[QUOTE=Hakita;37311509]Yeah, you're a bit late on that.
A bit late meaning very, very late.[/QUOTE]
The OP asked for it.
New SCP from yours truly.
SCP-1046, A House Without a Bedroom.
[url]http://www.scp-wiki.net/scp-1046[/url]
Trying to do a squick article. Let me know what y'all think.
[url]http://www.moddb.com/games/six-eight-two[/url]
You guys hear about the other scp game in the making about 682?
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Xd6DapdnoEs&list=PLEFE68F868C8AE275&index=4&feature=plpp_video[/media]
I like the atmosphere but i don't know about how the guns and stuff will affect it
[QUOTE=Ghhostface;37364707]New SCP from yours truly.
SCP-1046, A House Without a Bedroom.
[url]http://www.scp-wiki.net/scp-1046[/url]
Trying to do a squick article. Let me know what y'all think.[/QUOTE]
Interesting, but it seemed kind of... plain, I guess? As we know, much of the horror aspect of the Foundation's articles is derived from not knowing, Additionally, this part:
[quote]SCP-1046 was discovered on 9/18/1994, after Foundation assets in the Davie Sheriff's Department followed up on reports of a "house with people parts".[/quote]
seems kind of weak. "A house with people parts"? I mean, sure, it makes sense in the context of a police report, but it's exactly what it says on the tin and that kind of makes it feel bland. Additionally, the date is uncensored; I know that's mostly irrelevant but nearly every SCP I've ever read has obfuscated all or part of any date given.
The addendum also doesn't add much, you just kind of throw in this reference to the "Malva Real Estate Company" without any prior reference in the article (unless this is something referenced by other SCPs and I'm unaware of it) and no light is shed onto how the events progressed; it starts out with two indignant letters and ends with a note from the person presumably incorporated into the house, and there's not really a good transition or explanation for them. I know lots of SCPs don't come with explanations, but this is just... like, what, he falls apart and his parts get sucked in? (How does he even write the note if his body parts are incorporated into the house?)
Time for random SCP's again, [B][I]HEREWEGO[/I][/B].
Random Phrase generator Gave me "Sympathetic Tracking"
[quote]
[B]Item #:[/B] SCP-XXX
[B]Object Class:[/B] Safe
[B]Special Containment Procedures:[/B] SCP-XXX is to be contained in a soundproof room measuring 3 meters cubed, all personnel handling SCP-XXX must wear soundproof earmuffs to prevent exposure.
[B]Description:[/B] SCP-XXX was discovered in ██████ when a man was seen driving off of a pier in a vehicle. Three Foundation agents were on leave when they witnessed this event. They dove into the water in an attempt to rescue the individual. After 15 minutes of resuscitation, the man expired and SCP-XXX floated to the surface and started to proclaim distress and asked the agents to remove it from the water.
SCP-XXX is a GPS unit, appearing to be produced by ██████. There is no serial or product number on the product itself, all attempts to identify where or when it was made have been inconclusive. All attempts to dismantle or otherwise destroy it have resulted in failures. SCP-XXX does not appear to have any power source, nor does it require any such thing.
SCP-XXX apparently has an extremely complex AI in its programming, even though it does not appear to have the hardware to accommodate such programming.
SCP-XXX has two modes of operation that we have discovered so far, the first mode is when it is used in the fashion that you would traditionally use a normal GPS system. When stationed in a vehicle, SCP-XXX will automatically turn on and remain on until removed from the vehicle. Once SCP-XXX has turned, it will provide standard road maps for the surrounding area, the AI contained in the SCP will then begin to comment on the route the driver and passengers of the vehicle are taking with insults disguised as sympathetic remarks. See Addendum for log.
