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[QUOTE=Skeeter;45263502] [media]http://soundcloud.com/skriket/1969a[/media] [/QUOTE] Lovin the snare on this one. A pad or whatever being sidechained in the background is sexy as fuck too.

[QUOTE=Dead Madman;45265444]I love how people keep complementing my synths like are you for real it's literally FL studio's default harmor + sytrus i will even give them out if you want[/QUOTE] Nothing wrong with that dude. As long as it sounds good.

All of you guys feedbacking me, thanks a lot, I'm not really big on this forum thing so I don't know how to quote all of you in one reply and it seems kinda spammy ansering each and everyone. To the guys liking it, thnaks, and I'll have a look at that clap, maybe do something with the vocalthingy, defintely work on the progression more and take a look at the panning of stuff. Any tips or tricks concerning posting are greatly appreciated!

[QUOTE=nubblecakes;45265926]Nothing wrong with that dude. As long as it sounds good.[/QUOTE] I guess so

[QUOTE=Skeeter;45263502]Here's a little something I've remixed, I realized the 45th anniversery for the moon landing is coming around the bend and I use a lot of samples from the space race, and the track needed a good remix so I figured why not? [media]http://soundcloud.com/skriket/1969a[/media] What's the genre you're making now? This sounds really jazzy, almost funky and I love it! Especially the synth that's backbeat, really nice. Also grossbeat <3 [editline]1st July 2014[/editline] Not a huge fan of the sample you're using, it works in the beginning, not so much I think as the track progresses, gets a bit stale! It would work really nice if it came in here and there, as a bit of spice to the track as the drums come in. [editline]1st July 2014[/editline] Get TruePiano and replace the piano with it, work on the velocity and it'll be kickass! Maybe even let the track breathe every now and then, and maybe some cool automations here and there?[/QUOTE] Pretty good but the guitar needs more Oomph. [editline]2nd July 2014[/editline] Also grossbeat is for people who dont know how to C-402 r2 B0 0Sxx 0Uxx 0Dxx or 00-FF ;3 Like so 1 C-402.50.B0.-S00 2 C-402.45.....-SA2 3 D-402.50.B1.-SD4 4 C-402.45......-SE6 5 E-402.50.r2..-SFF

[QUOTE=Mysterious Mr.E;45270286]Also grossbeat is for people who dont know how to C-402 r2 B0 0Sxx 0Uxx 0Dxx or 00-FF ;3 Like so 1 C-402.50.B0.-S00 2 C-402.45.....-SA2 3 D-402.50.B1.-SD4 4 C-402.45......-SE6 5 E-402.50.r2..-SFF[/QUOTE] you see that, to me, just looks like commands within a tracker, ala OpenMPT [img]http://i.imgur.com/2g1Lc7y.png[/img] I'm guessing it's for micro timings to make stuff seem more natural and less robotic?

[QUOTE=absolalone111;45271411]you see that, to me, just looks like commands within a tracker, ala OpenMPT [img]http://i.imgur.com/2g1Lc7y.png[/img] I'm guessing it's for micro timings to make stuff seem more natural and less robotic?[/QUOTE] Im actually playing a sample time stretched while the first one is backwards the third is forewords and im re triggering the second one every 2 ticks.

[QUOTE=supersnail11;45259316]Also, here's an improved? version of my previous track: [media]http://soundcloud.com/c4av/surmise-v2[/media] Replaced the snare and added another synth to make it less repetitive. Still not really liking the synth that comes in at 1:03, but I'm not sure what I could replace it with. Any thoughts?[/QUOTE] IMO, the synth at 1:03 is probably one of the best parts, there is nothing wrong with it. But everything else could use a lot of work if you plan to keep working on this track and making something out of it. Instead of having piano/bass notes on every kick and snare, try occasionally changing them to the 'and' of the beat as well as trying to change up the progression. As the track goes on it gets more predictable and less exciting. There could also be a build up in the middle to add a little more tension. ~ I've been working on some bootleg edits of a few tracks, here's something I did for fun [media]http://soundcloud.com/wakethephantom/hbfs-bootleg[/media]

