Creative Work That Doesn't Deserve A Thread V6 <3v3ryb0dy Hypocrite Critiques Edition> - General

Why do few of the lights look like donuts at the bottom

Started a generic enemy character concept: [img]http://img822.imageshack.us/img822/3069/lineartwip.jpg[/img] Perspective and proportions issues ahoy.

wassup Isaac [editline]6th February 2011[/editline] was my first thought

Yeah I just realised how much the helmet looks like Dead Space... and I haven't even played Dead Space. I should probably change it.

Wassup Deus Ex 3.

God my inspiration is far too obvious. [editline]6th February 2011[/editline] Apart from the Dead Space thing. I genuinely have no idea where that came from.

I only noticed because I really liked the armour designs first time I saw them. Liking your work so far, you going to colour?

Yeah I loved the forearm/thigh armour so I kinda replicated it a bit. Yessum it's gonna be coloured. The lines will probably be about 50% visible on the final product. Not sure I have the time to paint entirely without line-art.

the suit looks more like a combine soldier

[img]http://ahb.me/1JJV[/img] Photoshop Tutorials :smug:

I was really bored today, couldn't find anything better to do that to try to draw my Medic. Since I suck at drawing anything organic, I didn't even bother with the face. [IMG]http://i.imgur.com/RrF4v.jpg[/IMG] Reference: [IMG]http://i.imgur.com/57Qnv.jpg[/IMG]

It's rather blurry.

[QUOTE=ChestyMcGee;27898170]It's rather blurry.[/QUOTE] Yeh, was drawing mostly with a big smooth brush.

Stop that

[QUOTE=Detlef;27898243]Stop that[/QUOTE] Huh?

big smooth brushes, it's terrible

I think the blur tool was used to. Try to stay away from that.

you have no idea how many lazarus projects this piece went through arg [img]http://img535.imageshack.us/img535/263/20110205314.jpg[/img]

[QUOTE=supersnail11;27896355][img_thumb]http://ahb.me/1JJV[/img_thumb] Photoshop Tutorials :smug:[/QUOTE] Maybe show off something that is a little better?

[QUOTE=wardencmd;27899762]you have no idea how many lazarus projects this piece went through arg [img_thumb]http://img535.imageshack.us/img535/263/20110205314.jpg[/img_thumb][/QUOTE] At first, I thought your thumb/finger was a dick with the foreskin pulled back.

it is

so tiny

[quote]1401 Prologue: Vlad Alucard The villagers pounded on the keep's doors, their village elder screaming a weak banishing spell. Vlad paid no attention, this always happened sooner or later. But this time would be different. After years of studying the dark magic's of the Alucard book and with new inventions such as steam technology, Vlad had created a machine. A machine his minions were preparing as he thought, he turned around and asked in a voice colder than ice, "Is it functional? We are burning night". "It is completed" his apprentice assured him with a soft tone, "we will activate before sunrise". Vlad turned and growled, his long grey fangs showing in the moonlight. An ear-splitting bang and some screams indicated that the villagers had managed to breach the keeps large ancient wooden door. Vlad smiled an evil smile as he graphically imagined his shades tearing the villagers souls from their mortal chains...[/quote] What do you gentlemen think? I'm writing a book, sorta for two reasons. One being, I need something to keep me sane and the other being I have way too much time on my hands. So critic the first paragraph please, I need an opinon off someone who isn't family.

[img]http://i537.photobucket.com/albums/ff339/Aaron_matherly/SpaceSpikeCastle_s.gif?t=1297039088[/img]

[QUOTE=technologic;27903900]What do you gentlemen think? I'm writing a book, sorta for two reasons. One being, I need something to keep me sane and the other being I have way too much time on my hands. So critic the first paragraph please, I need an opinon off someone who isn't family.[/QUOTE] Interesting. I'll admit, it did draw me in quite quickly. Some things bother me though. " in a voice colder than ice" That seems cheap to me and is the most obvious thing that stands out so far. I can't put my mind what the other problem I have is though. I think the first impression I get of the character is too slick, suggesting I wont be able to connect with him later in the story. Try and suggest there's a little more mystery to him, like is he really unbothered by the villagers? If so, why is he so desperate to get "The Machine" operating? I hope I'm being clear. [editline]7th February 2011[/editline] [QUOTE=Aathma;27904567][img_thumb]http://i537.photobucket.com/albums/ff339/Aaron_matherly/SpaceSpikeCastle_s.gif?t=1297039088[/img_thumb][/QUOTE] Don't draw on graph paper, it's too distracting.

[QUOTE=Detlef;27898243]Stop that[/QUOTE] I don't know, to me it looks stylish the way it is. But that's just my opinion.

[QUOTE=MrAfroShark70;27911420]I don't know, to me it looks stylish the way it is. But that's just my opinion.[/QUOTE] No it looks horrible and noobish. Seriously no one that are good at art use smooth/airbrushes for painting, trust me. Just stop

[QUOTE=Detlef;27911660]No it looks horrible and noobish. Seriously no one that are good at art use smooth/airbrushes for painting, trust me. Just stop[/QUOTE] Well, it really depends on preference, you see it as terrible and ugly. I see it as a somewhat stylish look. Sorry for having an opinion.

Another! Added lips to this one but now it has eyes (horrid) and is a woman (can't draw those for some reason). The face is strange but I'm working on it, it's been literally about four years since I've drawn a face. Anyway here is another: [IMG]http://img220.imageshack.us/img220/6988/scan0001nn.jpg[/IMG] I also wiped the crap off my scanner as well! Gonna do another attempt soon. . .

[QUOTE=MrAfroShark70;27911870]Well, it really depends on preference, you see it as terrible and ugly. I see it as a somewhat stylish look. Sorry for having an opinion.[/QUOTE] It's not an opinion, it's a bad techique.