freakyme has pleased me with his explanation. at least some stuff is clear
when it's painted it should be clear that the drone has blown the fuck out of the 1st dude who has come into the room, and all that mess will be a big sloppy pink cloud. the other dude is coming in behind him but hasn't had time to react to what just happened yet
This was a fun picture. I really got to mess around with a lot of things - multiple layers, shading, highlight, fire and water, angles... I don't think I nailed it but it turned out pretty well.
[IMG]http://th03.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2013/041/5/7/future_industries_enrichment_center_by_bleu_ninja-d5uixqu.jpg[/IMG]
[sup]It's a crossover with The Legend of Korra and Portal[/sup]
Drew my friend. First piece I've done with my tablet in 3 months.
[URL=http://filesmelt.com/][IMG]http://filesmelt.com/dl/Untitled-1640.png[/IMG][/URL]
I don't draw nearly as often as I probably should. I love drawing and I really want to improve.
[B]​SO I GUESS I MADE THISSSSSSSSSSSSSSS[/B]
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[QUOTE=ChestyMcGee;39542639][t]http://filesmelt.com/dl/wip114.jpg[/t]
composition/lady-drawing feedback?[/QUOTE]
The angle she's at with that pose is more like she's crouching and looking down some sort of shaft in 3-point rather than falling. I was disappointed when I went to the other tab and it wasn't like that :v: would've been much more dynamic and interesting. With the scene the way it is skewing the viewpoint way over the right is more awkward than dynamic imo, I feel like I should be tilting my head
As for the lady, her visible leg looks broken at the shin. Also her left arm is a bit dodgy, it looks as though she's missing a shoulder. Like it goes neck, very long trapezius, very long bicep, then forearm. If you lift your arm up like that yourself you can feel the hollow made between your neck and your shoulder, where the shoulder is convex. So she needs to be more kinda scrunched upwards on that side with her shoulder. Also where her torso curves up to meet her tricep is a bit too generous - but that'll be apparent when her shoulder is bumped up higher I guess
[QUOTE=MakoSkyDub;39544969]The angle she's at with that pose is more like she's crouching and looking down some sort of shaft in 3-point rather than falling. I was disappointed when I went to the other tab and it wasn't like that :v: would've been much more dynamic and interesting. With the scene the way it is skewing the viewpoint way over the right is more awkward than dynamic imo, I feel like I should be tilting my head
As for the lady, her visible leg looks broken at the shin. Also her left arm is a bit dodgy, it looks as though she's missing a shoulder. Like it goes neck, very long trapezius, very long bicep, then forearm. If you lift your arm up like that yourself you can feel the hollow made between your neck and your shoulder, where the shoulder is convex. So she needs to be more kinda scrunched upwards on that side with her shoulder. Also where her torso curves up to meet her tricep is a bit too generous - but that'll be apparent when her shoulder is bumped up higher I guess[/QUOTE]
[QUOTE][IMG]http://filesmelt.com/dl/Untitled-1541.jpg[/IMG][/QUOTE]
Would you say it's better with a mostly aligned horizon?
no
[QUOTE=ChestyMcGee;39544202]freakyme has pleased me with his explanation. at least some stuff is clear
when it's painted it should be clear that the drone has blown the fuck out of the 1st dude who has come into the room, and all that mess will be a big sloppy pink cloud. the other dude is coming in behind him but hasn't had time to react to what just happened yet[/QUOTE]
I like that a bit. What kind of weapon is it supposedly using? Perhaps a charred and partially disintegrated pair of legs falling away from eachother and the head, shoulder, and partially attached left arm of the guy going left into the room with a distorted, fiery (or plasma filled/arcing) cloud of blood, gore, bone, and shattered wall in the mix in the middle?
back on the horse. just doodling for now.
[IMG]https://dl.dropbox.com/u/18266801/Drawings/barbarian80.jpg[/IMG]
I like that style.
[QUOTE=FreakyMe;39545088]Would you say it's better with a mostly aligned horizon?[/QUOTE]
yes
[QUOTE=DiscoInferno;39539094]Thanks a lot, very in-depth. It is going to be part of a longer, on-going story but I would like to get most of the exposition out the way. But I don't want to directly tell the reader what her personality is like. I guess the style is a bit uneven, not sure what would be the best for both my style of writing and tone of the story. My dialogue writing does need a bit of work, my own social inexperience showing though there. Also I need to disconnect from my own obtuse way of speaking, reading back on it now "an actually rather physically fit physique" does sound really stupid.
But hey, at least you didn't say it's irredeemably awful and I'm completely hopeless.[/QUOTE]
One thing to keep in mind is to read out what you wrote, and determine if it flows naturally or not. And I don't mean "read it out in your head", I mean actually say it out loud, cause you'll begin to notice if sentences begin to drag on for too long.