[QUOTE=Skeeter;45263502]Here's a little something I've remixed, I realized the 45th anniversery for the moon landing is coming around the bend and I use a lot of samples from the space race, and the track needed a good remix so I figured why not? [media]http://soundcloud.com/skriket/1969a[/media] [/QUOTE] I'm liking how the instruments match up with the sampling. Its really cool! The guitar melody is simplistic but really heavy, and it matches really really really well with the "we have lift off" sample. The sample near the end is kinda choppy and the sample at the very end is really unexpected. I like it! [QUOTE=Mysterious Mr.E;45265165] [media]http://soundcloud.com/corn-mouth/collaboration-demo-one-at-me[/media] This is a demo of a collaboration thats going on between me and anax. 7/4 Anax did the music. I did the Beat and effects. This is still ongoing and is bound to change since anax is till tweaking it as we speak. Would like critique on the beat. plox [/QUOTE] Really like the percussion and the atmosphere, but the piece drones and while I love the effects, the overall piece just seems to be lacking a little more diversity. The stuff you do with the guitar around 1:29 is what I'd love to see more of in the piece. [QUOTE=Adius Shadow;45265600]Working with what you got is the way 2 be. [media]http://soundcloud.com/jaredrobertson/mellow[/media][/QUOTE] Its definitely mellow. Production wise, its great, just doesn't seem to be individualistic or hold a single identity. I don't know, it might just be me. [QUOTE=killa101;45277225]I I've been working on some bootleg edits of a few tracks, here's something I did for fun [media]http://soundcloud.com/wakethephantom/hbfs-bootleg[/media][/QUOTE] Daft Punk! And its not a mix of Get Lucky. I really like the sped up sampling, it has this sense of urgency. Its a really nice edit and gets me pretty pumped. The bit around 1:00 isn't too clear, which I guess is intended, but its choppy and breaks the flow in my opinion. Overall this is a really cool edit! ~ Continuing on my adventures with an iPhone (why must my friend be in Haiti with my recording stuff), I've finished another piece. Its a piano track that I tried to base off of running around a city/suburban park with some friends; playing tag or just roaming and romping around. Also I can just picture the red lining in this piece. [media]http://soundcloud.com/vizard38/romping-and-roaming[/media]

[QUOTE=Adius Shadow;45265836]Lovin the snare on this one. A pad or whatever being sidechained in the background is sexy as fuck too.[/QUOTE] Thanks! What pad are you thinking about? Or are you suggesting I should have one in the track? :) [QUOTE=nixxu;45266017]All of you guys feedbacking me, thanks a lot, I'm not really big on this forum thing so I don't know how to quote all of you in one reply and it seems kinda spammy ansering each and everyone. To the guys liking it, thnaks, and I'll have a look at that clap, maybe do something with the vocalthingy, defintely work on the progression more and take a look at the panning of stuff. Any tips or tricks concerning posting are greatly appreciated![/QUOTE] You can always click reply and copy the quote, then proceed to the next post and paste the old quote in the post, and then copy both the quotes and then write something about the track in the last post, this is a bit of work though and as long as you just help one dude/dudeette out with each post of a new track we're all happy :) Don't feel any less worth just because some people do the megaposts with plenty of critique, every little bit help and so far you've been very helpful! [QUOTE=Mysterious Mr.E;45270286]Pretty good but the guitar needs more Oomph. [/QUOTE] Cheers bud, any thought on how to give it that extra Oomph you're talking about? :) [QUOTE=vizard38;45277352]I'm liking how the instruments match up with the sampling. Its really cool! The guitar melody is simplistic but really heavy, and it matches really really really well with the "we have lift off" sample. The sample near the end is kinda choppy and the sample at the very end is really unexpected. I like it! [media]http://soundcloud.com/vizard38/romping-and-roaming[/media][/QUOTE] Thanks man! I did this track for a project in school where we were supposed to be inspired by the moon, I've always loved space exploration and especially the speech JFK gave about it so it was a really easy project for me. :) The ending is there because I wanted to play a prank on people, have it 'end' with the guitars fading out, wait for people to start clapping and BAM the end sample. On your track, I think you really nailed it well, that happy careless feel when you're just roaming around in the city. A very beautiful piece indeed! Only thing I can think of is that it distorts every now and then, how are you currently recording this? If you have the time I think you should record it again, and have the iphone a bit further away. How are you placing the phone in relation to the piano? Beyond the clipping you managed to get a really good sound out of the piano, especially for an iphone microphone!

