How I Stole $6k And Became a Felon - Keep Writing? - General

[QUOTE=daijitsu;28485522] oh god, your avatar... are you a juggalo? TELL ME YOU ARE NOT DOWN WITH THE CLOWN[/QUOTE] That's a dude from The Misfits, some 90s band I think. And OP; if I was you I'd go with service. From what I hear Jail is a lot worse.

[QUOTE=daijitsu;28485522]so, you're a 19 year old pothead from the Aurora area; a heavily populated area with multiple large towns, malls, and the city just down the street... if you played spin the bottle to figure out which direction you drive out of town, chances are you'll end up in city before corn. I know getting blazed isn't something that spawns the best of ideas, but was there [i]no[/i] point in your journey to Miami in which you snapped out of it and thought "what the fuck am I doing"? Gonna say it, it's reeeeally hard for kids from the suburbs to be taken serious in their angsty ways. There are high income and low income areas peppered amidst themselves all around the outskirts of the city, but I'm imagining you to be like the stoner kids in my area up by Gurnee, complaining the school sucks [despite the individual usually getting a B average if not better and having no detention record to speak of], their parents suck [despite living in a 4 bed 2.5 bath mansion of a house and having a car to call their own plus food and gas covered, courtesy of their parents], and how life is just totally brutal because they have to get a job workin' for [i]the man[/i] to pay for video games and drugs. Now that I'm done jumping to conclusions and judging you as a person, I gotta say the story sounds interesting. I know there isn't much you can do to change dialogue if it actually happened that way, but try and spice up things a little bit. Stoner stories should always be overly exaggerated anyways, that's most of the charm. plus, what kind of choice is that, prison or airforce? FUCK, if I knew stealing money would lead to flying jets I'd have robbed a bank at 18 [editline]1:11[/editline] oh god, your avatar... are you a juggalo? TELL ME YOU ARE NOT DOWN WITH THE CLOWN[/QUOTE] I agree with you, but... 4 bed 2.5 bath mansion of a house?

not mansions but the majority of the suburban cookie cutter houses are 3 or 4 bedroom. Mine's 3. I know the smaller areas in the immediate vicinity are horribly old, run down houses you'd expect to be abandoned. Single floor, two bedrooms and a bed for another kid in the corner of the basement, rent excessively high for what it is, etc etc. Not pretty. In comparison to the down sides, I have to deal with the cookie cutter drama since my sister goes to the high school just down the road, and it's rather pathetic visiting the place when you see these kids sitting in this beautiful giant new school talking about how everything sucks and the school is a horrible place and I hate living here my parents suck/are mean/etc. Then they get picked up by their mom driving a hummer.

[QUOTE=Haruharu Haruko;28458140]Do you?[/QUOTE] Angst basically involves feeling depressed and misunderstood. This guy doesn't seem to have problems with either of those things.

[QUOTE=Ender_Wiggin;28518577]Angst basically involves feeling depressed and misunderstood. This guy doesn't seem to have problems with either of those things.[/QUOTE] What are your parameters?

Other than seeming very unrealistic like the movie "The Hangover", it's pretty okay.

Can you just hurry up and write the next part

It's been a week, he's probably gone forever. ]: