Creative Work That Doesn't Deserve A Thread - Detlef's Detlef edition - General

[QUOTE=mr apple;29965008]Uh I accidently joined the project, I can't find the download button. Do you think it's safe to post it openly so anyone can edit it?[/QUOTE] I have now made it a private project, so no one can edit it I think you can dowload it here: [url]http://www.plotbot.com/screenplays/intruders_from_space/download[/url] (I now the dialogue is goofy, but it's supposed to be)

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[QUOTE=mr apple;29965728]You don't have permission to view this page. If you think you should have permission to view this page, refreshing the page will fix the problem.[/QUOTE] Whatever, I'll just post screenshots of them (saved page 1 and 2 as JPG by an accident) Page 1: [url]http://i51.tinypic.com/eqtcw7.jpg[/url] Page 2: [url]http://i51.tinypic.com/osh2xi.jpg[/url] Page 3: [url]http://i55.tinypic.com/24pxids.png[/url] Page 4: [url]http://i51.tinypic.com/2eq3vkj.png[/url] Page 5: (not done yet) [url]http://i51.tinypic.com/20726pt.png[/url] God dammit, that dialogue is shit

[QUOTE=Lufttygger306;29966061]Whatever, I'll just post screenshots of them (saved page 1 and 2 as JPG by an accident) God dammit, that dialogue is shit[/QUOTE] [img]http://i.cubeupload.com/iBfryx.png[/img]

[QUOTE=wewt!;29969048][img]http://i.cubeupload.com/iBfryx.png[/img][/QUOTE] [quote](I now the dialogue is goofy, but it's supposed to be)[/quote] The way this "movie" will parody 50's sci-fi movies will be by showing terrible special effects, totally goofy dialogue making the dialogue from Plan 9 from Outer Space seem completely poetic in comparison, shitty acting making the acting from The Room look like royal Shakespearean acting. Here's what a actually planned the special effects to be like: The giant walking robots in the city are cheap cardboard-cutouts and are also made of cardboard. The evil aliens' and the good scientists' lab equipment are made of white-painted junk from a landfill site When the robots shoot people, it is a cardboard-cutout of their face on an exploding balloon filled with red paint The buildings in New York City are clearly made of cheap cardboard with black windows painted on The "aliens" are regular human beings with laughable suits on The scenes with the military consists of old stock footage put on a background Sometimes, the camera crew is visible, just for an extra twist When an explosion occur on a robot, a piece of firework can clearly be seen on it The aliens' ray guns are Super Soakers "firing" civil laser beams

Just don't overdo it, or you really will end up succeeding in making a terrible movie

[QUOTE=wewt!;29969351]Just don't overdo it, or you really will end up succeeding in making a terrible movie[/QUOTE] Some of the bad effects could be cut like the stock footage of military. Now that i think about, not even the cheapest movies from the 50's did that But i still like the idea of the overacting/bad acting and goofy dialogue

Guess what I've been watching [img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/22377503/Pacific3.jpg[/img] I tried going for that Japanese ink art type deal. Like really fat ink on a thin piece of paper that leaks all over the place. I dunno. I still have to add the credits at the bottom and maybe a border but I'm not sure about that yet.

[QUOTE=strider;29970991]Guess what I've been watching [img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/22377503/Pacific3.jpg[/img] I tried going for that Japanese ink art type deal. Like really fat ink on a thin piece of paper that leaks all over the place. I dunno. I still have to add the credits at the bottom and maybe a border but I'm not sure about that yet.[/QUOTE] I love that "Ink splot" look you were trying to go for, its nice.