[QUOTE=supersnail11;45259316] Also, here's an improved? version of my previous track: [media]http://soundcloud.com/c4av/surmise-v2[/media] Replaced the snare and added another synth to make it less repetitive. Still not really liking the synth that comes in at 1:03, but I'm not sure what I could replace it with. Any thoughts?[/QUOTE] Pretty good, I like how well the instruments and chords fit together. I would maybe add some kind of click or quiet percussion in some areas to reinforce the rhythm (If that makes any sense). The end seems a bit strange. [QUOTE=Adius Shadow;45265600]Working with what you got is the way 2 be. [media]http://soundcloud.com/jaredrobertson/mellow[/media][/QUOTE] Awesome, especially the drums. Has a nice pace, feels very powerful. - Here's something I put together today. I hadn't made music for a while, but I felt inspired and I think it came out pretty well. Still experimenting with harmonies. [media]http://soundcloud.com/thedanielholt/sudden-things[/media]

[QUOTE=Warship;45282483] Here's something I put together today. I hadn't made music for a while, but I felt inspired and I think it came out pretty well. Still experimenting with harmonies. [media]http://soundcloud.com/thedanielholt/sudden-things[/media][/QUOTE] The bass is kinda jarring, might want to try something more heavy and less stringy. The strings are a little fake sounding. The overall piece is (as I like to say) atmospheric, but I feel like the lack of a melody makes it a little bit boring. The little effects and sounds you use on the other hand are good, and percussion is great. Just my opinion of course. ~ Been going rather ham with the recording this week. Been toying with a concept album in mind, so I guess it helps to have a topic when making music cause this is the third thing I've churned out this week, where usually its months (or years) before I get a new song done usually. This one is built off an old concept and I based it off of walking under trees in autumn, with the leaves falling down around as someone is trying to walk through. Hope you guys enjoy! [media]http://soundcloud.com/vizard38/the-path-under-the-leaves[/media]

[QUOTE=vizard38;45283382] Been going rather ham with the recording this week. Been toying with a concept album in mind, so I guess it helps to have a topic when making music cause this is the third thing I've churned out this week, where usually its months (or years) before I get a new song done usually. This one is built off an old concept and I based it off of walking under trees in autumn, with the leaves falling down around as someone is trying to walk through. Hope you guys enjoy![/QUOTE] I wish I could play that well :c

My dad's a Banjo teacher and I don't play the instrument myself (I'm a bass player) but I grabbed one of his Banjos and wrote this thing: [url]http://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/286964/T3.mid[/url] [url]http://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/286964/T3.gp5[/url] Gonna record it with the real instruments after a few tweaks, I can just about play it on the banjo.

[QUOTE=Tezzanator92;45291426]My dad's a Banjo teacher and I don't play the instrument myself (I'm a bass player) but I grabbed one of his Banjos and wrote this thing: [url]http://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/286964/T3.mid[/url] [url]http://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/286964/T3.gp5[/url] Gonna record it with the real instruments after a few tweaks, I can just about play it on the banjo.[/QUOTE] Hi there! This thread is having this lil' thing where it would be wonderful if you'd critique another person's work before posting one of your own works. Just look around any of the ones on the previous page that didn't get a lot of critique! Thank you!

My bad, I actually did look on the previous page and thought everything that needed to be said had been said, felt guilty posting without critiquing in all honesty. (I have Critiqued things in the past, well aware of the thread rules) - However, I appreciate the non-volatile manner of your post so here you go :) [QUOTE=vizard38;45277352] Continuing on my adventures with an iPhone (why must my friend be in Haiti with my recording stuff), I've finished another piece. Its a piano track that I tried to base off of running around a city/suburban park with some friends; playing tag or just roaming and romping around. Also I can just picture the red lining in this piece. [media]http://soundcloud.com/vizard38/romping-and-roaming[/media][/QUOTE] I really liked this actually but I felt it needed some light/shade to further compliment the optimistic nature of the composition. My suggestions would be maybe to modulate to a minor key (As you hinted at around 1:08) for a middle-8 section or possibly the outro. Of course that may not reflect what you're trying to go for so it's merely a suggestion. I saw your album art in the other thread, if this is going to be part of that album I would guess the context of other pieces would help in that regard.

