My Little Pony: Friendship is magic V12: We take your avatar and ship it in all directions
3,219 replies, posted
[QUOTE=Dashiel;29996578]Egh, I swear I had fixed that "her her" thing. Oopsie, thanks.
It's not GrimDark, you'll probably get a good idea of what's going on at the end of Chapter Two.[/QUOTE]
Yeah I reread it and I think I know what's going on, but the beginning definitely feels like grimdark and that might make some readers not go all the way through
[QUOTE=acidcj;29996591]Yeah I reread it and I think I know what's going on, but the beginning definitely feels like grimdark and that might make some readers not go all the way through[/QUOTE]
Grimdark fanfics are awesome.
Yeah, I know. I tried to tone down the whole death part, I wanted to put across the fact that they knew in their hearts that Pinkie wasn't really dead but were still deathly worried about her which is why Dash had such an extreme reaction where as the others were able to continue on.
[QUOTE=Dashiel;29996608]Yeah, I know. I tried to tone down the whole death part, I wanted to put across the fact that they knew in their hearts that Pinkie wasn't really dead but were still deathly worried about her which is why Dash had such an extreme reaction where as the others were able to continue on.[/QUOTE]
Yeah but Dash was the one who was there so if Dash thinks Pinkie is dead then Pinkie's probably dead
oh and you accidentally nobody instead of nopony (twice)
[QUOTE=Skunky;29996601]Grimdark fanfics are awesome.[/QUOTE]
You mean terrible?
[QUOTE=Ezhik;29996568]Good night for real now.[/QUOTE]
that's what they all say
[QUOTE=acidcj;29996626]Yeah but Dash was the one who was there so if Dash thinks Pinkie is dead then Pinkie's probably dead
oh and you accidentally nobody instead of nopony (twice)[/QUOTE]
Dash lost Pinkie in the darkness, she didn't see her die :ssh:
Chapter 2 is finished, I wanted it to be a bit longer but I keep falling to the temptation of knocking the character I'm using out:
[url]https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tGMSBfDPHK91Q4036xLzl-q-QY9MrU1gj61BFHYUMm8/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CL76nqEB[/url]
Chapter 1:
[url]https://docs.google.com/document/d/19gDdRyMUa2Rh0GFGu1R2yRRVm0cx5xK5N6fJlUv9a5A/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CKP43LoN[/url]
Why should people care if Pinkie Pie dies
[QUOTE=I Broke The Sun!;29996686]Why should people care if Pinkie Pie dies[/QUOTE]
Because people care about the ponies, I guess?[img]http://emotes.s3.amazonaws.com/mlp/pshrug.png[/img]
[QUOTE=Dashiel;29996667]Dash lost Pinkie in the darkness, she didn't see her die :ssh:[/QUOTE]
you never said that, i checked
[QUOTE=Dashiel;29996707]Because people care about the ponies, I guess?[img]http://emotes.s3.amazonaws.com/mlp/pshrug.png[/img][/QUOTE]
But pinkie pie?
[QUOTE=moesislack;29996637]You mean terrible?[/QUOTE]
[img]http://emotes.s3.amazonaws.com/ce/Lebowski.gif[/img]
[QUOTE=acidcj;29996709]you never said that, i checked[/QUOTE]
It's implied, you never explicitly see her die. The last thing you hear about her is that she is falling and then Dash fails to break the sound barrier and is flung backwards, losing track of her.
[QUOTE=Dashiel;29996750]It's implied, you never explicitly see her die. The last thing you hear about her is that she is falling and then Dash fails to break the sound barrier and is flung backwards, losing track of her.[/QUOTE]
Wait what am I missing a page or something
[QUOTE=madnath619;29991397]He's a male. There are three place's it can go according to fan fics about tentacle rape.
Go figure.[/QUOTE]
[sp]Butt, mouth and.............urethra? Ouch.[/sp]
Faily late.
Morning gents.
