"Final Destination" Zoey turning into some kind of demon

[kuhbwekduhbweco]

Her motuh in the first picture is a bit too dark, you can't even see what is it supposed to be.

The second is great, but that rain is too dense, in my opinion. I love the lighting and atmosphere.

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[b]First pic:[/b]

Good:[list]
[*]Rim lighting looks nice
[*]Overall lighting is nice
[*]Blood looks convincing[/list]
Bad:[list]
[*]Torso and left arm are rim lit, rest of body is directly lit from her right
[*]The hair on her left side looks funny but it's not that important, just something to consider/look out for in the future
[*]There is no way that a bottle of water is only $1.00, even if it is Cool Breeze™ Natural Spring Water© :downsrim:
[/list]

[b]Second pic:[/b]

Good:[list]
[*]Character lighting is nice
[*]The rain is good in how you vary the size/brightness/blur/direction of your rain drops
[*]Her expression is congruent
[*]I like the eyes
[/list]
Bad:[list]
[*]Rain is a bit too dense
[*]Angle of the rain is a tad steep. Rain like that implies high winds, where nothing else in the scene implies it
[*]Her collarbone area is lit where it should be shaded (source engine apparently says no to "self shadowing")
[*]Her boob is blocky (clone stamp > plastic surgery)
[*]Hot spots on her belt
[*]Hair is doing that weird thing again I mentioned in the first pic
[/list]

[b]It may seem like I'm being mean but really I'm not, just nitpicking. It's a good composition overall.[/b]

[The Combine]

Wow.
Sorry for bumping this shit again but... that was the most helpful post I may have ever read on this forum.
Id really apreciate it if youd comment on previous poses of mine as well.