[QUOTE=Insignificant;18573798]I saw these comments under OP's youtube vid
^These guys are virgins, don't listen to them.[/QUOTE]
I liked the part when they said it was good.
Comedy gold.
[QUOTE=Epidemick;18564260][media][url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZJB2QDFiIZw[/url][/media]
Fukken Saudi raps
This guy's viral over here
[editline]05:30PM[/editline]
at 0:50 he starts mixing english
:/
I have to say I'm kind of impressed, he's rapping in two languages[/QUOTE]
I'm impressed, too.
Kind of depressed, as well.
But, still. I'm impressed. :cheers:
ITT: Facepunch is nice to girls who suck at rapping
OP has less flow than the hoover dam
Not enough use of the N word and talking about your gardening tools to be a good rap song.
That was pretty much awful.
Do you guys always respond so much when the subject if female?
There are girls on here, you realize. Must you pester them to give you porn when you already have enough?
Sweetheart, you need to practice. Some people have a special talent to be able to come up with amazing rhymes on the spot and pronounce them perfectly, but it is [B]very[/B] rare.
Honestly you have a lot of potential. However you need to practise some more if you want to be taken 'seriously' (I realize you're doing a humor kinda thing, but you know what I mean.)
If you start now some people will like you, but ultimately you will be forgotten. However, if you practice until you are professional sounding and THEN preform you will be nothing short of amazing. You don't want to rush into a performance because ultimately people will be paying to see you and you want them to think you were worth whatever the venue's admission fee was.
[QUOTE=TurtlePower;18552470]If you weren't good looking no one would care[/QUOTE]
This, sorry to say.
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The Jeeves has spoken.
I love how Facepunch all of a sudden loves rap, i am dissapoint :saddowns:
[QUOTE=Muffinbuster;18576204]Do you guys always respond so much when the subject if female?
There are girls on here, you realize. Must you pester them to give you porn when you already have enough?[/QUOTE]
Trying to act like a nice guy to get porn (when he already has enough).
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[QUOTE=Slasha00;18576360]Honestly you have a lot of potential.[/QUOTE]
How'dyou figure that?
Thanks to everyone who took the time to watch my video(s) and to tell me what you thought of it.
I don't mind the criticism, I expected it.
I especially appreciate the advice given on ways to improve, I found some of it helpful.
Seeing as how my video demographic is mainly nerdy teenage boys, advice on subject material would be helpful too, rap or not what sort of Youtube videos would you like to see me make?.....
Besides me getting naked or doing anything remotely sexual.
(that should cut down at least half of the posts)
[QUOTE=Obe1kenobi;18578400]Thanks to everyone who took the time to watch my video(s) and to tell me what you thought of it.
I don't mind the criticism, I expected it.
I especially appreciate the advice given on ways to improve, I found some of it helpful.
Seeing as how my video demographic is mainly nerdy teenage boys, advice on subject material would be helpful too, rap or not what sort of Youtube videos would you like to see me make?.....
Besides me getting naked or doing anything remotely sexual.
(that should cut down at least half of the posts)[/QUOTE]
Rap better and look slightly less ugly with all that goddamn makeup on.
I'm a cosmetician by profession, So I probably already wear a little bit too much normally
People in movies and tv wear a lot of make up and I suppose I feel like I need to wear a little bit extra in my videos too, because apparently I can't rap and my looks are all I have.
but thanks for the heads up.
Maybe it's because I know nothing about nerd-core but I feel this was trying too hard to insert as many geek refrences as possible. It seemed kind of forced and too many refrences shoved too close together. I hope I don't sound too rude, but it felt like you tried *too* hard. I'm not saying I could do a better job at all, it's just my personal opinion.
I don't think the makeup is that bad though guys :D some of you are kind of harsh on make-up.
I'd like to see a rap about something reasonably serious, I'm not entirely sure what subject matter would work well but just make it up as you go along if you have to. I think it'd be much better.
