Creative Work That Doesn't Deserve A Thread V6 <3v3ryb0dy Hypocrite Critiques Edition> - General

she has grown a second set if pupils!!!

what's wrong with both

[QUOTE=Autumn;29317088]what is going on with her left eye??[/QUOTE] Ahh, didn't see it at first, now I do, it's probably something to do with the original sketch, i'm gonna go back and work on it.

[QUOTE=Bomber9900;29317107]Ahh, didn't see it at first, now I do, it's probably something to do with the original sketch, i'm gonna go back and work on it.[/QUOTE] how do you redraw pupils in a totally different position without realising theres some already there

I was supposed to do the Friendly song on that album but didn't feel like re-mastering it because im a lazy fuck :/

[QUOTE=Oicani Gonzales;29317159][img_thumb]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/4861882/Facepunch/artistic/facepunchconcept.png[/img_thumb] Nobody liked it :saddowns: [editline]20th April 2011[/editline] ill cut my writs life sucks T_T[/QUOTE] because it is poorly composed shits happening all over the place

[QUOTE=Oicani Gonzales;29317260]mastering and mixing are satanic shit i dont know how to do it and i simply cant even get started [editline]20th April 2011[/editline] this is an walpaeper i made.. i felt rly inspirded and thought about my gf lol. xD [media]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/4861882/Screenshots/wallpaper/15.png[/media] *-* [editline]20th April 2011[/editline] love u jasmine <3 :3[/QUOTE] Why th hell would you assume your Girlfriend browses facepunch?

[QUOTE=Oicani Gonzales;29317385]you're poorly composed no ok just explain your point[/QUOTE] even just bringing everything down (in the same formation) just to the centre of the square would look better. also you should try and kern so that "a facepunch collaborative album" is the same width as "Concept"

[QUOTE=Autumn;29317458]even just bringing everything down (in the same formation) just to the centre of the square would look better. also you should try and kern so that "a facepunch collaborative album" is the same width as "Concept"[/QUOTE] depends what he wants the focus to be but composed as it is, yea.

it's not meant to look different. it's meant to look better. which it does

squeeze it in just a little bit more [img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/19936378/concept_fp.jpg[/img] [editline]20th April 2011[/editline] and maybe move it down a bit more [editline]20th April 2011[/editline] just a little

heres an idea maybe line the edges with the ratings stuff move font down move logo more center

there you go i entirely recreated it just now without the ratings and it looks better without them [img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1482927/fpconcept.png[/img]

A day or so ago I started writing a Blade Runner-esque cyberpunk story set in a huge metropolis called Jurmund built in the middle of a wasteland in central russia. I just started writing, it's around 3 pages long and I want to finish atleast a 20 page "chapter" towards the end of easter. If any of you feel like it, comment and criticise. I need it as I really like writing and it's something I wanna continue after I finish my school years. I named the story Runner (for kind-of obvious reasons) and with that said, here we go: [quote]Running is all I knew at the moment I heard the Purge Siren. Ever since I heard it, I've been running, not stopping for anything but to eat and drink. I can still hear the stomping of their power suits, the screaming of children being turned to ashes by the immolators of the gasmask wearing Cleansers. And that, freaking, siren that warns me and my fellow citizens impending doom. My throat burned and my lungs felt like they were on the verge of bursting due to the pressure I had put on myself, running for four days is not a very pleasant activity. I had yet to leave the metropolis and I was far away from the exits. I stopped to listen for any suits, Cleansers or soldiers. Nothing. I was relieved for a second but the shadow of stress, fear and violence rips the feeling apart. I was blown back several feet, my brain was completely wiped for the minute that followed, blacking out. I woke up a minute or so later, my head pounding and my heart beating like the drums of the wasteland tribes. I looked over to where I just had stood to see the wall and a part of the street completely blown away. I had been lucky, for once, to have survived. I checked my body for injuries and I find not a single scratch except for a few scorch marks on my bio-mechanical arm and leg. Standing up was not easy, my head was spinning and I felt like vomiting up the lunches of my whole life. "Over here, I saw a runner over here just a minute ago!" said a robotic voice. "Crap," I thought, "I'm fucked, so fucked.". How I was wrong, though. The voice belonged to a resistance fighter of the Talon Warriors, a tribe-gone-liberators, dressed in full combat gear and what seemed like a whole arsenal on his back. The heavy boots clomped and stomped towards me as I held my head, trying to stop the pounding for some stupid reason. The warrior held out his armored hand and as I took it, a shallow, near-silent bang was heard. The man quickly pulled me up and held me close to him as he covered me from the snipers in the buildings nearby. "Do you see the wall over there?" he said, looking towards where my used-to-be hiding place was, "Run in to the building and wait for me or one of my mates to come in. If you are unsure ask 'do you run, do you fight, or do you stay still?', we always answer 'all three, when the situation needs it.'.". I nodded and he counted down towards three, grasping what seemed to be only a tube. As he finished counting, he quickly turned around and shot a rocket towards one of the buildings. Everything seemed to slow down as I ran towards the blown out wall. The man ran after me, screaming "Run!". It was a weird site seeing such a heavily armored figure run almost faster than myself. The massive explosion followed and time seemed to speed up again. We reached the hole and jumped in, sitting down promptly as we enter. We gasp for air and wait for something to happen. Everything was, however, quiet and still. Three other warriors entered the building, their stomping exo suit boots making the ground shake alittle. "Great to see you alive, captain! Almost thought you were a gonner with all those freaking snipers over in the 32nd District, never thought we'd see you here." said the leader of the small group, taking off his helmet. His face was young but his beard looked like it belonged to those of a ancient warrior society, vikings I think they were called. "Who's this then?" he then said, pointing at me with a suspicious tone, "A Citizen?". The Captain stood up and took of his helmet to reveal a scarred, war torn face. His eyes were green and filled with a respecteable fire of revolution and he had a red mohawk to match. "Found him over there" he said pointing towards the wall where I previously had been moaning over my head, "he was blown away by a explosion just where we are standing right now, probably one of our own saw him and thought he was a enemy. His arm and leg say differently." he ended looking down at my fire scorched and dirty metal prosthetics. "Tell me, friend, why are you in this district?" asked the bearded man. "I was running away from the Cleansers over in 25th, the purge had just started when I ran away.". The bearded man pondered over something but promptly stopped to ask; "What's your name?". "Teri Horth, sir." I answered with a proud tone and a small smile. The man smiled and gave me his name, a name I will never forget, Vike Jegart. We shaked hands and the captain introduced himself to me aswell, calling himself Marcus Trumen. As we talked, we all realized one by one that we could not stay in this building, or district, forever. They handed me a combat vest and some protective garments for the rest of my body and a rifle aswell as a siderarm. As I checked on my gear, I heard the crackling sounds of distant gun fire. No doubt, the others heard it aswell and we started running towards the outer city wall at a fast and steady, pace. ___________________________________________________________________[/quote] Note, this was written in Wordpad (Windows 7, it's essentially Word now) so that's why it's set up in a weird manner when I post it, but if any of you want to download it and read it in the way it's meant to be read: [url]http://filesmelt.com/dl/runner11.rtf[/url] Remember, I wanna know what I should change, add or remove.