[quote]1976. Brooklyn. Life was feeling pretty grim. I’d just come out of a relationship that had imploded and I was angry with everything and everyone. To say I was disillusioned is an understatement. You might say I was self-destructive. I’d lost everything and was as utterly, entirely alone as any poor schmuck could be. I felt attracted to the dark and the cold. I wanted to wallow in my self-loathing and self-pity. So I started going for walks; late-night walks through the filthy city streets, past black stinking alleys, past gutters where the debris in life vomited their cheap liquor and begged for money to buy more. I just dug my hands deeper into my pockets and pulled my hood further over my hunched shoulders. No-one could see the scowl that had found a permanent home on my face. I guess I got a little too caught up in my own head and became too confident of my own invincibility because one night, at the corner of E 31st street and Clarendon Rd, I got mugged. Some hoods lurking in some lonely alley jumped me and dragged me back into the darkness. They beat the crap out of me and the next thing I remember is lying on some trolley as it rushed along a brightly lit hospital corridor. Some time later I regained consciousness. There was no part of me that didn’t hurt, and very little that wasn’t bandaged. Some lady in pale blue was standing to the side noting down something she could see on the many dials and tubes that linked me to life. I remember a ER tech coming in later and asking for my religious beliefs, I refused to answer. I had made my own peace with the universe, content with whatever was going to happen, live or die. But then the longer I lay there the angrier I started to become. I don’t really know why. Maybe I got angry because I still had stories to tell. I lay on that bed for two months while I recovered, while my body slowly put itself back together. That’s a lot of time to be with yourself and a lot of time to think. However, two things became clear. First, I now had no fear of death. None whatsoever. Second, as soon as I could, I was gonna start walking again. And that’s what I did. I eventually realised that I was looking for something, but I didn’t know what. I didn’t know the answer because I didn’t know the question. So I kept walking. Through the night and past the sad hookers with their mean looking pimps; past addicts, thugs, and drunks. Past the squalor, the screaming, the abuse, crying, vomiting and random violence. Past the cruising cars with their well-dressed, middle-class business men looking for something dirty and exciting. I walked through the day, in sunshine and in rain, in sleet and in snow. Past businessmen in neat grey suits pushing their way into offices, staring blindly ahead; past the women in high heels running late to work; past the homeless lying in doorways invisible to the teeming crowds; past the strutting designers in their stylish tight jeans; past the vendors with their hot dogs and bagels. And then I began to see it. The dichotomy. The light and the dark. The blind and the seeing. Two different nations, sharing nothing but longitude and latitude. A nation of night and a nation of day, occupying the same space like an alternative universe. I saw a country bifurcated by more than just the presence and absence of light, but by the lives that are cast aside, lost and uncared for. Those who are disposable, thrown-away, tossed on one side, and on the other, those who do not to see. Then from a distance I saw myself, someone compelled to walk both sides of the metaphor. That’s when I realised that the greatest cruelty there is, is our casual blindness to, and our wilful ignorance of, the despair of others. Finally, I knew I had found what I was looking for, the answer without the question. I had found the story that would make my own life make sense again. This story. I still take my long walks but now I stop to talk to people; the people who stand at the corner and wait, who wait for money to fall into their hat or cup, who wait for the next hit, who wait for an opportunity, who wait for somebody to recognize their pain, who wait for a chance to live. The line between the midnight nation and the place where I sit right now, writing these words, is thin and ephemeral and can be crossed in an instant. It doesn’t cost much and won’t take up too much of your precious time. The road brings both nations together, that joins both nations is called Compassion.[/quote] Hows it looking?

trying out my tablet [img]http://i.imgur.com/ulugq.jpg[/img] i'm shit and i can't do the feet, more fucking about with colours than anything

[QUOTE=RELAXiN;29973030]Hows it looking?[/QUOTE] Some iffy phrases and repetition (use of vomit doesnt fit, some descriptions are a little weak) but I like it. I don't know if anyone's written on the idea before, but it was really pretty neat as a story. I'm going to assume if you continue it, that 'revelation' is going to go somewhere. As of now you're just making the point, but the character's acting out of the lesson he learned is lacking, him just talking to people seems to underplay the depth and breadth of the story, I feel it should be more...important. Still, that's up to you and it's good so far.

[IMG]http://imageshack.us/m/823/1893/reddeadp.png[/IMG] Made this design, I've been playing way too much Red Dead Redemption.

i think it would look better if the text followed the perspective of the muzzle-flash and i don't like the outer glow or how jaggy it is or how there's so much empty space above him

[img]http://fc09.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2011/141/2/6/262e355794af10868145a5c7565cec4e-d3gwaga.png[/img] Sorry for such a small shitty image, but yeah, This is a hand I made yesterday, first time modelling a hand, and pretty much my first time doing anything really serious with clay.

