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[Skeeter]

[QUOTE=Kaimaera;46643009]I really like the rhythms in the drums; The harmonies are also quite nice. I really like the way the instruments sound. I feel like you've got a really good base on it right now, and could add in some more sounds or leave it as is. It's very neat and well paced.
[media]http://soundcloud.com/kaimaera/orbital-demo[/media][/QUOTE]

Thanks man :) What sort of sounds do you think would work well?

I'm really digging the groove on this track, it has a very unique feel to it that makes me bob my head along!'
Especially the intro, it really sets the feel so well! Only thing I could think of maybe changing the lead melody with how distorted it is, it feels a bit out of place right now; a more mellow sound to it could probably be really cool :)

I think production-wise you could have the track kick back into the main part once again at the 3minute mark, the chill section feels like another buildup for a 'heavy' section with everything going all-out, I would add another main melody section at 3minute mark, have it roll on for another minute, then the slow section that you have right now at the 3minute mark, and let it build up for another heavy main section that slowly fades out.

[Caboose866]

Please clarify skeeter, I can't seem to get it to work.

[Hakita]

[QUOTE=Caboose866;46643942]Please clarify skeeter, I can't seem to get it to work.[/QUOTE]
you could just quote someone who has done media tags and see how it's done
just remember to remove the 's' from 'https', that breaks media tags for some reason

[Eyefunk]

[QUOTE=Hakita;46637033]not really feeling it, it lacks the intensity that makes harsh noise and PV what they are
there's some elements that definitely work, but as a whole it falls flat
the intro is good, very merzbow-esque, but the drumming section afterwards is very lacking, it's not harsh, abrasive or huge enough, so it's just a kind of drumming section that repeats for a bit
the way you introduce the melody is a bit weird
i think it'd work better if it emerged from a fade-out of noise, like a huge blast would happen first and as it would slowly fade out you would be able to make out the melody and then the noises you currently have on top of that melody part would start going off
as an example of what i mean, [url=http://youtu.be/kofmDnZfxMw?t=7m50s]here's the transition between part 1 and part 2 of World's End Girlfriend's Bohemian Purgatory[/url]
the reprise of the drumming section has the same problem as the first section, it really lacks impact
i can definitely see what you're going for with all of this stuff, but it really lacks the chaos and abrasive intensity that is associated with harsh noise and PV

talking about the soundcloud version, ofc[/QUOTE]

Thanks for the criticism. This is my first time doing anything related to noise, or anything harsh for that matter, so the pointers really help. I was trying to add some intensity by dropping out the instruments right before each bass drum hit during the industrial part (after the melody), but now that I'm listening to it again, it does sound a bit weak. Also, one more thing. The soundcloud version is a bit outdated. I think I fixed some mixing issues on the newer one, but I don't think that'll fix what you're talking about.

I know you're a bit of a veteran when it comes to abrasive music, so I'll take your word for it. Thanks again!

[Hakita]

[QUOTE=Eyefunk;46645929]I know you're a bit of a veteran when it comes to abrasive music, so I'll take your word for it. Thanks again![/QUOTE]
not really a veteran, i do occasionally listen to noise and powerviolence and i enjoy very rough, raw and abrasive music, but i wouldn't go as far as to say i'm a veteran

[dedo678]

[QUOTE=Kaimaera;46643009]
I really like the melodies in the intro, when the arps came in I couldn't not love them. I'd try to vary the drums some throughout, since their so simple it'd be nice if they didn't hit the same way every time. Overall the whole thing has great composition, it keeps the song interesting throughout.[/QUOTE]

Thank you for the feedback. I do feel like drum patterns are one of the things I need to work on the most.