might i suggest something like this? [img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1482927/concept%20v2.png[/img]

google images im not spending that long on something thats not my work

i wouldn't use the flourish [editline]20th April 2011[/editline] it's not really relevant

Yay bottom of the page again. Heh. I think it's finished. I need to make it clear that it's about disasters (my theme), so I had to put the text on his forehead which is reference to a death certificate. Otherwise people would look at it and think he was an arsonist. Or not get the meaning. If you can think of a better way to get the message across I'll gladly take it into consideration as I'm not overly happy with the text. [img]http://img17.imageshack.us/img17/6784/facepreview4.jpg[/img]

[QUOTE=Goodthief;29316317]Also related, Chesty I want to thank you, ages ago you said that godspeed you! black emperor helps you be creative, well it's the best study music I have ever had. Gonna pass my IGCSEs![/QUOTE] that's funny cos i had to google that just to find out what it is you must have mixed me up with someone else :v:

[QUOTE=Rusty100;29315505]second time posted, i know but its finished now [img_thumb]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1482927/Posters/hobo%20with%20a%20shotgun%20finished.png[/img_thumb] went even more minimal this time, obviously post what u think [editline]20th April 2011[/editline] it has a white border it is hard to see on facepunch so i added the black line (not a part of poster)[/QUOTE] ok so i know i said i was done, but i just want to ask one more opinion before i may or may not get it printed for a friend [img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1482927/Posters/hobo%20with%20a%20shotgun%20finishedv2.png[/img] better before or after? [editline]21st April 2011[/editline] i am stopping posting it now i promise

I like everything about it but the font used at the top. Isn't that from Evil Dead?

wow almost time for a new thread

[QUOTE=Detlef;29324552]wow almost time for a new thread[/QUOTE] yeah this one went by slowly, if it wasn't for dgg and his rat then we'd still be pages behind

done in a sec

[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/tNWvQ.png[/IMG] whatcha gonna do

That's one nice robo cop sketch!

I don't think this thread should be titled Creative Work That Doesn't Deserve a thread anymore lol. Everyone just posts everything here. [editline]21st April 2011[/editline] [img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/12913216/Art/Traditional%20Paintings/WIP-%20Tradtional%20Painting/wip.jpg[/img] Also crap oil painting of this guy and his non existent neck. Still work in progress.

[QUOTE=Detlef;29327126][img_thumb]http://i.imgur.com/tNWvQ.png[/img_thumb] whatcha gonna do[/QUOTE] The reflective shine on that helmet is wonderful...

I drew a chair and shit in charcoal [IMG]http://img585.imageshack.us/img585/5390/achairand.png[/IMG]

LEVITATING CHAIR LEGS THE FUTURE OF CHAIRISTITY! no srs how you fuk up chair [editline]21st April 2011[/editline] learn to use and see values, don't slap that shit on there by guessing, compare one value to otter