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[QUOTE=TimeBomb;45305499][media][URL="https://soundcloud.com/souls-at-zero/pale-heart"]http://soundcloud.com/souls-at-zero/pale-heart[/URL][/media] I'm not sure about this... maybe the Kick's too big in the mix. I've also go this thing with the air on the toms being audible when they ring out, I tried putting a noise gate but it just sort of did that tremolo effect improper gates do, but if I set the threshold too high the tom hits cut short, any suggestions?[/QUOTE] I'm always happy to hear a king crimson/steve wilson prog mix but no feedback until you post feedback

[QUOTE=TimeBomb;45305499]I've also go this thing with the air on the toms being audible when they ring out, I tried putting a noise gate but it just sort of did that tremolo effect improper gates do, but if I set the threshold too high the tom hits cut short, any suggestions?[/QUOTE] Try making the threshold high, and giving it a very slow release (2 seconds)?

[QUOTE=Crackatowa;45308700]Really into this it's got great atmosphere! I think it would sound best with a female vocalist, or if you want to take it to the next level do it primarily with a female vocalist with layering of male vocals on certain parts. Not really educated enough to say how to solve the gating/limiting issues but I do agree that the kick has a little too much presence, I like the double kick sound though! [media]http://soundcloud.com/labourpatrol/first-stab-short-demo[/media] This is the first track from a new project by me and fellow Facepunch member, I'd say this track is 80% done just needs cleaning up and a few embellishments then it's good to be mixed and mastered. We're hoping to do a 4 song EP or otherwise 2 successive dual releases with the same epic retro sound.[/QUOTE] Very catchy and very funky sounding [media]http://soundcloud.com/corn-mouth/pathagore-methodical-polygons-wip[/media] Here is an updated version of Methodical Polygons that I posted earlier. Anax has just been working his ass off on this track and its amazing. But I cant help but shake the feeling that I haven't done enough. All I've done is the beat up until 2:00 I mean I have kinda been in control of the songs structure and stuff and anax takes my suggestions to heart and then does them extraordinarily well, I still feel that I shouldn't even take credit for any of this. God Its this horrible I'm not good enough kinda guilt. [editline]10th July 2014[/editline] [QUOTE=TimeBomb;45305499][media][URL="https://soundcloud.com/souls-at-zero/pale-heart"]http://soundcloud.com/souls-at-zero/pale-heart[/URL][/media] I'm not sure about this... maybe the Kick's too big in the mix. I've also go this thing with the air on the toms being audible when they ring out, I tried putting a noise gate but it just sort of did that tremolo effect improper gates do, but if I set the threshold too high the tom hits cut short, any suggestions?[/QUOTE] The composition is very kickass. I agree the kick could be quieter in the second half.

Here are my first two real attempts at electronic music: [media]http://soundcloud.com/waffle-fires/solid-melting-sax[/media] [media]http://soundcloud.com/waffle-fires/brickburners[/media] cc is appreciated

[QUOTE=G-Wash;45346418]Here are the first two real attempts at electronic music: [media]http://soundcloud.com/waffle-fires/solid-melting-sax[/media] [media]http://soundcloud.com/waffle-fires/brickburners[/media] cc is appreciated[/QUOTE] The first track had some pretty good sampling, but the mix was clustered the low areas mostly. I especially liked the sampling near the end. The second track was pretty enjoyable too. Only thing that I can really comment on this one is maybe some volume issues here and there with certain instruments. Oh yeah and make sure to respond to other people as you post your work, it keeps the cycle going. [QUOTE=Crackatowa;45308700] [media]http://soundcloud.com/labourpatrol/first-stab-short-demo[/media] This is the first track from a new project by me and fellow Facepunch member, I'd say this track is 80% done just needs cleaning up and a few embellishments then it's good to be mixed and mastered. We're hoping to do a 4 song EP or otherwise 2 successive dual releases with the same epic retro sound.[/QUOTE] It bounced around nicely but it felt like the melody needed to stand out more. I think if it changed scales (or chords) a bit at some point it would be more interesting. Also I really liked the direction it headed at 1:17, cool break. [media]http://soundcloud.com/anax-1/revolves[/media] sample fun and some slower drum beats. [media]http://soundcloud.com/anax-1/chromat[/media] IDM & pad fuckery Hopefully gonna wrap up some material from recently and shoot for a label soon.

[QUOTE=G-Wash;45346418]Here are the first two real attempts at electronic music: [media]http://soundcloud.com/waffle-fires/solid-melting-sax[/media] [media]http://soundcloud.com/waffle-fires/brickburners[/media] cc is appreciated[/QUOTE] Don't forget to help someone else out as well!

