Yeah, part of the assignment was to use different weights for what sort of the key words are and I did go a bit overboard. Especially on #2.
First one seems to me like it needs less adjustments.
none of this should be happening, mostly overlapping
[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/PGqt5.png[/IMG]
[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/MzePQ.png[/IMG]
too close, watch out for ascenders/descenders becoming too close like that
[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/UklQI.png[/IMG]
(blending like that can sometimes work, but here it doesn't)
[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/NGuau.png[/IMG]
overlapping
[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/6ybNL.png[/IMG]
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[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/XVFA3.png[/IMG]
and here, where you've just set the navy text behind the red, you should really need to alter the 'shadow' type so it looks more like
[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/P29Dc.png[/IMG]
[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/P47gb.png[/IMG]
also the colours are a bit lacking, they could easily be a bit more punchy and exciting
[QUOTE=Meller Yeller;37883844]Yeah, part of the assignment was to use different weights for what sort of the key words are and I did go a bit overboard. Especially on #2.
First one seems to me like it needs less adjustments.[/QUOTE]
First one needs to be re-done altogether. It has a very boring composision and tries to do too many things at once. It's just a straightforward text on an image, but with the letters being all fucked around with. At least your second composition tries to be something.
On the first one every line or word is a different size, why is that? You need to calm down with the contrasts.
[img]https://dl.dropbox.com/u/3655193/TypographyCantActuallySpeak.png[/img]
Simply using CAPITAL and [B]BOLD[/B] for the roar and light [I]italic[/I] for the whisper can be enough if you do it well enough.
Hey guys, I will for sure be posting some of my works when I get home from work!
[thumb]http://i.imgur.com/BfiB0.png[/thumb]
I had to create something for a school project, and here it is. Advice/tips on what to do with it?
(It's from Dustforce, if you wanted to know)
This is one of the first things I ever made for an actual [i]client[/i].
[img]http://i.imgur.com/zBlqw.jpg[/img]
People really like this one. I love the retro style that's really popular within graphic design now, but it's become dreadfully overdone.
[img]http://i.imgur.com/TpIcu.png[/img]
This is an unfortunate thing I dreamt about and just...had to make.
[img]http://i.imgur.com/6VEuJ.png[/img]
If you're interested in seeing more, [url=http://imgur.com/a/RnV4T#0]I've got an album on imgur.[/url] I'd like a broader portfolio before I invest in a website to showcase it.
the last one was easily the best
What's the font you used to the HOOKAH BAR bit? it looks very neat and nice
Thought it was Century Gothic at first, but it's slightly different (wider K and pointed A).
damn, that hookah is nice
[QUOTE=Eltro102;37949303]What's the font you used to the HOOKAH BAR bit? it looks very neat and nice[/QUOTE]
[QUOTE=Smeetin;37950738]Thought it was Century Gothic at first, but it's slightly different (wider K and pointed A).[/QUOTE]
Gotham. Or not actually. Almost. Damn.
Using WhatFontIs it seems that it is [url=http://www.ffonts.net/Telegrafico.font?text=HOOKAHBAR]Telegrafico[/url]
[QUOTE=Eltro102;37949303]What's the font you used to the HOOKAH BAR bit? it looks very neat and nice[/QUOTE]
The font is called [url=http://www.dafont.com/telegrafico.font]Telegrafico.[/url]
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Oops, didn't see it was already answered. But yes, you're right!
[img]http://niggaupload.com/images/F2pUi.jpg[/img]
Me and my friend came up with a story today and I decided to do a movie/book cover for it.
the dude isn't cut out very well and doesn't fit in, I think it would work better if he was facing away and less detailed
[img]http://localhostr.com/files/qx3Y3nJ/wouldyou.png[/img]
would you trust [I]this[/I] with your hard earned digital funny-money?
if i'm honest, the only place i trust my money with is PayPal
but it's nice and modern, clean
Also, what's the best font to replace Gotham with (as it isn't a system font) in that design?
why does it need to be a system font? that's severely limiting
It doesn't, but the people who want the design don't know how to use typekit etc and want something like that design which will work on browsers as low as ie8
text seems a bit cramped and theres some uneven borders, like under the "lorem ipsum homer sit" there is plenty of space but above the "with wirepayer you can:" there's no space. I'm also not a huge fan of the mix of fonts/bold/not bold/italic/non italic. Personally I would make it more consistent.
kinda seems too simple for something as serious as having money online, I dont really know
[img]http://i48.tinypic.com/2e4hylv.png[/img]
Here's a book I'm working on and could use some feedback. The last time I did here, it was very helpful and improved my project a lot.