The second mode of operation is when SCP-XXX is turned on and otherwise not in any kind of vehicle, and a person approaches the SCP. Once a person is within 1 meter of SCP-XXX, it will begin to comment on the recent locations of said person, or friends/family of the subject with information that would result in sadness in the subject. See Addendum for Log
[B]
Addendum:[/B]
Test #: 1
Mode of Operation: 1
Subject: D-1012, Male
Details: SCP-XXX is affixed to the dashboard of a ██████ ██████ affixed with a remote termination device, to prevent subject from escaping. Subject itself was affixed with a lethal injection system to provide termination, if need be. Subject proceeded to get into the car and proceed to drive around the city of ██████ located near Site-█. The first location the subject proceeded to make a stop at was a local McDonalds, once the car had come to a rest in the Drive-Thru, SCP-XXX proceeded to make the remark of "I feel so sorry for all the weight you're going to put on.", the subject then decided not to order any food and to proceed driving. The subject was then ordered to stop at the office of a local Plastic Surgeon, once the car had come to a full stop, SCP-XXX made the remark of "It's okay, I won't judge you for your tiny [REDACTED].", the subject then proceeded to burst into tears and was then subsequently terminated after he had attempted to commit suicide by running into a nearby gas station.
[U][I]Ongoing research seems to indicate that this SCP does not have any psychological effects on its "victims", it just manages to choose particularly biting remarks.[/I][/U]
Test #: 2
Mode of Operation: 2
Subject: Dr.████, Male
Details: SCP-XXX was places on a table, with Dr.████ sitting in a chair next to it. SCP-XXX then turned on automatically, and was silent for approximately █ minutes before coming out with the remark "I'm really sorry about your wife, doc." where Dr.████ responds with "What about my wife?" and SCP-XXX responds with "You know, if I had a wife, I'd make sure she didn't go cavorting around with [REDACTED].", the name of the individual was confirmed as a friend of Dr.████ and his wife. Dr.████ was then seen leaving the room in tears. He filed for divorce a week later.
[/quote]
I could've done better, not bad for 15 minutes though.
well i was gonna go to sleep, but i think i have a lot of reading to do instead :v:
[QUOTE=Someone4956;37368309]Time for random SCP's again, [B][I]HEREWEGO[/I][/B].[/QUOTE]
Please, no.
[QUOTE=DesolateGrun;37365341][url]http://www.moddb.com/games/six-eight-two[/url]
You guys hear about the other scp game in the making about 682?
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Xd6DapdnoEs&list=PLEFE68F868C8AE275&index=4&feature=plpp_video[/media]
I like the atmosphere but i don't know about how the guns and stuff will affect it[/QUOTE]
apparently you'll only ever use your gun to kneecap him and buy time to run away, it's incredibly unlikely that it'll even be possible to kill him without using exploits. you'll basically be constantly dying if you try and use your gun for anything other than momentarily slowing him down.
[QUOTE=Cone;37370172]apparently you'll only ever use your gun to kneecap him and buy time to run away, it's incredibly unlikely that it'll even be possible to kill him without using exploits. you'll basically be constantly dying if you try and use your gun for anything other than momentarily slowing him down.[/QUOTE]
[I]After several shots to it's knees, 682 developed adamantine plating over them, rendering it unable to be kneecapped by conventional ballistic rounds.[/I]
[QUOTE=Aperture fan;37372781][I]After several shots to it's knees, 682 developed adamantine plating over them, rendering it unable to be kneecapped by conventional ballistic rounds.[/I][/QUOTE]
and that's why we have giant hydraulic doors
[editline]23rd August[/editline]
plus unless 682's resistant to [I]kinetic energy[/I] then he's going to be pushed back at least a little bit with each shot
[QUOTE=Aperture fan;37372781][I]After several shots to its knees, 682 developed adamantine plating over them, rendering it unable to be kneecapped by conventional ballistic rounds.[/I][/QUOTE]
Yo what if the gun harnesses the adaptive power of 682? Like it can then quickly and severely warp adamantium plating in such a manner that it causes severe injury, and have bullets that are drawn to the lizard's knees.
[QUOTE=mix999;37244898]Next video out, what do you think?