[QUOTE=acidcj;29996782]Wait what am I missing a page or something[/QUOTE]
[quote]“Pinkie Pie!” Rainbow Dash suddenly perked up and followed her down the hole as fast as she could. Building up more and more speed; she was right before, this cave went on forever.
Rainbow flew as fast as she could, deeper than she had ever been. The cave was growing ever darker in front of her and she could no longer see her hooves in front of her face, she couldn’t even tell how close she was to Pinkie Pie but she couldn’t give up. Memories of all they had done together fueled her further, all the times they had shared and the bonds they had formed. They were friends for life, the bearers of the elements of friendship. She couldn’t let Pinkie down, no matter how hard and how fast she had to fly.
“I won’t let you down Pinks, I won’t...” She thought to herself as she pushed harder and harder, but fatigue began to set in. Even the best flier in all of Equestria couldn’t fly at that sort of speed for this long while fighting against the sound barrier itself. She slowed down too much and was flung backwards, screaming in dismay “Pinkie! I’m so sorry...”[/quote]
End of Chapter One. I never at any point said that Pinkie fell to her death, only that Rainbow Dash failed to catch up to her.
Oh man I totally forgot to write today. Erggg.
TERRARIA Y U SO ADDICTING [img]http://emotes.s3.amazonaws.com/mlp/rgonk.png[/img]
Posting to show I'm alive post.
[img]http://ponibooru.413chan.net/_images/7272f0b3f17e356dab63116240cb4d2d/16019%20-%20brushie_brushie_brushie%20pinkie_pie%20royal_tongue.png[/img]
[img]http://emotes.s3.amazonaws.com/mlp/rhuh.png[/img]
[QUOTE=Dashiel;29996794]End of Chapter One. I never at any point said that Pinkie fell to her death, only that Rainbow Dash failed to catch up to her.[/QUOTE]
oh
i just stopped after the blank page
Also my hat is so tiny compared to everyone else's.
[QUOTE=acidcj;29996811]oh
i just stopped after the blank page[/QUOTE]
What blank page? :ohdear:
[QUOTE=TehBlueOne;29996810]Posting to show I'm alive post.
[img]http://ponibooru.413chan.net/_images/7272f0b3f17e356dab63116240cb4d2d/16019%20-%20brushie_brushie_brushie%20pinkie_pie%20royal_tongue.png[/img]
[img]http://emotes.s3.amazonaws.com/mlp/rhuh.png[/img][/QUOTE]
I don't brush my tounge
it's like... [img]http://emotes.s3.amazonaws.com/mlp/apanic.png[/img]
it's like a million spices hitting your tongue
[QUOTE=Bathacker;29996814]Also my hat is so tiny compared to everyone else's.[/QUOTE]
You should make it bigger so it actually sit on RBD's head.
[QUOTE=Dashiel;29996823]What blank page? :ohdear:[/QUOTE]
well, mostly blank
huh, the scrollbar looked like it was at the bottom [img]http://emotes.s3.amazonaws.com/mlp/pshrug.png[/img]
[QUOTE=acidcj;29996841]well, mostly blank
huh, the scrollbar looked like it was at the bottom [img]http://emotes.s3.amazonaws.com/mlp/pshrug.png[/img][/QUOTE]
Yeah, I normally cut the page at the end of a chapter because it looks odd starting a chapter half way down a page.
okay still classifying this as grimdark, but not as darky now
[editline]22nd May 2011[/editline]
[QUOTE=Dashiel;29996861]Yeah, I normally cut the page at the end of a chapter because it looks odd starting a chapter half way down a page.[/QUOTE]
split it into 3 docs
Well the pre-readers at ED classified it as Sad even though I classified it as Normal so v:v:v
[QUOTE=Dashiel;29996889]Well the pre-readers at ED classified it as Sad even though I classified it as Normal so v:v:v[/QUOTE]
okay sad definitely works
Sorry, you need to Log In to post a reply to this thread.