[QUOTE=Skeeter;46635772]I'm digging the mellow and chilled-out feel of this track, I really dig the kick especially! Kicks with reverb are one of my favourite things :)
Very well-produced and mixed, and the addition of piano? Genius! I think you could kick it back into the quiet, slow part after the piano is introduced, then slowly build it up again for that sweet ending.
[/QUOTE]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[QUOTE=Hobo4President;46635203]
Working on some dnb

[media]http://soundcloud.com/hobo4president/wiplellellele[/media][/QUOTE]

I love dnb and you seem to have a good thing going there. How do you plan on mixing up the notes in the melodies? Also I feel like you could really benefit from some vocals, possibly female ones.

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Here's a track I pumped out today. Looking for some feedback.

[media]http://soundcloud.com/dedo678/iron-of-heaven[/media]

I was staring at this picture as I made it to see if imagery could inspire me more.

[img_thumb]http://i.imgur.com/4iunWGS.jpg[/img_thumb]

[Kaimaera]

I made this a short time ago, but I added the weird build up and slow bring back in sections and couldn't rectify conflicting ideas. I just left it, until I deemed it worthy enough to put online and get ideas and critiques. :dance:

Nexus 130

[media]http://soundcloud.com/kaimaera/nexus-130[/media]

[killerteacup]

[QUOTE=Kaimaera;46650700]I made this a short time ago, but I added the weird build up and slow bring back in sections and couldn't rectify conflicting ideas. I just left it, until I deemed it worthy enough to put online and get ideas and critiques. :dance:

Nexus 130

[media]http://soundcloud.com/kaimaera/nexus-130[/media][/QUOTE]

how about leaving some feedback for others first as per requirements of this thread buddy

[MilkBagz]

[QUOTE=killerteacup;46652144]how about leaving some feedback for others first as per requirements of this thread buddy[/QUOTE]

He probably meant for it to go along with this: [url]http://facepunch.com/showthread.php?t=1250398&p=46643009&viewfull=1#post46643009[/url]

[Hollosoulja]

I sampled the capcom theme

[media]http://soundcloud.com/jazzej/acalm[/media]

[killerteacup]

[QUOTE=MilkBagz;46652362]He probably meant for it to go along with this: [url]http://facepunch.com/showthread.php?t=1250398&p=46643009&viewfull=1#post46643009[/url][/QUOTE]

Oh sorry kaimaera, my bad! Itchy trigger finger and i didnt see your previous post

[TCB]

[url]https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/58951386/wubwub%20%282%29.mp3[/url]
first time ever producing dubstep, it's pretty fun to make something different to my usual [url=https://soundcloud.com/tylercbrown]funky sheit[/url] but i never listen to dubstep so it's all new to me

[Skeeter]

[QUOTE=TCB;46660155][url]https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/58951386/wubwub%20%282%29.mp3[/url]
first time ever producing dubstep, it's pretty fun to make something different to my usual [url=https://soundcloud.com/tylercbrown]funky sheit[/url] but i never listen to dubstep so it's all new to me[/QUOTE]

Hello friend, here are a few things you seem to have missed by not reading the name of the thread or by checking out the rules that apply in this forum :
[quote]1. [B]GIVE FEEDBACK GIVE FEEDBACK GIVE FEEDBACK GIVE FEEDBACK.[/B] This rule is now mandatory. ​You are required to post feedback! We will not be happy if you do not![/quote]

Bolded for emphasis

Here's from the rules thread for this forum
[quote]6: When you post music, give constructive criticism aswell! People aren't going to bother helping you if you're not helping anyone else. [/quote]

You can find the complete thread by clicking this link:
[url]http://facepunch.com/showthread.php?t=1063273[/url]

Everybody wants to recieve feedback so it is only proper that when you post music, you return the favour you ask for. :) Keep in mind that feedback should help the artist, so try and express your opinions in an explanatory manner, no "this is shit" or just "this is good", explain why you think it is shit, or why is it good, so that the artist can understand why.

Have a good one :)

[Ms. Gyroscope]

[media]http://soundcloud.com/corn-mouth/the-hands-resist-him-v15[/media]

Finally got around to changing the progression on this breakcore track aswell as some other things.

Does it sound nicer now?