[QUOTE=Tezzanator92;45291860]My bad, I actually did look on the previous page and thought everything that needed to be said had been said, felt guilty posting without critiquing in all honesty. (I have Critiqued things in the past, well aware of the thread rules) - However, I appreciate the non-volatile manner of your post so here you go :) [/QUOTE] My apologies mate! I appreciate your non-volatile manner as well! [QUOTE=Tezzanator92;45291860] I really liked this actually but I felt it needed some light/shade to further compliment the optimistic nature of the composition. My suggestions would be maybe to modulate to a minor key (As you hinted at around 1:08) for a middle-8 section or possibly the outro. Of course that may not reflect what you're trying to go for so it's merely a suggestion. I saw your album art in the other thread, if this is going to be part of that album I would guess the context of other pieces would help in that regard.[/quote] I'll look into that. Might sound really cool! As for the album, its a self reflection of my life in a suburban. I live in a particularly peculiar area, as it seems like a simple suburban area on one hand, but on the other hand we have this really big casino just ten minutes away. The album is (hopefully) going to look into the polarizing aspects of these two areas on life in general here. If that makes sense hah! [QUOTE=Tezzanator92;45291426]My dad's a Banjo teacher and I don't play the instrument myself (I'm a bass player) but I grabbed one of his Banjos and wrote this thing: [url]http://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/286964/T3.mid[/url] [url]http://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/286964/T3.gp5[/url] Gonna record it with the real instruments after a few tweaks, I can just about play it on the banjo.[/QUOTE] I like it! It reminds me of a Mark Twain novel, something like Huck Finn or Tom Sawyer, at least in its atmosphere. It reminds me of one of those child farm games you could play online, I forget what I'm trying to think of. I'm not sure if that's a compliment, but overall its really well done and I can't wait to here it on the real instrument.

[QUOTE=Mysterious Mr.E;45265165][media]http://soundcloud.com/corn-mouth/collaboration-demo-one-at-me[/media] This is a demo of a collaboration thats going on between me and anax. 7/4 Anax did the music. I did the Beat and effects. This is still ongoing and is bound to change since anax is till tweaking it as we speak. Would like critique on the beat. plox[/QUOTE] I think it's lacking low end, it could use a more apparent kick. The beat itself is sick though, I liked how you kept doing that whole "short pause, open hat to snare" thing and threw in a bunch of different stuff in between. I like the melody of the strings at the end too. [QUOTE=Adius Shadow;45265600]Working with what you got is the way 2 be. [media]http://soundcloud.com/jaredrobertson/mellow[/media][/QUOTE] I like the way you did the transition at 0:26, and the melody is nice. I think it would sound better if you reduced the high end of the snare though, it sounds way higher than everything else. - [media]http://soundcloud.com/masonkaskiw/slouch-20[/media] Short ass beat so far. Gonna add a low ass bassline in a sec, and when I start arranging it all I'm probably gonna have a couple sections where I'll just go crazy chopping it all even more ridiculously. Anyway, I'm mainly looking for feedback on the mixing/mastering side of things so far.

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[QUOTE=MilkBagz;45298184] [media]http://soundcloud.com/masonkaskiw/slouch-20[/media] Short ass beat so far. Gonna add a low ass bassline in a sec, and when I start arranging it all I'm probably gonna have a couple sections where I'll just go crazy chopping it all even more ridiculously. Anyway, I'm mainly looking for feedback on the mixing/mastering side of things so far.[/QUOTE] The only thing I could really say is maybe the pad could use a bit more mids and a bit of a punchier snare. It's sounding pretty on point so far though.