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RGh_a2RasQc[/media][/QUOTE]
We're gonna need a full version of that song.
Everyone here should watch the "Cabin in the Woods" movie, can't tell anything about it because its that sort of move that you can't say anything about without spoilering the plot.
Seriously it's the closest "SCP - The movie" there is
[QUOTE=Krinkels;37372939]Yo what if the gun harnesses the adaptive power of 682? Like it can then quickly and severely warp adamantium plating in such a manner that it causes severe injury, and have bullets that are drawn to the lizard's knees.[/QUOTE]
Why isn't there a SCP that's a gun that can only shoot knees
[QUOTE=esalaka;37373777]Why isn't there a SCP that's a gun that can only shoot knees[/QUOTE]
Because it would result in horrible, overused Skyrim jokes.
[QUOTE=smeismastger;37373898]Because it would result in horrible, overused Skyrim jokes.[/QUOTE]
Oh, damn, didn't realise
[QUOTE=smeismastger;37373346]Everyone here should watch the "Cabin in the Woods" movie, can't tell anything about it because its that sort of move that you can't say anything about without spoilering the plot.
Seriously it's the closest "SCP - The movie" there is[/QUOTE]
What's it about?
Protip: Spoiler tags are allowed.
[QUOTE=Da_Maniac_;37374411]What's it about?
Protip: Spoiler tags are allowed.[/QUOTE]
[sp]The cabin is actually a somesort of containment site which requires SCP-style of annual procedures in order to contain something[/sp]
[editline]23rd August 2012[/editline]
Seriously, watch it. Because there's two guys in the movie that would have been the original inspiration for Dr. Clef and Bright had this movie appeared earlier.
[QUOTE=smeismastger;37374465][sp]The cabin is actually a somesort of containment site which requires SCP-style of annual procedures in order to contain something[/sp]
[editline]23rd August 2012[/editline]
Seriously, watch it. Because there's two guys in the movie that would have been the original inspiration for Dr. Clef and Bright had this movie appeared earlier.[/QUOTE]
Don't we actually have an SCP similar to that?
[QUOTE=esalaka;37373777]Why isn't there a SCP that's a gun that can only shoot knees[/QUOTE]
There is a gun that shoots teeth but it only has 60 shots and takes 3-5 days to recharge.
[QUOTE=kiloy;37376194]There is a gun that shoots teeth but it only has 60 shots and takes 3-5 days to recharge.[/QUOTE]
That isn't what I asked
[QUOTE=smeismastger;37373346]Everyone here should watch the "Cabin in the Woods" movie, can't tell anything about it because its that sort of move that you can't say anything about without spoilering the plot.
Seriously it's the closest "SCP - The movie" there is[/QUOTE]
Yeah, I saw it when it first came out and I was really thinking it was some form of foundation movie.
I'm posting an SCP I'm working on. I was already pretty tired when I was writing this and I am really tired now. Also, I didn't even reread it. I'll fix grammar tomorrow.
Despite that, tell me what you think.
SCP-XXXX: The Unwelcome
[QUOTE]
> FROM: ████ █████████, Secretary of Internal Affairs, Sector Command-05
> TO: ███████ ███████, Head of Sector-12
>
> Dear Mr. ███████,
>
> It has come to our attention that your facility, Sector-12, is involved in the unauthorized containment of one “Mr. ████████”. As mentioned in the Foundation code (partum ‘CONTAINMENT’, chapter 2, article 7b) the Foundation can only hold a human being captive if that person is either classified as an SCP object, [DATA EXPUNGED] or awaiting preemptive termination. Please take care of this matter before the end of the month. Failing to address this issue will result in sanctions towards you and your board of executives.