Also, while it's not necessary, it's sometimes good to indirectly describe characters, rather than directly point out what they look like. For example, instead of
"...she had normal blonde hair, normal blue eyes, a normal although pretty face..."
you can write something like
"...the boy could see his reflection through her large blue eyes as she continued to say to him 'asdfghjk'"
Obviously, don't write that, I just had to come up with something dumb sounding. And also, if you are going to use that technique, don't use it all the time. The reader can get really bored if every other sentence is something like "the words formed right out of her ~luscious lips~ that ~accentuated the dimples~ on her cheeks that ~glowed with the rosy tint of flowers~"
[QUOTE=aliendrone123;39542894]Is that a character from GWAR?[/QUOTE]
GWAR? Not sure what that is but it's Tetsuo, the bullet man.
[QUOTE=FreakyMe;39545185]I like that a bit. What kind of weapon is it supposedly using? Perhaps a charred and partially disintegrated pair of legs falling away from eachother and the head, shoulder, and partially attached left arm of the guy going left into the room with a distorted, fiery (or plasma filled/arcing) cloud of blood, gore, bone, and shattered wall in the mix in the middle?[/QUOTE]
something like that. the science of it isn't really described in the book this is based off but whatever kind of munition it is makes the bloke blow up. in the passage the round goes through and makes a massive hole in the wall and parts of the guy end up in the next room but i thought that was getting too silly for the painting
[t]http://th00.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/f/2013/042/d/c/welcome_by_lieutenantawesome-d5ukvfa.png[/t]
The architect who designed this liked the picturesque style, but unfortunately he liked hard liquor aswell.
[QUOTE=Yogkog;39546164]One thing to keep in mind is to read out what you wrote, and determine if it flows naturally or not. And I don't mean "read it out in your head", I mean actually say it out loud, cause you'll begin to notice if sentences begin to drag on for too long.
Also, while it's not necessary, it's sometimes good to indirectly describe characters, rather than directly point out what they look like. For example, instead of
"...she had normal blonde hair, normal blue eyes, a normal although pretty face..."
you can write something like
"...the boy could see his reflection through her large blue eyes as she continued to say to him 'asdfghjk'"
Obviously, don't write that, I just had to come up with something dumb sounding. And also, if you are going to use that technique, don't use it all the time. The reader can get really bored if every other sentence is something like "the words formed right out of her ~luscious lips~ that ~accentuated the dimples~ on her cheeks that ~glowed with the rosy tint of flowers~"[/QUOTE]
At least in this case, the boy was checking things that were normal compared to the oddness of what she was wearing (odd unless you're a cosplayer I guess).
[img]http://i.imgur.com/pFzmCWN.png[/img]
Just Senator Finkelstein's usual shenanigansens, or some very thinly veiled social commentary? You decide.
so it's about the issues of cowardice, defection and treason then
[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/zOFWR6G.jpg[/IMG]
Pastels are yummy and space is neat
At first glance I thought it was one of the robots from MST3K.
A commission for a friend. One of the characters in his D&D game.
[IMG]http://i.imgur.com/3mpfcrW.png[/IMG]
2 value studies
[img]http://i.imgur.com/ooROfXK.jpg?1[/img]
[t]http://th08.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/f/2013/042/b/2/thorin_by_primefreek-d5umq05.png[/t]
Work in progress of Thorin Oakenshield from the hobbit, kind of a mess right now but hopefully ill be able to fix it up
[QUOTE=k0dex;39554856][t]http://th08.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/f/2013/042/b/2/thorin_by_primefreek-d5umq05.png[/t]
Work in progress of Thorin Oakenshield from the hobbit, kind of a mess right now but hopefully ill be able to fix it up[/QUOTE]
I don't mean to discredit you in any way but that looks like it's been traced
[QUOTE=MeMassiveFag;39555154]I don't mean to discredit you in any way but that looks like it's been traced[/QUOTE]
not a trace, i erased a lot of the lines that I had drawn though to clean the lines up, i usually draw lines in several strokes, so i went over it again just to make it less messy
It's not only because the lines are clean, it's also a lack of values since it's really 95% line and 5% shading.
[QUOTE=Biscuit-Boy;39555258]It's not only because the lines are clean, it's also a lack of values since it's really 95% line and 5% shading.[/QUOTE]
Fair enough, however that is just the way I have started to add in detail, I drew the metal armour bits in and then i started to do some of the fur and other bits in, although i erased most of the fur cape because i didnt like how it looked.
[QUOTE=k0dex;39555199]not a trace, i erased a lot of the lines that I had drawn though to clean the lines up, i usually draw lines in several strokes, so i went over it again just to make it less messy[/QUOTE]
Same thing. You traced it from your lines and then erased them. Burn him.
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