I wrote a review on Tropico 4, my mom and gram saw it, they think I should become a games journalist

[Viero]

[QUOTE=Pvt. Martin;44012221]Thanks, also I just had a thought, it might actually take a bit to formulate the review proper, like how other well known reviewers do. I'll get a draft tonight.

Also maybe now that the question is answered I should close this thread and make a new one maybe?[/QUOTE]

If you plan to post your reviews more, yeah, probably.

You should make the thread either in General Discussion or General Games Discussion.

[lordcrypto]

hi

honestly, my warning bells start going off when someone's like "my familial relation says my x/y/z is really good"

i'm one step removed from book production and longform content and such

and in all honesty, it isn't very good. It feels very much like a "ok class remember your five paragraph format", you've got zero handle on their/there/they're and you're/your, along with numerous other grammatical/spelling errors

there's nothing in your prose that makes me go "wow i want to read another one of your reviews"

[Viero]

[QUOTE=LordCrypto;44012573]hi

honestly, my warning bells start going off when someone's like "my familial relation says my x/y/z is really good"

i'm one step removed from book production and longform content and such

and in all honesty, it isn't very good. It feels very much like a "ok class remember your five paragraph format", you've got zero handle on their/there/they're and you're/your, along with numerous other grammatical/spelling errors

there's nothing in your prose that makes me go "wow i want to read another one of your reviews"[/QUOTE]

While I don't disagree that he needs to work on it, what he has is actually pretty good considering he's doing this as an amateur. Paid freelance work? No, for that, he needs to do quite a bit of work. But he's not in too bad of a position for becoming a paid game reviewer, he's got potential.

[Pvt. Martin]

[QUOTE=LordCrypto;44012573]hi

honestly, my warning bells start going off when someone's like "my familial relation says my x/y/z is really good"

i'm one step removed from book production and longform content and such

and in all honesty, it isn't very good. It feels very much like a "ok class remember your five paragraph format", you've got zero handle on their/there/they're and you're/your, along with numerous other grammatical/spelling errors

there's nothing in your prose that makes me go "wow i want to read another one of your reviews"[/QUOTE]

So what do you think I can do to be better?

[Noss]

why would you let your mom anywhere near your steam page

i have my computer set to spontaneously combust if my parents even glance at it

[Pvt. Martin]

You're all treating it like the moment a mother touches a computer, it just implodes.

My mom's cool, not one of those "I dunno how to tech" folks.