[QUOTE=G-Wash;45346418]Here are the first two real attempts at electronic music: [media]http://soundcloud.com/waffle-fires/solid-melting-sax[/media] [media]http://soundcloud.com/waffle-fires/brickburners[/media] cc is appreciated[/QUOTE] We know cc is appreciated that's sort of why we ask you to provide some first :)

[QUOTE=Kobi~;45321476]well for lyrics im open for discussion because im 100% sure anything i come up with will be cheesy and bullshit, so it would be up to the vocalist. and i'm having many many people tell me that a female voice would sound best. but i don't know who yet or how to find somebody.[/QUOTE] I'm a lyricist if you ever need any help there. I'd be interested in hearing what you have to say about the theme in the music. What point you want to get across.

New WIP because I never finish anything [media]http://soundcloud.com/joey-z/fight-it-now-with-100-more-drop[/media] My goal was to make it dirty. Mission accomplished :v: Also, only my second drop ever. Notes?

[QUOTE=JoeyZ;45350113]New WIP because I never finish anything [media]http://soundcloud.com/joey-z/fight-it-now-with-100-more-drop[/media] My goal was to make it dirty. Mission accomplished :v: Also, only my second drop ever. Notes?[/QUOTE] As above, if you could please comment some feedback for others when posting your own work, that would be very much appreciated. And to Anax, it's great that you're providing feedback, but it's even better that you're reminding them of the rules as well. <3 u bbs

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[QUOTE=JoeyZ;45350113]New WIP because I never finish anything [media]http://soundcloud.com/joey-z/fight-it-now-with-100-more-drop[/media] My goal was to make it dirty. Mission accomplished :v: Also, only my second drop ever. Notes?[/QUOTE] That sounds pretty great, but a little bit of something is missing from the drop, that intensity, that oompf that goes straight to your core, I feel that a lot of the dubstep that's coming out now tends to miss that in trying to subvert your expectations for what a drop should be

[QUOTE=Anax;45346444]The first track had some pretty good sampling, but the mix was clustered the low areas mostly. I especially liked the sampling near the end. The second track was pretty enjoyable too. Only thing that I can really comment on this one is maybe some volume issues here and there with certain instruments. Oh yeah and make sure to respond to other people as you post your work, it keeps the cycle going. It bounced around nicely but it felt like the melody needed to stand out more. I think if it changed scales (or chords) a bit at some point it would be more interesting. Also I really liked the direction it headed at 1:17, cool break. [media]http://soundcloud.com/anax-1/revolves[/media] sample fun and some slower drum beats. [media]http://soundcloud.com/anax-1/chromat[/media] IDM & pad fuckery Hopefully gonna wrap up some material from recently and shoot for a label soon.[/QUOTE] Wow I really like the first song when it picks up at around 1:08, really love the way that synth sounds, really mellow!

[QUOTE=Mysterious Mr.E;45345276] [media]http://soundcloud.com/corn-mouth/pathagore-methodical-polygons-wip[/media] Here is an updated version of Methodical Polygons that I posted earlier. Anax has just been working his ass off on this track and its amazing. But I cant help but shake the feeling that I haven't done enough. All I've done is the beat up until 2:00 I mean I have kinda been in control of the songs structure and stuff and anax takes my suggestions to heart and then does them extraordinarily well, I still feel that I shouldn't even take credit for any of this. God Its this horrible I'm not good enough kinda guilt. f.[/QUOTE] Sometimes the intro sets the tone, this time however the intro doesn't really do a lot for me. Once the drums come in though? Good lord, beautiful! Personally, I'd skip the first 20 seconds, and begin there at 0:20. Only thing this track lacks currently is some low end, where's the bass man? I got my bongo drums and djembe (+ tambourine, shakers and egg) so I started doing a little something something. Ideas on things that can be added? I'd love to hear your thoughts :) [media]http://soundcloud.com/skriket/dron[/media]

[QUOTE=Skeeter;45351747]I got my bongo drums and djembe (+ tambourine, shakers and egg) so I started doing a little something something. Ideas on things that can be added? I'd love to hear your thoughts :) [media]http://soundcloud.com/skriket/dron[/media][/QUOTE] Right from the get go all I can hear is "guitar slightly off rhythm". Specifically it seems to be starting most measures out early. Are you playing with a click track, and if so how loudly? I almost want to say it's ever-so-slightly out of tune slightly as well, and I might like more mid range in the EQing. BUT When the other percussion and bass come in at :28, those parts are very solid and sound great. If the guitar wasn't fumbling along over top of it, it'd sound excellent. I apologize for not knowing the proper name, but the ambient string/synth you have going for the duration of the song is also very good. Something I'd suggest adding is a really strong melody, either with some weird instrument like a sharp synth or an acoustic/electric guitar. Right now the acoustic guitar feels like it's playing a rhythm part and you could really add a strong instrument or two over top without subtracting anything. I feel like it's got a bit of an old western type vibe so it could do with a clean acoustic or electric, or work equally well with something harder like a distorted electric guitar or sharp synth lead. Something slow and melodic yet intense would be what I imagine fitting best.

