimensions 16, 32, 64, etc. Dimensions like 24 and 48 work as well, if you need dimensions in between those first three.[/QUOTE] Cheers, I'm pretty new to spritework. [QUOTE=Martut;34816536]I think some clothing would definitely work if you tried it, but it gives a less "natural" feeling to it.[/QUOTE] Cheers for the tips :) Yeah I feel like the element stuff will show more in animation, the flame hair will burn and small cinders will fall from her body, the electric hair will be kinda staticy at the tips and small sparks will show on her body, for the water the hair will wave/undulate, and drops of water will fall from her. I feel like having her naked will kinda dehumanize her, cause I wanted her defining features to be the energy stuff rather than anything human. On the other hand I really like drawing clothes, and it may add some style to the character, and if the clothing reflects the elemental theme well it'd work nicely. I may do what Goodthief said and chuck in some jewelery.
I like the void look of her body, actually. Makes me want to focus on the color and style rather than all the little details. If you want to preserve the style, but still include a more "normal" form, you could always just give her a human-like, neutral form.
[QUOTE=Big Dumb American;34817242]I like the void look of her body, actually. Makes me want to focus on the color and style rather than all the little details. If you want to preserve the style, but still include a more "normal" form, you could always just give her a human-like, neutral form.[/QUOTE] Well, the point of the game is trying to restore your humanity after being turned into this elemental thing. She doesn't quite have a neutral form, I think? Anyway yeah, I think you're kinda right there, the point from the start was to use a silhouette character. I'm working on the run cycle now, and I'm thinking that doing all the clothes for each character in every animation is gonna be a lot of work for a little result.
[QUOTE=MakoSkyDub;34816301]Why must people keep trying to use albeit in their sentences around here [/QUOTE] I actually been using that word in regular speech since I was like 15
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