EDIT1 :Also, try to use a lot more metaphors, similes, assonance/alliteration and personification. The best raps [i]always[/i] have great use of lots of literacy techniques.
EDIT 2: You should try working on starting each line a bit earlier too, it would really help the rythm. And like I mentioned before, try crossing between lines over the beat, rather than slowing down the last few words of each line.
Oh, and I quite like the singing section, but some off the lyrics in it are a little off.
[QUOTE=chaz13;18584735]I'd like to see a rap about something reasonably serious, I'm not entirely sure what subject matter would work well but just make it up as you go along if you have to. I think it'd be much better.
EDIT1 :Also, try to use a lot more metaphors, similes, assonance/alliteration and personification. The best raps [i]always[/i] have great use of lots of literacy techniques.
EDIT 2: You should try working on starting each line a bit earlier too, it would really help the rythm. And like I mentioned before, try crossing between lines over the beat, rather than slowing down the last few words of each line.[/QUOTE]
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TMSSqCEZaOk[/media]
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KAxgpHWtLC0&feature=player_embedded[/media]
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[QUOTE=gReplay;18584811][media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TMSSqCEZaOk[/media]
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KAxgpHWtLC0&feature=player_embedded[/media]
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I'm not really sure what you're gettin at, but those are two pretty good examples of decent rap songs. The first isn't pretty average I suppose but the lyrics aren't bad, and I LOVE the second one, but thats because the 90's style fresh hip hop stuff is my favourite kind of rap :smile:
Also OP or anyone else, check out a band called Ugly Duckling. They're not very well known, but their lyrics are absolutely fantastic.
Here's one of their songs, nowhere near my favourite but one of the ones with best lyrics on youtube. Oh, and the video is fan made.
[media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UBHHbkFNmoY&feature=related[/media]
Ediiiiiiit: Just watched your "don't you wish your girlfriend pwns noobs like me" and I think that rap in that is much better.
You would make more money from porn.
This is the rap video I made about a month ago
[url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LibwNdBsr0c[/url]
There are more bewbs in it and I tried to be a little bit more aggressive, I don't like it as much, but maybe my presentation is better in it?
It's not that bad but still annoying to listen to somehow. That might be the pitch though. Master it properly and get some autotune in there and it might be good.
Or just do what AimlessGiant said. Release it exclusively on FP. Garry would sure be happy.
[QUOTE=Obe1kenobi;18587183]This is the rap video I made about a month ago
[url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LibwNdBsr0c[/url]
There are more bewbs in it and I tried to be a little bit more aggressive, I don't like it as much, but maybe my presentation is better in it?[/QUOTE]
Definitely porn.
Futuristic Sex Robotz. Best nerdcore group. 'Nuff said.
[QUOTE=Talat112;18577631]Trying to act like a nice guy to get porn (when he already has enough)[/QUOTE]
Wait, who is?
Make sure you don't get too caught up in being "sexy" or whatever. If you start trying to show your boobs more or whatever I guarantee you you will only be watched for wanks, not for your rapping talent.
I'm not sure if you wouldn't not want that, but whatever.
The second one is a little better but again, the pitch. And again, feels too forced and like you're trying too hard. Also I agree with the person who said using metaphores and literary teqniques. I'm not a big rap fan but the ones I do like are usually the ones where the lyrics are clever.
Don't like this at all.
[QUOTE=Obe1kenobi;18587183]This is the rap video I made about a month ago
[url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LibwNdBsr0c[/url]
There are more bewbs in it and I tried to be a little bit more aggressive, I don't like it as much, but maybe my presentation is better in it?[/QUOTE]
I listened to your video, awful instrumental, and you can't rap. all you do is insult the stereotype nerd and tease utube viewers with your tits.
I think you should go on xfactor next year, eminem will make you cry.
Moving away from porn, some of the lyrics are alright, your delivery needs work because it's pretty monotone at the moment and try getting a better backing track.
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