hey guys i made this song for my musical creation class in college, but i don't know if i'm satisfied with it. the professor said nothing, just that it was simple (obvious), but i'd really like some more feedback from musicians and composers. so here it is, feel free to say whatever comes to your mind about it, i mean it [url]https://soundcloud.com/nicholas-domene/chin[/url]

The best way to get feedback is to give, don't be afraid to give someone else some help on their track.

Yes, please give some feedback for another person's song with your post. As well, you'll want to use [media] tags and remove the 's' from 'https' in the url.

[QUOTE=Biscuit-Boy;45351886]Right from the get go all I can hear is "guitar slightly off rhythm". Specifically it seems to be starting most measures out early. Are you playing with a click track, and if so how loudly? I almost want to say it's ever-so-slightly out of tune slightly as well, and I might like more mid range in the EQing. BUT When the other percussion and bass come in at :28, those parts are very solid and sound great. If the guitar wasn't fumbling along over top of it, it'd sound excellent. I apologize for not knowing the proper name, but the ambient string/synth you have going for the duration of the song is also very good. Something I'd suggest adding is a really strong melody, either with some weird instrument like a sharp synth or an acoustic/electric guitar. Right now the acoustic guitar feels like it's playing a rhythm part and you could really add a strong instrument or two over top without subtracting anything. I feel like it's got a bit of an old western type vibe so it could do with a clean acoustic or electric, or work equally well with something harder like a distorted electric guitar or sharp synth lead. Something slow and melodic yet intense would be what I imagine fitting best.[/QUOTE] That's quite possible! Now that you mention it I notice it as well, I play with a click track at a loud enough level so that I hear it primarily :) Not sure if it is out of tune, I've been planning on re-record it since I feel it is way too fast now given the overall feel of the track so I'll fix those two things first thing tomorrow! Friend of mine made it for me, it is part piano and part organ which has been heavily modified, I could see how he did it if you want to. I've also been thinking of having a distorted guitar playing some leads on top of it, I'll get to it as well tomorrow. :) Thanks for giving such a thorough criticism mate, I appreciate it a lot!

[QUOTE=Skeeter;45351747] I got my bongo drums and djembe (+ tambourine, shakers and egg) so I started doing a little something something. Ideas on things that can be added? I'd love to hear your thoughts :) [media]http://soundcloud.com/skriket/dron[/media][/QUOTE] I think it stays a lot of time on the same vibe, could work perfectly on a soundtrack for a game or under a conversation on a movie, but being a song for itself, i'd change the harmony on the second half of the first period. but it's great, works really well!

[QUOTE=JoeyZ;45350113]New WIP because I never finish anything [media]http://soundcloud.com/joey-z/fight-it-now-with-100-more-drop[/media] My goal was to make it dirty. Mission accomplished :v: Also, only my second drop ever. Notes?[/QUOTE] [QUOTE=NickoDomene;45352244]hey guys i made this song for my musical creation class in college, but i don't know if i'm satisfied with it. the professor said nothing, just that it was simple (obvious), but i'd really like some more feedback from musicians and composers. so here it is, feel free to say whatever comes to your mind about it, i mean it [url]https://soundcloud.com/nicholas-domene/chin[/url][/QUOTE] Okay this is getting worse and worse. Guys, post some feedback with your post before you even think about posting your own shit here. Why would you ask for notes and not provide any for anybody else? It's not like we don't make these posts like 5 times a page. It doesn't matter if you don't feel qualified or whatever. Even just telling someone you like their track is enough.

[QUOTE=killerteacup;45352607]Okay this is getting worse and worse. Guys, post some feedback with your post before you even think about posting your own shit here. Why would you ask for notes and not provide any for anybody else? It's not like we don't make these posts like 5 times a page. It doesn't matter if you don't feel qualified or whatever. Even just telling someone you like their track is enough.[/QUOTE] i just did it on the post above yours, i didn't know the agreement before.

