Creative Work That Doesn't Deserve A Thread V5 <Dongery Penis Edition> - General

Really empty. Not minimalistic, not clean, but empty. The text is hardly readable, you need to find a better and more readable calligraphic font. And what is up with the capital letters? They don't match and collide with the calligraphic lowercase letters. You need more highlights and midtones to define the shapes of the purse, because right now it just looks like a black dump of something. The presents text also looks squashed, as if you squeezed it in to make it fit in and be smaller than the title. If you did indeed squeez it, then un-squeeze it and find a more compact font or change the spacing between the letters. That's my 5 dollars.

[QUOTE=DemonDog2;25052899] First attempt at photography. had to use an iphone camera because I'm broke and don't have enough for a camera. Sorry for the watermark, I'm out of town and can't get to the original. so, it look nice?[/QUOTE] Had to use an iPhone because I'm broke LOL

[QUOTE=dgg;25062598]Really empty. Not minimalistic, not clean, but empty. The text is hardly readable, you need to find a better and more readable calligraphic font. And what is up with the capital letters? They don't match and collide with the calligraphic lowercase letters. You need more highlights and midtones to define the shapes of the purse, because right now it just looks like a black dump of something. The presents text also looks squashed, as if you squeezed it in to make it fit in and be smaller than the title. If you did indeed squeez it, then un-squeeze it and find a more compact font or change the spacing between the letters. That's my 5 dollars.[/QUOTE] Are any of these fonts more legible? [img]http://ahb.me/wEZ[/img] For the weird font changes in the title, the T was intentional (I just like the way it looked in comparison to the text) but the E must have been a highlighting error on my part. I'll fix the squashed text and get on that bag now. In the mean time, I made a robot head: [img]http://ahb.me/wF9[/img]

[QUOTE=jenny7332;25063449]Are any of these fonts more legible? [img_thumb]http://ahb.me/wEZ[/img_thumb] For the weird font changes in the title, the T was intentional (I just like the way it looked in comparison to the text) but the E must have been a highlighting error on my part. I'll fix the squashed text and get on that bag now.[/QUOTE] The top one is a bit more readable, but the middle one looks better. If you can find something that is a bit like both then I think that would work great. And the capital T should align with H. Notice how they form a / line, but that the right side of the T's serif misses the H's line by a few pixels.

So I have been playing Starcraft 2 a lot and this came out of it. [IMG]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/6092109/Hydralisk/Hydralisk_small_photoshop.png[/IMG] [U]Bigger[/U] [IMG_thumb]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/6092109/Hydralisk/Hydralisk_big.png[/IMG_thumb] I adjusted the contrast to match what it looked like in real life, the scanner made it incredibly light. Mostly mechanical pencil, with the occasional HB and 6H thrown in.

thats awesome bro

Looks pretty cool, but doesn't really look like a zerg to me

I kinda took my own creative spin with it, occasionally looking at a reference picture. That's probably why.

[QUOTE=Fenriswolf;25063776]So I have been playing Starcraft 2 a lot and this came out of it. [img)thumb]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/6092109/Hydralisk/Hydralisk_small_photoshop.png[/img_thumb] [U]Bigger[/U] [IMG_thumb]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/6092109/Hydralisk/Hydralisk_big.png[/IMG_thumb] I adjusted the contrast to match what it looked like in real life, the scanner made it incredibly light. Mostly mechanical pencil, with the occasional HB and 6H thrown in.[/QUOTE] Looks good :smile:, for more impact I would consider setting a defined light source, to add some more depth: I noticed yours has shading to mark the monster as 3d but it seems like there's just one large frontal light. I scrapped the bag idea and made this: [img]http://ahb.me/wID[/img] Suggestions?

Now the drawing is so dominant and big and the text is so small. Also why is the "Earnest" in it's own paragraph? It looks weird and it's tucked into his head. The question mark also looks like shit because it's crammed up in his hair , make it smaller so that it is on his face, not his whole head. It also looks out of place that the tie indicationwhatever is hard and blocky whilst the rest of the suit is charcoaled and messy. There is also not a very good definition of where his neck meets the suit. We can see the suit and we can see the head, but we can't see where the neck and head meets the suit. I kinda liked the bag more to be honest. But I think that also has to do with what I just pointed out with the dominance and bad composition. But it also made more sense for the bag to be the dot under the question mark, rather than his mouth, which isn't round at all.

[QUOTE=dgg;25065525]Now the drawing is so dominant and big and the text is so small. Also why is the "Earnest" in it's own paragraph? It looks weird and it's tucked into his head. The question mark also looks like shit because it's crammed up in his hair , make it smaller so that it is on his face, not his whole head. It also looks out of place that the tie indicationwhatever is hard and blocky whilst the rest of the suit is charcoaled and messy. There is also not a very good definition of where his neck meets the suit. We can see the suit and we can see the head, but we can't see where the neck and head meets the suit. I kinda liked the bag more to be honest. But I think that also has to do with what I just pointed out with the dominance and bad composition. But it also made more sense for the bag to be the dot under the question mark, rather than his mouth, which isn't round at all.[/QUOTE] Is this better at all? [img]http://ahb.me/wLC[/img] I'm just going to call stupidity (for myself, not you obviously)on most of those points you mentioned :v: Though, I actually rather like the lack of definition of his neck-ular region. Also, thanks for all the help- it's very much appreciated :tiphat:.