[QUOTE=strider;29970991]Guess what I've been watching [img]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/22377503/Pacific3.jpg[/img] I tried going for that Japanese ink art type deal. Like really fat ink on a thin piece of paper that leaks all over the place. I dunno. I still have to add the credits at the bottom and maybe a border but I'm not sure about that yet.[/QUOTE] i like that it's the japanese flag the most

[QUOTE=Rusty100;29979421]i like that it's the japanese flag the most[/QUOTE] ooh I didn't see that, that is cool

[QUOTE=Jallen;29942852]Are there any good resources for beginning to draw stuff? Mainly interested in people and creatures, but I could really do with general resources too.[/QUOTE] [url]http://www.pixelovely.com/tools/index.html[/url]

[QUOTE=Goodthief;29979814]ooh I didn't see that, that is cool[/QUOTE] that's the whole point... how do u miss that

haha yeah that's kinda hard to miss actually maybe it's too ~deep~ i think i'm going to redo the palm trees, they look like an 8 year old drew them (i drew them)

yes the more i stare at it the worse they look ALSO I feel like the grunge is just a little overdone. i like to keep mine more subtle but i can see you were going for a much more distressed feel almost like ink was splashed onto the page, but i still say there's just a tad too much. also that grass is gonna look terrible up close, u can tell its all the same brush and not hugh enough res

maybe you should make a real one with real ink. that would be so cool.

Yup, I've got to redo the palm trees and the ground. And you're right about the grunge, it looked good when I just finished it but it looks like crap now. It's hard to recreate that ink effect but for it to look like that there has to be variation in thickness and opacity nearly everywhere. Hence the grunge all over the place. I'll post when I've updated it.

[QUOTE=strider;29984822]Yup, I've got to redo the palm trees and the ground. And you're right about the grunge, it looked good when I just finished it but it looks like crap now. It's hard to recreate that ink effect but for it to look like that there has to be variation in thickness and opacity nearly everywhere. Hence the grunge all over the place. I'll post when I've updated it.[/QUOTE] u should look for more ink like brushes [editline]22nd May 2011[/editline] but i think its a good idea and has good composition another thing is to keep that main soldier consistent with the look, in that one he is too undamaged whereas everything around him was grunged to all fuck

Just ordered a wacom tablet. Can't wait for it to arrive. [url]http://www.amazon.co.uk/gp/product/B002Q4U4AE/ref=s9_simh_gw_p147_d1_i1?pf_rd_m=A3P5ROKL5A1OLE&pf_rd_s=center-2&pf_rd_r=0FEQJFKZ602KA3WGJ2Q7&pf_rd_t=101&pf_rd_p=467128533&pf_rd_i=468294[/url]

[QUOTE=Jallen;29985190]Just ordered a wacom tablet. Can't wait for it to arrive. [url]http://www.amazon.co.uk/gp/product/B002Q4U4AE/ref=s9_simh_gw_p147_d1_i1?pf_rd_m=A3P5ROKL5A1OLE&pf_rd_s=center-2&pf_rd_r=0FEQJFKZ602KA3WGJ2Q7&pf_rd_t=101&pf_rd_p=467128533&pf_rd_i=468294[/url][/QUOTE] That's a good choice for a first tablet. Don't throw away non digital mediums though.

[url]http://i.imgur.com/2dCgn.jpg[/url] Did another one of my abstract tribal drawings.

[QUOTE=Dubious George;29985303][url]http://i.imgur.com/2dCgn.jpg[/url] Did another one of my abstract tribal drawings.[/QUOTE] that doesn't look like abstract to me, it's just a pattern

[QUOTE=Rusty100;29985517]that doesn't look like abstract to me, it's just a pattern[/QUOTE] Abstract, pattern, you know what I mean.

[QUOTE=Dubious George;29985549]Abstract, pattern, you know what I mean.[/QUOTE] There actually isn't anything like abstract patterns.