This story makes my eyes and brain ooze out of my nostrils. - General

I Ctrl+F'd for periods and it found [b]ONE[/b].

There is no punctuation... MAH BRAINNNN

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camron how coudk u do dat :(

[QUOTE=Systematik;17143137]camron how coudk u do dat :([/QUOTE] i no camera is scuc a doosh

Read chapter 1; head exploded.

I wonder how she even made it to the 9th grade.

[QUOTE=Galenus;17143147]i no camera is scuc a doosh[/QUOTE] i wudv kiked camoramen in da speciul spt liek in da storey

i love how the perspective changes

I'm sorry but I can't read past the second paragraph.

Fuck what, as soon as I loaded the page, Firefox crashed.

I just noticed something... If you were to read this and then read a well written novel afterwards (not twilight), it would take longer to read this story. Lol. :v:

[QUOTE=cheiftiger;17141770]Chapter 4: the next morning u woke up and ur mom still wasnt home so u made breakfast when u noticed and unread message on the answering machine u played it and played it and then u stared crying answering machine: im very srry to have to be the one to tell u this miss parker but u mother cathleen parker has died in a car accident a solcial worker will be bye in two days to take u to ur dad plz be ready and again i am very srry about ur loss[/QUOTE] [b]who was phone[/b] Sorry.

wat iz gong on i cnar speel

Read it out loud it's fucking priceless.

I hope this is a troll. Nobody who can accidentally type out "you" and "two" in the middle of this dribble would actually be lazy enough to type like this, fuck. But when you think about it, any literate person would struggle so much trying to write this shit. Hats off if it is.

I'm having trouble comprehending the first chapter. :suicide: [editline]05:44PM[/editline] [QUOTE=Figgis Fiddis;17144312][b]who was phone[/b] [/QUOTE] The solcial wroker. Duh.

TL;DR version?

[QUOTE=Kendra;17146434]TL;DR version?[/QUOTE] It's better then twilight, let's put it that way.

[quote=ShitStory]after u told him this u kneed him in his spot[/quote] Hehe. :v:

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She got raped and her body was covered in her rapists cum but that didn't matter it could wait till she gets home and has sex with another guy only to be pregnant and eventually get raped AGAIN. Fucking Jailbait [editline]12:14AM[/editline] [QUOTE=Kendra;17146434]TL;DR version?[/QUOTE] Went to a party. Her boyfriend was cheating on her. Her mum died. She turned Emo. Met the man of her dreams. Ignored him, went on date with some freak. Ice skated on a pond. He raped her and came all over her body. She went and had sex with the guy of her dreams. Some really boring shit. She goes into a bathroom and gets pregnant.. somehow. Gets raped when she is 3 months pregnant. I love when she gets raped when she is pregnant it is written like it just happened. "Went to the park. Got raped. The usual". It's like now when they rape her she just enjoys it while it lasts and rates them when it's done.

I've decided to edit this story, chapter by chapter. Here is chapter one. I did my best... Chapter 1 Hi my name is Macy and this isn’t one of u normal lovey dovey storys. There is love, but its complicated. Anyways instead of talking to you about the story I might as well just tell it to you. Ok here it goes. It all started my freshman year. I was so excited to finally be in high school. I had great friends, I was the most popular girl in the freshman class, and a awesome boyfriend I loved very much. “My Macy, wait up!”, my best friend Amanda called out. “Hey Mandy what’s up? Oh my god, Macy there’s this awesome party going on tonight and u have to come Mandy. “I have a lot of homework tonight, apart from being the most popular girl in the freshman class, you also had the best grades.” “Oh come one Macy it will be fun, and you can do your homework before or after come on please, please, please?” “Ok ill go.” “Yes! See you later, I have to go get ready.” You walked to Vinces’s car and he drove you home. “You going to the party tonight babe?” “Yeah, Mandy begged me to go.” Ha-ha, that’s awesome, I’ll see you there.” Once you got to your house you kissed Vince and went inside.