That looks much much better. The presents text is a bit small and unseen though, I think it will be clearer if you simply make it wider or bigger so it becomes naturally wider, move it some pixels down too so it's more mid-centered between the text and the top edge. I'd still like to see the edges inside where the shirt folds are charcoaled so that the bottom part has one style, not clash of two. Bottom text is fine, though I'd like to see it moved a bit to the right so the space between date and black line isn't so big and so there is just as much space between the black line and the text on both sides.

[QUOTE=dgg;25066955]That looks much much better. The presents text is a bit small and unseen though, I think it will be clearer if you simply make it wider or bigger so it becomes naturally wider, move it some pixels down too so it's more mid-centered between the text and the top edge. I'd still like to see the edges inside where the shirt folds are charcoaled so that the bottom part has one style, not clash of two. Bottom text is fine, though I'd like to see it moved a bit to the right so the space between date and black line isn't so big and so there is just as much space between the black line and the text on both sides.[/QUOTE] [img]http://ahb.me/wMe[/img] I made the collar lines less sharp. Hopefully, the play organiser will be happy with it as well.

Dates are messy. It's especially confusing how it says Mondey 11th, Tuesday 7:30pm tickets: 12th and wednesday 13th october 2010 adult £5, student £3. Don't make the day and date get splitted by the black line, it makes it that messy and hard to understand how to read, so you have to read it over again (1-3-5 times) before you understand it.

[QUOTE=dgg;25067569]Dates are messy. It's especially confusing how it says Mondey 11th, Tuesday 7:30pm tickets: 12th and wednesday 13th october 2010 adult £5, student £3. Don't make the day and date get splitted by the black line, it makes it that messy and hard to understand how to read, so you have to read it over again (1-3-5 times) before you understand it.[/QUOTE] I didn't really anticipate that as a problem :zoid: I was intending it to be read the first line and then the second like in a book. I don't really have any more time left to work on it unfortunately: art coursework has to come first I'm afraid. I'll probably have to change it anyway since she didn't give a set time.

[QUOTE=jenny7332;25073701]I didn't really anticipate that as a problem :zoid: I was intending it to be read the first line and then the second like in a book.[/QUOTE] It would be easier to read it like a book if the date wasn't split, like I said. Tuesday and 12 is split by the black line and thus it doesn't look like they belong together. Because "Tuesday 12th" is like a word rather than a sentence. So when a word gets sp lit it doesn't look like they really belong together and the brain has to work a bit to figure out how it works. I me an y ou can ea sily re ad th is as lon g as you conc ent rate, but it looks better like this.

[QUOTE=dgg;25073921]It would be easier to read it like a book if the date wasn't split, like I said. Tuesday and 12 is split by the black line and thus it doesn't look like they belong together. Because "Tuesday 12th" is like a word rather than a sentence. So when a word gets sp lit it doesn't look like they really belong together and the brain has to work a bit to figure out how it works. I me an y ou can ea sily re ad th is as lon g as you conc ent rate, but it looks better like this.[/QUOTE] Okay, you've made me paranoid enough to change it now :v:

[img]http://filesmelt.com/dl/artist.png[/img] Practising with my tablet!

[QUOTE=MelonGuy;25077580][img]http://filesmelt.com/dl/artist.png[/img] Practising with my tablet![/QUOTE] Old man's runny nose?

Yes. That is exactly what it is.

The hair is just his eyebrows. [editline]09:19AM[/editline] and noses always had balls

[QUOTE=3v3ryb0dy;24999292] It's lined paper, not shaded and it's a filthy trace.[/QUOTE] Wasn't a trace.

[IMG_thumb]http://i429.photobucket.com/albums/qq13/Element_Spirits/UnderConstruction.png[/IMG_thumb] Large image, thumb'd for size Uh... so yea it just doesn't really feel finished to me. It is the first one in a three part series I am doing, but I dunno... it just seems a bit bland :geno:

:siren: [B]Dork Alert! Dork Alert![/B] :siren: Found a guide about how to draw Fry from Futurama. So, I made an attempt. [IMG]http://filesmelt.com/dl/DSC00209.JPG[/IMG] In retrospect I find the legs rather disproportionate.

His neck looks rather wide and yeah the legs look a bit large.

[IMG]http://i297.photobucket.com/albums/mm225/SkywardDescent/Tankbot.png[/IMG] Got bored and started doodling a tank-robot thing. Not sure if I am going to finish.

[QUOTE=jenny7332;25067295][img_thumb]http://ahb.me/wMe[/img_thumb] I made the collar lines less sharp. Hopefully, the play organiser will be happy with it as well.[/QUOTE] The font just looks too cramped in my opinion.

[QUOTE=jenny7332;25067295][img]http://ahb.me/wMe[/img] I made the collar lines less sharp. Hopefully, the play organiser will be happy with it as well.[/QUOTE] this isn't really going anywhere start again with a different approach

[QUOTE=Fenriswolf;25096981]His neck looks rather wide and yeah the legs look a bit large.[/QUOTE] Yeah, the neck too. Overall; my first try, so I'll just keep training, I guess.

Around 3 hours of work done on the full-sized image. Here's the crane on first building from the left. It's not a finished sketch as lot needs cleaning up and sharpening before I can continue onto next part. [IMg]http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2010/271/3/b/kernel_mass_wip1_by_infernomonster-d2znar6.jpg[/IMG]Won't be contributing much else while working on this. Tough I have the pirate lumberjack thingy done