[editline]8th December 2014[/editline]

[QUOTE=Hollosoulja;46654299]I sampled the capcom theme

[media]http://soundcloud.com/jazzej/acalm[/media][/QUOTE]

Really nice bassdrum sample but it seems to drag on without really changing. Gets boring after a bit.

[editline]8th December 2014[/editline]

[QUOTE=Kaimaera;46650700]I made this a short time ago, but I added the weird build up and slow bring back in sections and couldn't rectify conflicting ideas. I just left it, until I deemed it worthy enough to put online and get ideas and critiques. :dance:

Nexus 130

[media]http://soundcloud.com/kaimaera/nexus-130[/media][/QUOTE]

Fuck thats super nice. I love the synths! What do you use?

[mezzokoko]

[QUOTE=dedo678;46649571]Here's a track I pumped out today. Looking for some feedback.

[media]http://soundcloud.com/dedo678/iron-of-heaven[/media][/QUOTE]

The harmonics and melody are pretty nice, but your melody sound feels too short somehow, try adding a bit of reverb, so that inbetween notes there is no silent gap. It becomes a little more legato like that. Also adding more harmonic background elements over time would be nice to fill the soundscape more.

[QUOTE=Skeeter;46643900]You can embed your soundcloud link by writing [.media]
Here's a track I'm currently working on, not sure how to progress it further, or if I want to because 2 minutes is a pretty good length for a track that can loop forever, I'm open for suggestions though, especially on the mixing side!
[media]http://soundcloud.com/skriket/city-of-tanash[/media][/QUOTE]

I love the synth sounds and your harmonics. However, the snare drum which occasionaly jumps in and out is slightly distracting, I'd try a few different samples or pitch it a bit higher. Love the rest of it really alot though. When looking for a way how to continue a track, I usually just leave out a single instrument and have a look at how it changes stuff. From there on do some simple variations until creativity gets the best out of ya.

[QUOTE=Rich209;46608945]This is what I've been working on. Work in progress ladies and gents.

Unleash the Fire - [media]http://soundcloud.com/russiangodfather/unleash-the-fire[/media][/QUOTE]

This is really sick stuff you got there. You just got followed for making incredibly nice orchestral stuff. Wish I had an opportunity to try something like that some day. Also, epic choice for title. (Sorry if this isn't helpful criticism at all)
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First track is a project I am working on, second one was a quick experiment about in-track transposition. First half of it has some variation, latter half is just transposing through all scales.

[media]http://soundcloud.com/mezzokoko-wip/memory-flash[/media]
[media]http://soundcloud.com/mezzokoko-wip/experiment-1[/media]

[chaz13]

[QUOTE=Mysterious Mr.E;46665845][media]http://soundcloud.com/corn-mouth/the-hands-resist-him-v15[/media]

Finally got around to changing the progression on this breakcore track aswell as some other things.

Does it sound nicer now?[/quote]

Much better!

[quote][media]http://soundcloud.com/mezzokoko-wip/memory-flash[/media][/quote]

I don't have any criticism really, but I enjoyed it. Reminded me of my old amiga.

Added the vocals to the rock track finally. It was a really rushed recording session so they're not the best yet, but we'll re-do them soon. It's also not mixed wonderfully yet, but hey ho..

[media]http://soundcloud.com/awesomesaucee/heavy[/media]

[mezzokoko]

[QUOTE=chaz13;46668206]Much better!

I don't have any criticism really, but I enjoyed it. Reminded me of my old amiga.

Added the vocals to the rock track finally. It was a really rushed recording session so they're not the best yet, but we'll re-do them soon. It's also not mixed wonderfully yet, but hey ho..

[media]http://soundcloud.com/awesomesaucee/heavy[/media][/QUOTE]

Instrumentalwise I'd say your track is fine, but the vocals sound very close to one of the guitars, which isn't a bad thing but I personally feel it sounds a bit odd, especially in the first half.