NickoDomene did post feedback, so he's off the hook (we appreciate you!!), but I have often posted my stance on this. I personally think it would be much better withhold feedback from these posts until they leave their own, as it's really self-defeating when we ask them to leave feedback before receiving, yet some well meaning user will comment on their song anyway. The other side of this though is that any kind of rule that discourages any kind of feedback is arguably a bad rule, since the entire point is the feedback, after all. I don't know what kind of step to take as it is a complex and common problem. Still, I do think the thread has been improving so I'm not gravely concerned about it.

[QUOTE=Mysterious Mr.E;45345276] [media]http://soundcloud.com/corn-mouth/pathagore-methodical-polygons-wip[/media] Here is an updated version of Methodical Polygons that I posted earlier.[/QUOTE] It's not horrible, however, I think the tracks highest fault it's severely lacking an 'oomf.' All I can hear are the breaks and that pluck melody that seems to stretch from 1:24 onward as it carries on everything gets less noticeable. I feel like if the pads came way up and were spread way out it would already begin to feel much more full sounding. ~ Here's a remix I did. Soundcloud kind of fucked up the delay I had on the vocal track and at 1:05 is way more apparent than it should be, but whatevs maaang. Would be cool to get some others' feedback though, specifically the percussion/drum track, as that's what I've been focusing on in new projects as of late. [media]http://soundcloud.com/wakethephantom/danny-darko-like-a-butterfly-ft-jova-radevska-wake-the-phantom-remix[/media]

[QUOTE=killa101;45355536]It's not horrible, however, I think the tracks highest fault it's severely lacking an 'oomf.' All I can hear are the breaks and that pluck melody that seems to stretch from 1:24 onward as it carries on everything gets less noticeable. I feel like if the pads came way up and were spread way out it would already begin to feel much more full sounding. ~ Here's a remix I did. Soundcloud kind of fucked up the delay I had on the vocal track and at 1:05 is way more apparent than it should be, but whatevs maaang. Would be cool to get some others' feedback though, specifically the percussion/drum track, as that's what I've been focusing on in new projects as of late. [media]http://soundcloud.com/wakethephantom/danny-darko-like-a-butterfly-ft-jova-radevska-wake-the-phantom-remix[/media][/QUOTE] Pros: -The drums punch and really come out in the mix -Very wide and ambient liquid vibes from this, sounds fucking raw -Vocals sound SUPERB -Drop is fucking nasty, Cons: -the fact that it only has 40~ plays and should actually have 500,000 Seriously great work on this man, the structure, mix, and ideas come together superbly, overall creating a really angelic, yet hard hitting drum n bass tune! Great work. Now something I've been working on, it's just a little synthwave experiment thingy using vocaloid! My first try with vocaloid, you'll have to excuse the cheesy lyrics, I'm not really experienced in that field of work :s [media]http://soundcloud.com/morganhicks/demo1[/media]

[QUOTE=killa101;45355536]It's not horrible, however, I think the tracks highest fault it's severely lacking an 'oomf.' All I can hear are the breaks and that pluck melody that seems to stretch from 1:24 onward as it carries on everything gets less noticeable. I feel like if the pads came way up and were spread way out it would already begin to feel much more full sounding. ~ Here's a remix I did. Soundcloud kind of fucked up the delay I had on the vocal track and at 1:05 is way more apparent than it should be, but whatevs maaang. Would be cool to get some others' feedback though, specifically the percussion/drum track, as that's what I've been focusing on in new projects as of late. [media]http://soundcloud.com/wakethephantom/danny-darko-like-a-butterfly-ft-jova-radevska-wake-the-phantom-remix[/media][/QUOTE] I love the kick, goddamn is that one sexy kick! I want to hear this on a hugefuckstage, how have you made it? I need to know! I really love the autopanning hihats, what vocal sample is that? You know, I can't really think of much to comment on, it is a fucking solid track through and through, only thing I can really think of is the track there at 2:58, a piano or something to lay down a chill melody (maybe even just rehash the vocal melody?) could be really cool I think :) [editline]11th July 2014[/editline] [QUOTE=Dead Madman;45356463]Pros: [media]http://soundcloud.com/morganhicks/demo1[/media][/QUOTE] I think the vocaloid sounds good, lyrics I even dig as well, a drum&bass-beat on top of it would sound swell as shit! [editline]11th July 2014[/editline] [QUOTE=NickoDomene;45352306]I think it stays a lot of time on the same vibe, could work perfectly on a soundtrack for a game or under a conversation on a movie, but being a song for itself, i'd change the harmony on the second half of the first period. but it's great, works really well![/QUOTE] Wow, thanks! I've added some guitar melodies now to try and make it more songesque, this track is me trying to make a trance/jungle type of track, I've been searching for some vocals as well in the form of either a singer or just samples, but I can't find any good. [media]http://soundcloud.com/skriket/down-in-new-orleans[/media] Maybe I should find a vocalist here on facepunch