[QUOTE=Mysterious Mr.E;45265165] [media]http://soundcloud.com/corn-mouth/collaboration-demo-one-at-me[/media] [/QUOTE] this is brilliant. alot of idm flash/breakcore coming from the idm community doesn't seem to get it, but obviously you do and i love it. btw what do you use to downgrade you amen break? here's the part where i post my thing. [media]http://soundcloud.com/parx_t/bedtime-story-wip[/media] so its only a WIP because im currently looking for a vocalist to go along with it, and if i have any success this will go on a single, but for now it is just the way it is. LOOKING FOR MALE , FEMALE OR OTHER VOCALIST

[media][URL="https://soundcloud.com/souls-at-zero/pale-heart"]http://soundcloud.com/souls-at-zero/pale-heart[/URL][/media] I'm not sure about this... maybe the Kick's too big in the mix. I've also go this thing with the air on the toms being audible when they ring out, I tried putting a noise gate but it just sort of did that tremolo effect improper gates do, but if I set the threshold too high the tom hits cut short, any suggestions?

[QUOTE=TimeBomb;45305499]gating issues[/QUOTE] depending on what you are using to limit, there should be a knob for gate release. i would make the gate fairly lenient, but give it a release so its still in there, but it fades that way it can't overpower anything or be noticeable. otherwise i'd eq it out.

[QUOTE=TimeBomb;45305499][media][URL="https://soundcloud.com/souls-at-zero/pale-heart"]http://soundcloud.com/souls-at-zero/pale-heart[/URL][/media] I'm not sure about this... maybe the Kick's too big in the mix. I've also go this thing with the air on the toms being audible when they ring out, I tried putting a noise gate but it just sort of did that tremolo effect improper gates do, but if I set the threshold too high the tom hits cut short, any suggestions?[/QUOTE] "Creative Music in Progress - [B]Always Post Feedback, Read OP before posting![/B]"

As above, if you could post feedback for others when posting your own work, we'd all really appreciate it.