I'm aware the relation between the "R" and the windmill is an issue and I'm going to try and make that overlap more.
[QUOTE=Meller Yeller;38141391][img]http://i48.tinypic.com/2e4hylv.png[/img]
Here's a book I'm working on and could use some feedback. The last time I did here, it was very helpful and improved my project a lot.
I'm aware the relation between the "R" and the windmill is an issue and I'm going to try and make that overlap more.[/QUOTE]
The black spot on the 'd' in "heard" is annoying. Also, the non-capitalization of the title is also irritating.
[QUOTE=Cow Muffins;38143345]The black spot on the 'd' in "heard" is annoying. Also, the non-capitalization of the title is also irritating.[/QUOTE]
Yeah that's a hiccup with the overlay that I'll have to fix.
I'm not sold on your issue with the capitalization, however. I've tried it different ways but I think this has looked the best so far.
I
heard the
rooster
crow
would just annoy people because the word order is pretty strange and most people would think they just read it wrong
i don't think anyone would read it incorrectly, but it is a bit of an eye sore
i mean, if you're going to be experimental with your type then i'd try to push it more, or don't, and make it nice and clean. at the moment it just looks unconsidered and a bit all over the place
i think you could also work a little more into the red texture. around the trees it looks nice, you get a hint of the trees, but i'm not sure if that was intentional or not
[QUOTE=Meller Yeller;38141391][img]http://i48.tinypic.com/2e4hylv.png[/img]
Here's a book I'm working on and could use some feedback. The last time I did here, it was very helpful and improved my project a lot.
I'm aware the relation between the "R" and the windmill is an issue and I'm going to try and make that overlap more.[/QUOTE]
I just think it is nice.
[QUOTE=Autumn;38150639]i don't think anyone would read it incorrectly, but it is a bit of an eye sore
i mean, if you're going to be experimental with your type then i'd try to push it more, or don't, and make it nice and clean. at the moment it just looks unconsidered and a bit all over the place
i think you could also work a little more into the red texture. around the trees it looks nice, you get a hint of the trees, but i'm not sure if that was intentional or not[/QUOTE]
I can kind of see what you're saying, but it's not really about being experimental. This combination so far just suits my needs more than anything I've tried so far.
I feel like it makes good use of negative space without creating too much in any area. It's legible while also stacked to take a good amount of length of the cover and it's tight and flows pretty well I think.
I agree completely though that there needs to be something more with all the red part.
well i guess if you don't wanna change the title i would at least bring it in a bit more, it's bordering a bit too close to the edges at the moment, you want a nice bit of white space surrounding it
also i don't think the R should be overlapping the wind thing, and the I between the shoulder of the d and e looks a bit awkward
[editline]23rd October 2012[/editline]
same with moving the author's name up just a smidgen
[QUOTE=Autumn;38151424]well i guess if you don't wanna change the title i would at least bring it in a bit more, it's bordering a bit too close to the edges at the moment, you want a nice bit of white space surrounding it
also i don't think the R should be overlapping the wind thing, and the I between the shoulder of the d and e looks a bit awkward
[editline]23rd October 2012[/editline]
same with moving the author's name up just a smidgen[/QUOTE]
Yeah that windmill is giving me some issues. It looks odd overlapping "R" but moving it away doesn't create enough whitespace and then looks even worse. I suppose I'll figure out something though.
Title and author for sure need to be further from the edges as well, but that shouldn't be too difficult.
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