Creative Work That Doesn't Deserve A Thread V6 <3v3ryb0dy Hypocrite Critiques Edition>

[Tacosheller]

[QUOTE=strider;28388476]A poster i've been working on:

[img_thumb]http://i56.tinypic.com/2duzajs.png[/img_thumb]

(i shamelessly stole rusty's dimensions for the border, don't sue me bro I want it to look good next to the goodbadugly poster if i'm gonna print it)

Somehow the idea looked better in my head, the silhouette of the girl somehow looks weird i dunno what it is. What do you guys think.[/QUOTE]

Should've used the actors from the original. Other than that, it's great. The detail text at the bottom might look a little better with a little more erosion, like you did with the rest of it.

[strider]

I didn't enjoy the original True Grit nearly as much as the new one that's why I chose these characters. I specifically didn't 'erode' the bottom text since it's more of an official part of the poster. But I'll try it anyway and see how it looks.

[rulssi]

After a long break I opened Photoshop again:
[url]http://rulssi.kapsi.fi/GalaxyOfLostDreams.jpg[/url]
3286x1080 resolution. Just started making a wallpaper for my dual-screen setup. :f
I'm still not happy with the planets and I feel like something is missing, think the colors are too strong as well.

[SeverePapercut]

damn

[Rusty100]

[QUOTE=dgg;28388790]I was going to say that I thought your first version was messy as shit.

Then you fixed it. It looks nice, but why the drop shadow if it's going to be printed on a card? it only makes sense on screen or in the middle of something to give something else an actual drop shadow. In real life you will just have some grey shit out on the edges.[/QUOTE]

the drop shadow on that image is only to illustrate it's dimensions on facepunch's white background

[editline]3rd March 2011[/editline]

[QUOTE=jenny7332;28387231]I like the left side much better than the right, could you have the card printed
portrait instead of the landscape with just the selection of the macaroons and
then the contact info on the back of the card?

I don't like the drop shadow on the red text, or the font. I think it would stand
out well enough without the shadow.

[editline]2nd March 2011[/editline]

Or maybe have the whole card portrait? I reckon it'd
look better in a linear format.[/QUOTE]
idk man i like the font and the very small drop shadow allows the beige colour to be more visible as they are the colours of his business

[editline]3rd March 2011[/editline]

[QUOTE=Tacosheller;28392324]Should've used the actors from the original. Other than that, it's great. The detail text at the bottom might look a little better with a little more erosion, like you did with the rest of it.[/QUOTE]

the original true grit is awful and john wayne is horrible.

[editline]3rd March 2011[/editline]

ALSO STRIDER can i make a suggestion
for the credits on the poster, try Futura Condensed (then maybe condensing it more with photoshop)

[SeverePapercut]

[QUOTE=rulssi;28393255]After a long break I opened Photoshop again:
[url]http://rulssi.kapsi.fi/GalaxyOfLostDreams.jpg[/url]
3286x1080 resolution. Just started making a wallpaper for my dual-screen setup. :f
I'm still not happy with the planets and I feel like something is missing, think the colors are too strong as well.[/QUOTE]
i like it very mystifying

[Hail Satan]

[QUOTE=Mr_Razzums;28382712]Yea your right, that's what rough drafts are for. However the one you drew is so fucked up almost everything about it is wrong, even the basic core parts are fucked up (for example the fence isn't even angled remotely correct). I dont mean to be ragin on you about this, but if you seriously think that "rough draft" is going to help you, then you are fooling yourself. For my rough draft on my next composition I might as well poop all over the paper.[/QUOTE]

Hey I got the color right

[JoeyZ]

[QUOTE=rulssi;28393255]After a long break I opened Photoshop again:
[url]http://rulssi.kapsi.fi/GalaxyOfLostDreams.jpg[/url]
3286x1080 resolution. Just started making a wallpaper for my dual-screen setup. :f
I'm still not happy with the planets and I feel like something is missing, think the colors are too strong as well.[/QUOTE]

That star field

[RoastBeefo]

[img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/766302/1/%20bob1.png[/img]
too big for my scanner, oh well
Takes it's place in my endless supply of WIP's

[PLing]

[QUOTE=Rusty100;28382512]cafe owner who i'm chill with and owns his tiny little cafe all by himself wanted little printouts of his macaron selection so i whipped him up somethin

[img_thumb]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1482927/macaron%20selection.png[/img_thumb]
cbf more effort!!

[editline]3rd March 2011[/editline]

i think it could use a nice swirly border actually[/QUOTE]

I think the positions are a bit off, they don't seem to be lined by anything. I made a quick edit on your design, hope you don't mind. It's not perfect but things are much more organized.