[chaz13]

[QUOTE=Kaimaera;46650700]I made this a short time ago, but I added the weird build up and slow bring back in sections and couldn't rectify conflicting ideas. I just left it, until I deemed it worthy enough to put online and get ideas and critiques. :dance:

Nexus 130

[media]http://soundcloud.com/kaimaera/nexus-130[/media][/QUOTE]

I really enjoy the atmosphere, there's a lot of nice synths going on in the background which add a lot to it. The low mids feel a bit muddy, but only very very slightly. I think it might be because of the snare, but it's hard to tell. In the 2/4 part the drums are a bit too weak/don't punch through.

I'm having fun writing songs with real instruments so I tried some metally thing:

[media]http://soundcloud.com/awesomesaucee/metal[/media]

May continue it.

[Rediscover]

[QUOTE=chaz13;46675956]

I'm having fun writing songs with real instruments so I tried some metally thing:

[media]http://soundcloud.com/awesomesaucee/metal[/media]

May continue it.[/QUOTE]

just jammed out to this, air guitar and all. this song is fun. i know nothing of this genre so i cant really tell you what i think needs to be done to it, but it is fun

i made this, also

[media]http://soundcloud.com/azathoth/umbasa-snippet[/media]

[Skeeter]

[QUOTE=Mezzokoko;46666140]
I love the synth sounds and your harmonics. However, the snare drum which occasionaly jumps in and out is slightly distracting, I'd try a few different samples or pitch it a bit higher. Love the rest of it really alot though. When looking for a way how to continue a track, I usually just leave out a single instrument and have a look at how it changes stuff. From there on do some simple variations until creativity gets the best out of ya.[/quote]

I love the synth sounds and your harmonics. However, the snare drum which occasionaly jumps in and out is slightly distracting, I'd try a few different samples or pitch it a bit higher. Love the rest of it really alot though. When looking for a way how to continue a track, I usually just leave out a single instrument and have a look at how it changes stuff. From there on do some simple variations until creativity gets the best out of ya.

I can definietly agree on the snare drum, I've now remixed it so that the snare has a much brighter sound to it, very much like an actual 8bit synth (just layered it with some white noise so that when the snare hits, you get some white noise) and it sounds a ton better! Thanks :)
Very good tip on song composition as well, tweaked a bit with removing certain elements from time to time and it really does a whole world of difference.

[alexcpascal]

[URL="https://alexpascalmusic.bandcamp.com/album/winter"]https://alexpascalmusic.bandcamp.com/album/winter[/URL]

Here is a preview of my EP which will be on iTunes soon. Would appreciate feedback :)

[MilkBagz]

[QUOTE=alexcpascal;46680496][URL="https://alexpascalmusic.bandcamp.com/album/winter"]https://alexpascalmusic.bandcamp.com/album/winter[/URL]

Here is a preview of my EP which will be on iTunes soon. Would appreciate feedback :)[/QUOTE]

Read the title of the thread.

[editline]brap ting[/editline]

[QUOTE=Rediscover;46677579][media]http://soundcloud.com/azathoth/umbasa-snippet[/media][/QUOTE]

It sounds pretty empty. If you were aiming to keep it minimal, you could probably just throw some ambient noise or something into the background to keep it that way without sounding too empty. I like it though, either way it's good.

[alexcpascal]

[QUOTE=MilkBagz;46680804]Read the title of the thread.[/QUOTE]

[QUOTE=killerteacup;39741128][IMG]http://i47.tinypic.com/s5l35v.jpg[/IMG]
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[B]1[/B]. [U]GIVE FEEDBACK GIVE FEEDBACK GIVE FEEDBACK GIVE FEEDBACK. [/U]This rule is now [B]mandatory. [/B]​You are required to post feedback! We will not be happy if you do not!
[B]2. [/B]This thread is for work in progress pieces [B]as well as completed pieces![/B] Don't feel uncomfortable posting something you don't think is ready for other people to see.
[B]3. [/B]Don't throw something shit together in 3 seconds just so you have something to post - this is like every other thread, we don't want to hear you talking about your day just so you can test your new microphone.[/QUOTE]

"as well as completed pieces"

[Hakita]

[QUOTE=alexcpascal;46683858]"as well as completed pieces"[/QUOTE]
so you noticed rule number 2 but not rule number 1? the one in caps lock and underlined?