[QUOTE=Skeeter;45357138] [editline]11th July 2014[/editline] Wow, thanks! I've added some guitar melodies now to try and make it more songesque, this track is me trying to make a trance/jungle type of track, I've been searching for some vocals as well in the form of either a singer or just samples, but I can't find any good. [media]http://soundcloud.com/skriket/down-in-new-orleans[/media] Maybe I should find a vocalist here on facepunch[/QUOTE] Dude, way better. The melody brought a new element that keeps the music flowing, though it stays on the same harmony. Great job! Only thing I'd do is try to blend the solo guitar a little more on the mix. I've been trying to experiment a little with the kazoo, and as i'm working on some fucked up mod with a friend, i made a battle hymn with it. [media] [url]http://soundcloud.com/nicholas-domene/the-battle-of-waterkazoo[/url] [/media]

[QUOTE=NickoDomene;45352658]i just did it on the post above yours, i didn't know the agreement before.[/QUOTE] love you, thanks man [QUOTE=Biscuit-Boy;45352678]NickoDomene did post feedback, so he's off the hook (we appreciate you!!), but I have often posted my stance on this. I personally think it would be much better withhold feedback from these posts until they leave their own, as it's really self-defeating when we ask them to leave feedback before receiving, yet some well meaning user will comment on their song anyway. The other side of this though is that any kind of rule that discourages any kind of feedback is arguably a bad rule, since the entire point is the feedback, after all. I don't know what kind of step to take as it is a complex and common problem. Still, I do think the thread has been improving so I'm not gravely concerned about it.[/QUOTE] Just keep posting at people who don't lots, let disapproval be known is all we can do really, at least that's the way I see it? Its hard to discourage people from doing much without rules?

Thanks for the positive feedback dudes! [QUOTE=Skeeter;45357138] Wow, thanks! I've added some guitar melodies now to try and make it more songesque, this track is me trying to make a trance/jungle type of track, I've been searching for some vocals as well in the form of either a singer or just samples, but I can't find any good. [media]http://soundcloud.com/skriket/down-in-new-orleans[/media] [/QUOTE] Very nice and chill sounding. I'm really liking the melody structure. The shakers are a really good fit as well, they are quite prominent but not overdone. Just personal opinion, but I think during the break at 2:10, I could see a few of the elements going through a reverb send and getting totally washed out, then subtly coming back as the next section does. [editline]11th July 2014[/editline] Oh also the vocals from my remix were all from the original: [url]http://www.remixcomps.com/contest/danny-darko-ft-jova-radevska-remix-contest[/url] And to Skeeter I used FL studio to make it, if that's what you're asking.

[QUOTE=NickoDomene;45357758]Dude, way better. The melody brought a new element that keeps the music flowing, though it stays on the same harmony. Great job! Only thing I'd do is try to blend the solo guitar a little more on the mix. I've been trying to experiment a little with the kazoo, and as i'm working on some fucked up mod with a friend, i made a battle hymn with it. [media] [url]http://soundcloud.com/nicholas-domene/the-battle-of-waterkazoo[/url] [/media][/QUOTE] I think the kazoo works well with the song you've got beneath it, are you making this track for a comical effect? I think working on making it blend in more in the track could do wonders for the sound of it, the track itself is pretty low-end/higher mid, you could definietly bring down the lower frequencies on the track an try and blend in the kazoo near 500hz and up to 2khz :) Did some fiddling with the track, hopefully the guitar blends in a bit more now! [editline]12th July 2014[/editline] [QUOTE=killa101;45359875]Thanks for the positive feedback dudes! Very nice and chill sounding. I'm really liking the melody structure. The shakers are a really good fit as well, they are quite prominent but not overdone. Just personal opinion, but I think during the break at 2:10, I could see a few of the elements going through a reverb send and getting totally washed out, then subtly coming back as the next section does. [editline]11th July 2014[/editline] Oh also the vocals from my remix were all from the original: [url]http://www.remixcomps.com/contest/danny-darko-ft-jova-radevska-remix-contest[/url] And to Skeeter I used FL studio to make it, if that's what you're asking.[/QUOTE] I can definietly see that being a good choice, I'll fiddle some with reverb during the break so that you'll really get a feel of "coming back to the warmth" when it kicks into second section. I think I might add some of my own vocals to the track too, some tribalistic vocals where I just lay down simple melodies with me saying nonsense. It lacks some higher end too I think, anyone has any ideas on what type of instruments I could use to really make the track fuller? :) [editline]12th July 2014[/editline] How did you make it in FL studio?