[img]http://img13.imageshack.us/img13/6313/macaronsf.jpg[/img]

Edit: Oh you revised your design already. Silly me.

[Rusty100]

do you like the revised version though?

[editline]3rd March 2011[/editline]

your idea is nice, but i think more plain black and white works better for their purpose
which is not exactly business cards, but to accompany the macarons on each table

[hentie]

[img]http://img708.imageshack.us/img708/5533/mockups.png[/img]
Using gimp like a pimp. Too poor to afford photoshop. Took me 10 minutes to do this and I'm bored. Have fun, Creationism forum.

[Rusty100]

of the event he is catering

[editline]3rd March 2011[/editline]

u merge ruiner

[PLing]

[QUOTE=duckboy38;28390010]I need some help... I made some updates to my previous drawing, from the start i knew what i wanted, a man doing some kind of energy blast from his hand... But i really don't think that i captured the motion and feeling of power that i intended. Need feedback, what i was thinking is either the actual " energy blast " should be bigger or a serious problem with the hand.. If i can't get it to look how i wanted i guess I'll just draw him punching something :-/
[img_thumb]http://farm6.static.flickr.com/5096/5493046690_44447991f0_z.jpg[/img_thumb]
[img_thumb]http://gyazo.com/13bb270a4690172dae3e691d705cff5d.png[/img_thumb][/QUOTE]

Like I said before you should use fluid and more loose strokes. Feel the motion and movement of the body. Try to think of the body as a bunch of long straight and curves lines.

And of course, pose yourself. Take a pose that you would imagine making a powerful spell takes, and use that as reference. Having a mirror is a huge advantage too.

Here's a (bad) example.
[img]http://img576.imageshack.us/img576/9506/lydqhzbg.jpg[/img]

[editline]3rd March 2011[/editline]

[QUOTE=Rusty100;28396237]do you like the revised version though?

[editline]3rd March 2011[/editline]

your idea is nice, but i think more plain black and white works better for their purpose
which is not exactly business cards, but to accompany the macarons on each table[/QUOTE]

Have the big Macaron selection and the occasions text lined up with the cake things (aligned left). Then drop the red Coffee Moment text down a bit.

Like so;

[img]http://img713.imageshack.us/img713/7390/mro44evv.jpg[/img]

Photoshop added black border ignore them. Or maybe they fit, dunno.

[Rusty100]

i dunno i reckon i liked it better when the title wasn't perfectly aligned to the macarons
and when Coffee Moments was aligned with a white space rather than the top macaron

yours feels a little TOO aligned, i like my last version where it was aligned, but not in a grid kind of way

[editline]3rd March 2011[/editline]

also yours looks a little too right oriented

[PLing]

Well as long as the customer is happy anything goes I guess. I think the main difference between the tight aligned and your whitespace aligned is the formality of the catering. Your more loose design could be better for a lighter gathering.

[thespectator]

Its a...

[img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/4162888/Thing1.png[/img]
[img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/4162888/Thing2.png[/img]

Yea I dunno.

[Rusty100]

[QUOTE=PLing;28396511]Well as long as the customer is happy anything goes I guess. I think the main difference between the tight aligned and your whitespace aligned is the formality of the catering. Your more loose design could be better for a lighter gathering.[/QUOTE]
Yeah it's nothing serious, he wasn't even expecting a professional approach.

And besides, I've already printed and cut out 12 of them
so

[editline]3rd March 2011[/editline]

[img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1482927/IMG_4534.jpg[/img]
they came out nice

except the chocolate filling looks a bit green
fucking hell

[Detlef]

[QUOTE=Rusty100;28396634]Yeah it's nothing serious, he wasn't even expecting a professional approach.

And besides, I've already printed and cut out 12 of them
so

[editline]3rd March 2011[/editline]

[img_thumb]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1482927/IMG_4534.jpg[/img_thumb]
they came out nice

except the chocolate filling looks a bit green
fucking hell[/QUOTE]

They're cute Rusty

[Rusty100]

ur the one thats cute...

nah jk how would i know u never post a photo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Detlef]

[QUOTE=Rusty100;28397231]ur the one thats cute...

nah jk how would i know u never post a photo!!!!!!!!!!!!!![/QUOTE]

Haha u still think I'm a girls that's cute

[Rusty100]

liar!!!!!!!!

[editline]3rd March 2011[/editline]

u know theres only one way out of this situation

[Detlef]

What u wanna see my dick?

[Rusty100]

yea babe xo

[onox37]

this thread is getting hotter by the minute

[Detlef]

But ofcourse

[onox37]

oh hey, like my new avatar, I guess that counts as work that doesn't deserve a thread. I love illustrator

[Detlef]

looks like some kind of intestines

[Rusty100]

is it a d made of minced meat???

[onox37]

sorta and yup