Creative Work That Doesn't Deserve A Thread V6 <3v3ryb0dy Hypocrite Critiques Edition> - General

I didn't have any posters :sax: So I decided to make a crappy one my self. [IMG]http://lh4.ggpht.com/_6cWrErc2ktM/TUM3ENvQtZI/AAAAAAAAACw/qugbtbpPAqo/s640/GamerProp.png[/IMG] My first thing in photoshop really.

[QUOTE=Saxor16;27715885]Trying to draw blueprints of a dude [img_thumb]http://img99.imageshack.us/img99/2036/annatommy.jpg[/img_thumb] Looks kind of like a vagina :buddy: [img_thumb]http://img99.imageshack.us/i/annatommy.jpg/[/img_thumb][/QUOTE] What's with the scribbly head

[QUOTE=Saxor16;27715885]Trying to draw blueprints of a dude [img_thumb]http://img99.imageshack.us/img99/2036/annatommy.jpg[/img_thumb] Looks kind of like a vagina :buddy: [img_thumb]http://img99.imageshack.us/i/annatommy.jpg/[/img_thumb][/QUOTE] It's like my art teacher says, 'Don't be a P, and just draw the D'

[QUOTE=DestWa;27715989]I didn't have any posters :sax: So I decided to make a crappy one my self. [img_thumb]http://lh4.ggpht.com/_6cWrErc2ktM/TUM3ENvQtZI/AAAAAAAAACw/qugbtbpPAqo/s640/GamerProp.png[/img_thumb] My first thing in photoshop really.[/QUOTE] That Russian is broken as hell

[QUOTE=lexus04;27708896]aridpheonix, are you for real[/QUOTE] Yeah, it's like my second time coloring in photoshop. Yeah, the car is horrible, I was just working on coloring, not drawing. Go easy on me, please.

How about no. Learn to draw before you color

[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3J3hnzdLi_o[/media] This is a video of the quartet I am going to attempt to do at our local Solo and Ensemble in the next few weeks. I think it went well for a school performance, but we may get wrecked if we go to state. Does anyone have any advice that they could give? I play the bari there, by the way. P.S: If this happens to not belong in this thread, I am very sorry. I couldn't find anything instrumental in the music subforum.

I'm going out pull out my tablet and draw something now.

[QUOTE=Detlef;27718152]How about no. Learn to draw before you color[/QUOTE] Whats the fun in drawing if you can't color as well?

Yeah, driving isn't very fun when the car is in black and white. :iiaca:

[QUOTE=lexus04;27716950]That Russian is broken as hell[/QUOTE] That's why you should never use google translator :science:

[QUOTE=DestWa;27715989]I didn't have any posters :sax: So I decided to make a crappy one my self. [img_thumb]http://lh4.ggpht.com/_6cWrErc2ktM/TUM3ENvQtZI/AAAAAAAAACw/qugbtbpPAqo/s640/GamerProp.png[/img_thumb] My first thing in photoshop really.[/QUOTE] Learn some Russian. Damn, late ash fuck.

[QUOTE=aridpheonix;27725692]Whats the fun in drawing if you can't color as well?[/QUOTE] Coloring something which looks bad usually wont make it look better.

I started work on a short piece (of writing). I don't have much yet, but it's something. C&C please? [quote]Darkness engulfed me. I pushed off from the cold metal. My heavy suit suddenly felt like it was nothing, as I moved away from the airlock. I grabbed one of the rails nearby, and swung myself to it so that I didn't float off into space. I looked above me. Well, okay, it could have been both above and below me. Space is weird like that. I dipped down, then pulled myself up on the rail to shoot myself to the top of the ship, catching hold of another rail. I could have just taken the ladder, but that gets boring after the fifth spacewalk. I lifted myself over the rail and planted my boots firmly on the hull plating. I raised my arm in front of me, and flipped a switch on the wrist panel. The electromagnets on my feet hummed to life. I walked across the hull plating, step by magnetised step. Sweat formed on my brow. Losing heat is a bitch in space. I detached the automatic screwdriver from my belt as I reached my destination. Simple maintenance. The chief engineer wouldn't normally have a job this menial. But I do it every month. I surveyed the grey box in front of me. Sometimes, ship builders had no sense of aesthetics. They go and make the hull svelte and curved, then stick a square lump on the top. It wasn't very large, but it was noticeable. I loosened the top of it. Despite it being routine, this was a very important task. If the sensor array's mechanism was out of alignment by even one femtometre, or the antenna pointing in a third of a minute in the wrong direction, the ship could collide with an asteroid and no one would notice until we were all space dust. The screwdriver buzzed as I took out the last screw. I pulled off the cover, and placed it on the hull next to me. I placed the screws back in their holes, so that I couldn't lose them. I peered inside. It appeared to be in working order. I took out the alignment caliper, and tapped the side of my helmet to activate the communicator. “Engineering, this is Lieutenant Dell. I'm about to begin sensor maintenance, please shut down the array. Send a system-wide alert about the temporary downtime.” My voice was a little scratchy. I hadn't drunk my morning coffee yet. “Roger, Lieutenant. Array going down in five.” was the reply. Sure enough, in five seconds the faint glow from the power conduits faded into nothingness. “Array is down, you can proceed with maintenance.” I reached into the mechanism. The familiar blue laser emitted from the ends of the caliper as I flipped the on switch. As I measured the distance between the various gears, my mind wandered. A man could lose himself out here, in the dark. Silence reigned. Beautiful, unbroken silence. Sometimes, when my workload was light and I needed to escape everyday life, I come out here with a book and a chair, and sat on the hull reading, using the helmet speakers to play soft jazz. One time, I even brought a Portable Environs-Dome out so I could drink a glass of wine and sit in my smoking jacket. A wire sparked out at me. More work to do. Absolutely fantastic. I smiled. I withdrew my arm, and read the display on the caliper. The mechanism was aligned correctly. I placed it back on my belt, and drew a length of wire out of a pouch next to it. I unplugged the faulty one, and inserted the new one in its place. I marked the bad wire with a small cutting laser, and placed it in the pouch. I mentioned that the wiring up here was starting to decay at the last department meeting. It seems no one bothered to come out and try and fix it. Typical. If you want something done, do it yourself. I honestly think I could get by with a much smaller department. I could take on quite a few of the responsibilities myself; I don't mind working, especially if it means I get to get away from the rest of the crew like this. In fact, I'd probably take on most of the spacewalks.[/quote]