[MilkBagz]

[QUOTE=alexcpascal;46683858]"as well as completed pieces"[/QUOTE]

dude

try again

[Timo★]

[img]http://files.1337upload.net/bad_reading_x1-a771c6.png[/img]

[Ms. Gyroscope]

You all made me get excited hoping someone critiqued my thing

[killerteacup]

Fuck guys I cannot make the OP or the title any clearer how does this keep on happening

[Skeeter]

On one hand, it sucks a bit that no CC is given, but on the other hand, I love the idea of more people coming to this section and realizing their dreams making music.

[editline]11th December 2014[/editline]

[QUOTE=dedo678;46649571]

[media]http://soundcloud.com/dedo678/iron-of-heaven[/media]

I was staring at this picture as I made it to see if imagery could inspire me more.

[img_thumb]http://i.imgur.com/4iunWGS.jpg[/img_thumb][/QUOTE]

I can definietly hear the picture, it has a very "welcome to the town smithy, let me show you my wares" sort of vibe to it! Obviously the picture is on a much grander scale, it is a very nice piece nonetheless.

It sounds a bit like a filler track to an album with tracks that are huge and epic, with tracks like this to help with the ride. You should definietly explore the soundscape you've made with this track and continue on that path :)

[editline]11th December 2014[/editline]

[QUOTE=Kaimaera;46650700]I made this a short time ago, but I added the weird build up and slow bring back in sections and couldn't rectify conflicting ideas. I just left it, until I deemed it worthy enough to put online and get ideas and critiques. :dance:

Nexus 130

[media]http://soundcloud.com/kaimaera/nexus-130[/media][/QUOTE]

I'm going to comment on this because I know you'll do the same with somebody else's track :)

It is a very bass heavy track this one, and I like it! You could probably smack up the snare so that it is a bit more high-end friendly, maybe add white noise on top of it to really give it the punching power to cut through the very intense mix.

Come to think of it, you could probably get away with the snare being so thick and heavy (this is not a bad thing) if you were to give the bass guitar some growl, maybe have a parallell distortion going (you make a send from the bass track to a separate track where you have a distortion effect on, and then tweak in so that you get a distorted sound to the bass, like you have in the end at 1:45).

Are you cutting the lower frequencies from every other track that isn't the bass and kick drum? I think you could do that to make the track breathe some more, since right now it is a bit messy. You can achieve the full&maxed sound you're going after and still have each track have a lot of fresh air around it.

I really dig the part after the break at the end, very nice piano and buildup of the tempo!

[editline]11th December 2014[/editline]

[QUOTE=Mysterious Mr.E;46665845][media]http://soundcloud.com/corn-mouth/the-hands-resist-him-v15[/media]

Finally got around to changing the progression on this breakcore track aswell as some other things.

Does it sound nicer now?
[/QUOTE]

If the glitchy stuff was added at strategically located places instead of all the time then I would absolutely love this track, because the string section is really beautiful and I personally would like that to be the main attraction of this track, and not the glitch.

[editline]11th December 2014[/editline]

[B]Alright, I need some help from you guys![/B]

[url]https://soundcloud.com/skriket/alla-latar/s-9FrmP[/url]

I decided to make a small EP for my brother as a christmas present, and these are the four tracks which I've made.

HOWEVER!

I'm not entirely sure in what order they should be, and it would mean the world to me if you were to take a listen and tell me which order you guys think might work the best.

I'm leaning on having the 2nd track as the opener and the 4th as the ending, but that is mostly because I like those two tracks the most and I think it is important to both start and end on a high note.

Thank you!

[Hakita]

track 3 should definitely be the third track, it's a bit more held back and even a bit melancholic, which gives the last track a bit of extra leverage, plus it's the odd one out so it definitely shouldn't be the first, second or last track, which only leaves the third spot open