A rap song I made - General

[quote]people say that i would make a super dad but i would feed a baby beer until it pukes and gags evil ass beats homeboy, worse than hitler peta says meat is murder, just merked your sister yeah she got it in the cervical[/quote] wat?

I liked it but it wasn't that exciting to be honest. It was more satire and I think It worked. I guess I expected something else :saddowns: Some of your word play was nice : "haters wanna hate they can die green like kermit'll " I guess I expected more patterns and different metaphors other than just similes I'd like to see you go harder though , like something really raw or pull something off less cliche than the "This is how boss I am" rap

What the fuck, did I just hear Tommy Wiseau mentioned?

[QUOTE=Feralicous;27109282]wat?[/QUOTE] I think it's all pretty self explanatory

[QUOTE=strayebyrd;27121454]I think it's all pretty self explanatory[/QUOTE] Enlighten me please

I don't even like rap yet I liked this

Not bad, I'd like to hear you try some more chilled out hip hop with some jazz samples or something, but that's just because that's the kind of hip hop I like. :v:

[QUOTE=Feralicous;27145009]Enlighten me please[/QUOTE] so am I explaining what each line means? in which case: [quote]people say that i would make a super dad but i would feed a baby beer until it pukes and gags [B]Here our narrator is informing us that people believe he would make a good father, but he refutes this, informing us that if given a baby, he would get it drunk, surely a factor of bad parenting[/B] evil ass beats homeboy, worse than hitler peta says meat is murder, just merked your sister [B]the first of these two lines refers to the 'evil ass' of the songs name, stating that these beats are so mean/bad/evil that they are worse that the Fuhrer, which is no small feat. The second line refers to Peta's general dislike of the use of meat as a food source, to which the narrator responds that he 'merked' an unseen characters sister. Considering the fact that Merked generally means to 'fuck up', and the reference to meat in the first half of this line, it is likely that the narrator is saying 'if meat is murder, then I just killed your sister with my meat (AKA penis) although it is unlikely that it means to literally kill her.[/B] yeah she got it in the cervical [B]This is the narrator showing off a little biological knowledge, and informing us of the general area in which he had sexual intercourse with the 'sister'[/B]. [B]As the cervix is a key part of the female reproductive system, it is an accurate estimation of the part of her body in which he placed his dick.[/B] [/quote]hope that clears it up