>
> ,████ █████████
//I can’t believe we actually give in to this attention whore – Dr. Aki//
**Item #:** SCP-XXXX
**Object Class:** Safe
**Special Containment Procedures:**
As of August ██th, 2012, all current officials strongly discourage the containment of Mr.████ ████████. Any member of the Foundation who willingly takes part in the subject’s containment, faces certain punishment, ranging from wage cuts to being reassigned for participation in Procedure-54α. The door to the subjects Containment Room has to remain open at all times. When spotted within the latitudes of the facility, avoid contact and walk away. Then, call in a “Level π Containment Breach” (See Appendix 1)
To prevent that these measures are forgotten, all personnel of its currently residing facility has to be continuously made aware of their existence in every staff meeting.
**Description:**
SCP-XXXX is a Caucasian male(50y). Subject is balding, and has an unkempt appearance and foul odor. It is always seen wearing self-made t-shirts on which the word “SCP-XXXX” is written, which it owns in various color combinations. Masks are also part of his garb, yet only on weekends and holidays (on which the mask will be themed after that day).
SCP-XXXX is quite harmless. When encountering staff members, SCP-XXXX will sneak up on them in an attempt to give him/her a scare. It usually follows up these actions with small talk. It refers to every member as the Foundation as “Dr. Bright”. //To clarify: SCP-XXXX has never met Dr. Bright, nor is he connected to any other member of the Foundation. It is likely he picked up the name while wandering through the facility. It does not serve as a “Brightector”.//
**Addendum:**
Incident XXXX-1:
08/██/20██, 3.32 p.m., SCP-XXXX was spotted inside Sector-12, Containment Cell 84, destined for the containment of SCP-████. Initially, it was believed an error occurred and CC-84 was already occupied. It was however revealed the subject was not a classified item (as of then). Guard units were dispatched and subject was apprehended.
Security footage were revisited in order to discover how the man got in there in the first place. It was revealed the man has been walking in and out CC-84 for at least 4 months without ever being addressed. The man also had been eating breakfast, lunch and dinner in the Facility Cafeteria. On several occasions, he even sat down and interacted with Facility Personnel.
It was revealed in the next staff meeting that any member of Sector-12 was aware of the fact that “SCP-XXXX” was not actually an SCP.
Incident XXXX-2:
It was revealed that, somewhere between CC-84 and Termination Room-4, “SCP-XXXX” was able to escape from its escorts as it appeared again in another free Containment Cell. Dr. ██████, who spotted him, unfortunately forgot which Cell it was in.
A new investigation was conducted using old security footage, revealed “SCP-XXXX” escaping termination by walking away from the guards, despite being in their direct line of vision. When questioned about it, the guards plead not being able to remember what happened during the subjects escort. This time again, the subject ate lunch at the Facility Cafeteria. Personnel seems to have forgotten the fact the subject wasn’t supposed to be there and were reminded the next staff meeting. Anomalous properties of the subject were dismissed for lack of evidence thereof.
Incident XXXX-3 to XXXX-9:
During which “SCP-XXXX” continued to live inside the facility, talk to personnel and escape termination by being either nowhere to be found or just walking away from the guards. This time however, more members of the facility were aware of him and reported him to security. Sector-12 executives expressed no intentions to classify it as an SCP.
In an interview with Dr. ██████ ([DATA EXPUNGED]), the subject expressed interest in contributing to the Foundation by donating himself as a classified object. When asked how he knew about the foundation, he remained silent. He did however provide the doctor with several powers he claimed to have, like the power of flight, necromancy and not blinking for an hour straight. Evidence for having any of these powers was never provided by it. When asked about its ability to not be noticed, he displayed confusion.
In response to a letter from Sector Command-05 (see above), SCP-XXXX was acknowledged as a SCP.
Incident XXXX-10:
No more than two days later, a Special Termination request was made by Sector-12 executives. Agent █████ was sent to carry out this task. SCP-XXXX escaped termination. In response, Agent ███████ was sent to help out Agent █████. SCP-XXXX escaped termination. Agent █████ and Agent ███████ were relieved from this task and Agents ███ and ████ were dispatched to terminate SCP-XXXX. Subject escaped termination. Agents ███ offered subject peanuts. Subject gladly accepted. Agent ████ offered subject poisoned peanuts, Subject declined. Agent ████ force-fed subject poisoned peanuts. Subject escaped termination. Cleaning team was dispatched. For full report see Termination Logs XXXX-█ to XXXX-██.