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[QUOTE=Mysterious Mr.E;45265165] [URL="http://facepunch.com/"]Listen to Soundcloud recording[/URL] [URL]http://soundcloud.com/corn-mouth/collaboration-demo-one-at-me[/URL] This is a demo of a collaboration thats going on between me and anax.[/QUOTE] There is so much going on at once here! I feel like I need a drug to keep up. I'm going to assume for the sake of review that this wasn't the full length song since it kind of just ends without any real resolution. Too much happening for me personally, but this isn't quite my style of music anyway so take my criticism with a grain of salt. I did like the changeup and chances you took, so full props for that. [QUOTE=Skeeter;45263502]Here's a little something I've remixed, I realized the 45th anniversery for the moon landing is coming around the bend and I use a lot of samples from the space race, and the track needed a good remix so I figured why not? [URL="http://facepunch.com/"]Listen to Soundcloud recording[/URL] [URL]http://soundcloud.com/skriket/1969a[/URL] [/QUOTE] I like the overall concept and the build with the rocket take-off. I felt it rather anticlimactic and the jump between takeoff and landing left a lot of potential on the table. I did enjoy the landing though. [QUOTE=vizard38;45263491] I just cooked this piece up today. Its really rough and has some kinks I need work out but I think overall its alright. Its my introduction piece for this solo piano concept album I'm working on. I hope you enjoy! Also as a disclaimer, I still don't have my recording studio and software, so I'm STILL recording with my iPhone. Shit sucks. [URL="http://facepunch.com/"]Listen to Soundcloud recording[/URL] [URL]http://soundcloud.com/vizard38/flipping-pages[/URL] [/QUOTE] I'll start off by saying it's quite pretty and familiar sounding (not in a bad way). I didn't hear anything new and progressive, but that doesn't mean bad either if that's not what you're going for. Good progression: started fairly smooth, moved nicely, and ended well. I'd be interested to hear how this piece fits into the concept album as a whole, where I didn't hear many different, unique bits standing out that would imply light sampling and callouts to the rest of the pieces on the album. Overall I'd say it's a good intro piece. [QUOTE=supersnail11;45259316]Also, here's an improved? version of my previous track: [URL="http://facepunch.com/"]Listen to Soundcloud recording[/URL] [URL]http://soundcloud.com/c4av/surmise-v2[/URL] Replaced the snare and added another synth to make it less repetitive. Still not really liking the synth that comes in at 1:03, but I'm not sure what I could replace it with. Any thoughts?[/QUOTE] I feel this track was very safe and didn't have much progression. Like it didn't go anywhere (not in a terrible way at all, just more in a meh kind of way). I loved the 8-bit sounding tune that came in late in the song, but before then it seemed a very slow and cautious; not quite what I expected from a song called surmise which I would assume would make changes or break out at some point. It would make more sense to call it Sunrise to me, because of the slow, deliberate, predictable way it rises. Overall I dig it, just wasn't anything groundbreaking and new and I didn't think it matched the name. [QUOTE=nixxu;45253013And then on to my own stuff, I don't really expect anyone to feedback me right after my first post but I'll try to contribute a lot more so if anyone feels up for it! This is a "track" (more like a few bars) I produced a while ago. Have kind off hit a wall when it comes to producing so I just went crazy. [url]https://soundcloud.com/sam_nick/baba2/s-Xrmbf[/url] Enjoy[/QUOTE] Not my style TBH, a little too out there for me. The underlying beat wasn't bad, but the samples turned me off. Sorry, not for me this time. [QUOTE=Dead Madman;45252921] I finished up that track I posted recently you guys, I sent it over to plasma for release, should be out in the next couple of months :v: [URL="http://facepunch.com/"]Listen to Soundcloud recording[/URL] [URL]http://soundcloud.com/morganhicks/teaser[/URL] [/QUOTE] I'm digging the mix, great teaser because it definitely made me want to hear more. Didn't take too long to get into a funky beat, but didn't rush it either. Felt clean and bumpin, just the way I like it. [QUOTE=Kobi~;45304985] [URL="http://facepunch.com/"]Listen to Soundcloud recording[/URL] [URL]http://soundcloud.com/parx_t/bedtime-story-wip[/URL] so its only a WIP because im currently looking for a vocalist to go along with it, and if i have any success this will go on a single, but for now it is just the way it is. LOOKING FOR MALE , FEMALE OR OTHER VOCALIST[/QUOTE] Do you have lyrics to go along, or is that part of what you're looking for with a vocalist? I dig the vibe, very down to earth, I could see it being dark in a way; especially with the name "bedtime story". I'm interested to hear your ideas on lyrics and overall what the song is to be about (if you have that sorted out of course). [QUOTE=Crackatowa;45308700] [URL="http://facepunch.com/"]Listen to Soundcloud recording[/URL] [URL]http://soundcloud.com/labourpatrol/first-stab-short-demo[/URL] This is the first track from a new project by me and fellow Facepunch member, I'd say this track is 80% done just needs cleaning up and a few embellishments then it's good to be mixed and mastered. We're hoping to do a 4 song EP or otherwise 2 successive dual releases with the same epic retro sound.[/QUOTE] Not a huge fan of when the synth first starts in and is very wavy in and out. Of course it's opinion, but it just sounds choppy and makes me wish it didn't dip so much on the way out. -- My buddy is almost done mastering this track, but would love some feedback on this track. His name is Mr. M, and everything done here is not for profit. [URL]https://soundcloud.com/meader/room-with-a-view-wip/s-SSHsu[/URL]

well for lyrics im open for discussion because im 100% sure anything i come up with will be cheesy and bullshit, so it would be up to the vocalist. and i'm having many many people tell me that a female voice would sound best. but i don't know who yet or how to find somebody.

[QUOTE=Meader;45317580]TMy buddy is almost done mastering this track, but would love some feedback on this track. His name is Mr. M, and everything done here is not for profit. [URL]https://soundcloud.com/meader/room-with-a-view-wip/s-SSHsu[/URL][/QUOTE] The beat is awesome. I really dig it. I don't know if I'm a fan of how the the rap is mixed though. With headphones on I was hearing the beat more than the rap. Recording things twice and putting them in each headphone can be good like for doubling guitars or harmonies. But I feel in this case it didn't work for me.