I'm done with this now. Not got the time to 100% perfect it - on to the next project! [img]http://img232.imageshack.us/img232/1603/rifledesignwip.jpg[/img]

Perspective and thiness issues on the loading breach. [editline]29th January 2011[/editline] And projectile drop and wind drift especially when the case is 8" spike are very, very relevant. I can't imagine the recoil.

sciunce ficshun + hyperbole-filled product brochure = physics makes no sense

looks cool Chesty, I like the display

[QUOTE=HummingbrdJames;27729684]I started work on a short piece (of writing). I don't have much yet, but it's something. C&C please?[/QUOTE] I'm not really in the mood to read the whole thing, but no one really pays attention to writing in this thread, so I'll do what I feel like covering. I noticed two things after skimming. First, mood/tone. You start out with a somewhat surreal entrance. [I]Darkness engulfed me. I pushed off the cold metal, and suddenly my heavy suit felt like nothing.[/I] This indicates that the story is going to be dark and "out there." And then, suddenly, [I]Well okay, it could have been both above and below me. Space is weird like that.[/I] This is very jarring for the reader, a sudden 180 in mood. One moment it's dark and serious, the next it's almost light-hearted and playful. And it stays that way. Very misleading intro to that paragraph. Also, ask yourself, is it really necessary? To say what I italicised previous, do you have to say "well both above and below?" It seems like extra baggage, and you should really try to drop that. Same thing with the aesthetics sentences randomly placed. It doesn't seem like it should be there. Second, less important and in-your-face, I noticed a little repitition. In the sixth paragraph, [I]I placed[/I] happens twice. In a row. I thought I accidentally read the first sentence again, and it really confused me. Avoid the repitition of verbs for the most part, although, if you do it right, it can turn out pretty good. [editline]29th January 2011[/editline] I ended up reading the whole thing during my analysis anyways, oh well.

[img]http://www.filedump.net/dumped/forgottenones1296330307.PNG[/img] some landscape stuff.

Looks good in values, but the colors are so... boring. Doesn't really feel atmospheric at all. But maybe that's just a personal opinion.

i agree im not happy with it but i have a headache and i dont expect to pick it up again. :P

The Jestermummy. [img]http://fc00.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2011/029/4/4/the_jestermummy_by_emraperkele-d38c32k.png[/img]

I'm working on starting up a podcast, and I'm working on a banner for it. It's called "Apocalypodcast". How can I improve this rough draft of the banner? [IMG]http://img41.imageshack.us/img41/313/apocpodcastlogo.jpg[/IMG]

[QUOTE=rosar0980;27742374]I'm working on starting up a podcast, and I'm working on a banner for it. It's called "Apocalypodcast". How can I improve this rough draft of the banner? [img_thumb]http://img41.imageshack.us/img41/313/apocpodcastlogo.jpg[/img_thumb][/QUOTE] I don't know where to start. To be honest it just looks like three images placed next to eachother in MS Paint and some red text over it. Am I missing something? The text is off-center and there really isn't much balance partly because of that. I just don't know what to say on making it better, because pretty much anything will make it better at this point.

[QUOTE=Inacio;27743487] Jesus fucking christ that is amazing[/QUOTE] Thank you :3:

[QUOTE=Andokool12;27742985]I don't know where to start. To be honest it just looks like three images placed next to eachother in MS Paint and some red text over it. Am I missing something? The text is off-center and there really isn't much balance party because of that. I just don't know what to say on making it better, because pretty much anything will make it better at this point.[/QUOTE] It's actually Paint.NET. I was going to find a way to separate the images, a wavy line between each or something, but I wouldn't think of a way to do it. Can you give some ideas on "anything"?

[QUOTE=rosar0980;27743681]It's actually Paint.NET. I was going to find a way to separate the images, a wavy line between each or something, but I wouldn't think of a way to do it. Can you give some ideas on "anything"?[/QUOTE] Don't use P.NET, it really sucks.

[QUOTE=broo20;27743836]Don't use P.NET, it really sucks.[/QUOTE] What should I use then?

[QUOTE=rosar0980;27742374]I'm working on starting up a podcast, and I'm working on a banner for it. It's called "Apocalypodcast". How can I improve this rough draft of the banner? [img_thumb]http://img41.imageshack.us/img41/313/apocpodcastlogo.jpg[/img_thumb][/QUOTE] Improve everything. Really really boring looking.