[QUOTE=XxLiquidxX;17146948]I've decided to edit this story, chapter by chapter. Here is chapter one. I did my best... Chapter 1 Hi my name is Macy and this isn’t one of u normal lovey dovey storys. There is love, but its complicated. Anyways instead of talking to you about the story I might as well just tell it to you. Ok here it goes. It all started my freshman year. I was so excited to finally be in high school. I had great friends, I was the most popular girl in the freshman class, and a awesome boyfriend I loved very much. “My Macy, wait up!”, my best friend Amanda called out. “Hey Mandy what’s up? Oh my god, Macy there’s this awesome party going on tonight and u have to come Mandy. “I have a lot of homework tonight, apart from being the most popular girl in the freshman class, you also had the best grades.” “Oh come one Macy it will be fun, and you can do your homework before or after come on please, please, please?” “Ok ill go.” “Yes! See you later, I have to go get ready.” You walked to Vinces’s car and he drove you home. “You going to the party tonight babe?” “Yeah, Mandy begged me to go.” Ha-ha, that’s awesome, I’ll see you there.” Once you got to your house you kissed Vince and went inside.[/QUOTE] It still burns to see the grammatical errors.

Chapter two! Chapter 2: When you went inside, you saw your mom eating lunch. It was her lunch break. “Hey mom!” “Hi baby, how was school today?” “Great as always.” “That’s good.” “Hey mom, there’s this party tonight and I was wondering if I could go, it starts at 8.” “Sure honey, go have fun. Just make sure you get your homework done.” “Ok thanks mom.” Then you ran upstairs and started your homework. Once you were finished, it was 5, so you started to get ready to go. You took a quick shower, blow dried your hair, straightened it, put it up in a ponytail, and put a ribbon around the pony tail. Then you got dressed in your leggings and your mini skirt over it. Then you put on your pink strapless top. You painted your toe nails pink and put on your pink flip flops. Then you got in your red convertible and drove to the party. When you got there, the house was almost shaking. The music was so loud. You walked in and you looked around for Amanda, Casey, and the rest of your friends. Once you found them, you went over to talk to them. “Macy you came!” “Ii told you I was going to be here.” “Ha-ha, yea but I thought you were at least going to be late.” “Nope, have you seen Vince?” “Uh, yea I think he went to go get some punch.” So you went to go look for him, but you didn’t find him. So you asked the girl by the punch bowl. “Have you seen Vince?” “Yea I think he went into that room there.” “Thanks.” So you opened the door and you’ll never guess what you saw. [editline]07:32PM[/editline] And uhh, I've decided to stop, the third paragraph kinda crashed my brain...

If only smartness enable it quick

This brain has melted my story. I can't anything right about talk now. I always words two get mixed up. This life, I want my sucks back. :(

Also, Freshman driving? WTF? Even if she could it would need to be with a parent. Held back or breaking the law... IDK which one...

[QUOTE=cheiftiger;17141770] Chapter 3: You saw Vince and Stacy the girl you hated more than anything, having sex in the bedroom. You slammed the door shut and ran out of the house crying your eyes out. You ran right by your car and kept running until you collapsed. You just sat on the road crying until You heard Vince. You got up and started running again but he was alot faster than you because he was the quarterback for the high school football team. He grabbed you. "Macy please stop struggling" He shouts "No let me go" you plead "Macy, please, listen to me" "No! I'm never going to listen to you again. I hate you!" Which was a complete lie, you still loved him even after this but you hated what he did. "Macy please I'm sorry what you saw was a complete mistake! That girl she was my ex and she tried to get me to do stuff! I wouldn't so she held me down. I'm sorry" he Explained "I don't believe you! That girl was tiny, you could easily get her off". After you told him this you kneed him in his spot and he fell over and you started running towards the party, this time you ran to your car and drove home. Your mom wasn't home yet, which was really weird, but you didnt think much of it so you just ran up to your room and cried your eyes out and eventually fell asleep [/QUOTE] Fixed it up a bit

Here is a sum of all the chapters in one word: 1. Life 2. Party 3. Jealousy 4. Sadness 5. Dream 6 - 15. INTERNAL ERROR. LocalPlayer():Brain() = OVER 9000!!! degrees Celcius. Ending summarization for immediate cooling.