During these events, SCP-XXXX manages to cause a containment breach of several other entities. Sector-12 was destroyed in the progress. All surviving objects were transferred to the neighboring Sector-11.
Incident XXXX-11:
12/██/20██, 2.15 p.m.
SCP-XXXX was spotted at Sector-11, claiming he was not given a new Containment Cell, upon which staff discovered the above rapport. SCP-XXXX was given the broom closet to reside in. Sector-11 executives decided to inform the staff on a weekly basis about SCP-XXXX’s existence with the hope that one day, it will leave on its own.
**Appendix 1:**
A Level π Containment Breach is an experimental procedure to dispose of SCP-XXXX. When spotting SCP-XXXX, pretend it is a treat and try to run towards one of the termination rooms. If it, by any chance, follows you in an attempt to scare you, proceed to point towards the doors of the termination chamber. Then claim a really dangerous SCP like him must not escape at any costs. Open the door and mildly attempt to prevent letting him enter the room, but ultimately let him through. Then close the doors, go to the control panel and put the flamethrowers inside the room on their highest stands. Good luck, Foundation personnel.
[/QUOTE]
Is a post this big even legal?
edit:
Here is the picture I will be using for this one:
[URL]http://de.acidcow.com/pics/20110425/frightening_real_12.jpg[/URL]
That's why I included him wearing masks in the description.
Seems interesting. Pretty good.
Make sure the whole thing is written in third person, so get rid of imperative verbs and the word "you".
In the first appendix, agents are advised (change this to third person) to pretend it is a treat.
Eliminate the "good luck," this is a paramilitaroscientific report.
The whole last appendix, in fact, is very clever, though I'd advise that flamethrowers are changed to 'termination apparatus' for the sake of ambiguity.
In incident xxxx-1, the last sentence does not make any sense. Change "no" to "any".
Instead of (50y), just use fifty year-old.
In the procedure, change the sentence to say that the staff are to be made aware of the subject's existence at staff meetings.
Don't capitalize things like facility cafeteria and cell.
Always capitlalize Foundation.
The mask thing is kind of weird and irrelevant, unless it's a setup for some awesome Mardi Gras joke.
In the second paragraph of the third to ninth incident, the subject is said to have given the doctor powers. I think you might have meant to say the subject informed the doctor of their existence.
Try to avoid using the phrase "it was revealed" so much.
I'd recommend changing 54alpha with something more in sync with the current standard for naming procedures, like Procedure 154-Baxter or something.
The word "SCP" is preceded by "an" instead of "a".
That actually sounds pretty interesting, it's one of those things that are ordinary but not really, and have really odd containment procedures. Reminds me of 055 (I think that's the number, anyway), the thing that we only know isn't a circle, and the other SCP whose number I forget (might have been a -J) that was just a balding guy with a tub of fried chicken that personnel were directed to constantly mock.
the old man has the scariest fucking picture
[QUOTE=kiloy;37376194]There is a gun that shoots teeth but it only has 60 shots and takes 3-5 days to recharge.[/QUOTE]
wait, did you think that he was saying that he wanted an SCP of a gun that [I]literally shot knees at people[/I]?
that's fucking brilliant.
[QUOTE=Megadick;37382323]the old man has the scariest fucking picture[/QUOTE]
I'm sorry, but the "living art" definitely takes that fucking cake, god damn.
[QUOTE=DohEntertainmen;37384245]I'm sorry, but the "living art" definitely takes that fucking cake, god damn.[/QUOTE]
If anything, that cake belongs to 087.
[img]http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v57/Zaeyde/2.png[/img]
[i]3spooky5me
-Dr. Doctor[/i]
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