[QUOTE=Lt_C;24853081]I was advertising, no doubt, but it's frustrating when I and other custom content creators put a great deal of effort into something and the target audience doesn't even know it exists.[/QUOTE]
To be honest, I don't like to use lots of user-created content because some people dislike it when you use their models and such without permission, and I don't want to deal with the trouble :P
Alright here's some problems I see in it:
- At some parts the music is too loud and overtakes the voices
- The propulsion effects look really weird to me, not a fan of them
- The green screening for some of the shots inside the ship just looks bad. The background is too blurry at times. Plus the detail on the characters just doesn't look right at all.
- Your voice actors sound bored and don't show to much enthusiasm
- Your ratcheting focus for the part at 0:48 is good for the first guy, but going back to the other guy was just over using it.
- 1:12 on the music is way way to loud.
How to fix them:
- Turn your music down! We need to be able to hear what the characters are saying.
- Get your voice actors to show a little more emotion when they are speaking. If you want the video to connect with people, having more believable characters allows the viewers to connect.
- Watch your focus! Sure focusing solely on the character will show more emotion and allow you to focus on what they are saying. But having just them in focus gets boring and bland after a while. Show some background when they talk.
- Never over use a shot. The same shot for 7 seconds and longer is too long and you will lose the attention of the viewer.
- Change up your shots during conversations. As I stated above your shot at 0:48 was boring and didn't look right. Instead of having it refocus on the second guy, have it transfer to just a shot of his face showing an emotional response.
These are just some of my little niches I see in the video.
Yes this may just be just a fun video, but why not improve on this little hobby of yours.
[QUOTE=Captain Ringo;24862922]Alright here's some problems I see in it:
- At some parts the music is too loud and overtakes the voices
- The propulsion effects look really weird to me, not a fan of them
- The green screening for some of the shots inside the ship just looks bad. The background is too blurry at times. Plus the detail on the characters just doesn't look right at all.
- Your voice actors sound bored and don't show to much enthusiasm
- Your ratcheting focus for the part at 0:48 is good for the first guy, but going back to the other guy was just over using it.
- 1:12 on the music is way way to loud.
How to fix them:
- Turn your music down! We need to be able to hear what the characters are saying.
- Get your voice actors to show a little more emotion when they are speaking. If you want the video to connect with people, having more believable characters allows the viewers to connect.
- Watch your focus! Sure focusing solely on the character will show more emotion and allow you to focus on what they are saying. But having just them in focus gets boring and bland after a while. Show some background when they talk.
- Never over use a shot. The same shot for 7 seconds and longer is too long and you will lose the attention of the viewer.
- Change up your shots during conversations. As I stated above your shot at 0:48 was boring and didn't look right. Instead of having it refocus on the second guy, have it transfer to just a shot of his face showing an emotional response.
These are just some of my little niches I see in the video.
Yes this may just be just a fun video, but why not improve on this little hobby of yours.[/QUOTE]
Thanks for the criticisms. I will switch up that one shot you told me about as well as I can.
[QUOTE=Mendelevius;24851656]Im talking about the mistakes, the consumer doesn't want to see that; It turns a lot of people off. [/QUOTE]
Just a note, you shouldn't refer to yourself or others as the consumer, seeing as he isn't making it for you, just a note buddy.
[QUOTE=Captain Ringo;24862922]Alright here's some problems I see in it:
- At some parts the music is too loud and overtakes the voices
- The propulsion effects look really weird to me, not a fan of them
- The green screening for some of the shots inside the ship just looks bad. The background is too blurry at times. Plus the detail on the characters just doesn't look right at all.
- Your voice actors sound bored and don't show to much enthusiasm
- Your ratcheting focus for the part at 0:48 is good for the first guy, but going back to the other guy was just over using it.
- 1:12 on the music is way way to loud.
How to fix them:
- Turn your music down! We need to be able to hear what the characters are saying.
- Get your voice actors to show a little more emotion when they are speaking. If you want the video to connect with people, having more believable characters allows the viewers to connect.
- Watch your focus! Sure focusing solely on the character will show more emotion and allow you to focus on what they are saying. But having just them in focus gets boring and bland after a while. Show some background when they talk.
- Never over use a shot. The same shot for 7 seconds and longer is too long and you will lose the attention of the viewer.
- Change up your shots during conversations. As I stated above your shot at 0:48 was boring and didn't look right. Instead of having it refocus on the second guy, have it transfer to just a shot of his face showing an emotional response.
These are just some of my little niches I see in the video.
Yes this may just be just a fun video, but why not improve on this little hobby of yours.[/QUOTE]
This is the perfect example of what people should be saying, it doesn't HAVE to include how to fix things, but he's not critical like a jackass.
Scoutking mentioned that you were having a discussion in here about the film, so I'll just post what I posted in the other thread.
"The plot sounds like it lacks in any creativity at all, just a mass of typical plot lines, clichés and bland characters."
When will you guys stop fucking talking about editing and focus on something that’s more important, like the script? Also, stop having the same arguments you have been having for months. I haven’t been in this thread for a long while, I come back and you still flaming over the same thing.
[QUOTE=darius_bielecki;24870557]"The plot sounds like it lacks in any creativity at all, just a mass of typical plot lines, clichés and bland characters."[/QUOTE]
A trailer is supposed to give the viewer a taste of what the final movie will be like.
I understand you think the plot is cliched and such -- what problem do you have with it? WHAT is cliche, WHAT is typical about the plot?
And regarding the plot -- If I gave you 1000 guesses you'd not be able to guess the ending.
‘All hope is lost after a major catastrophe, the fate of the human race lies of one man despite overwhelming situations.’
The thing is this doesn’t always lead to bad films/games/comics, Look at Half-life for example. However when you leave it on its own with an extremely bland sci-fi concept with no interesting ideas to support it, it leaves the audience to focus on the poor and simple plot as described above.
Though, I’ll wait till you send me a more descriptive plot. I could be very wrong.
[QUOTE=GodlyT;24866383]Just a note, you shouldn't refer to yourself or others as the consumer, seeing as he isn't making it for you, just a note buddy.
This is the perfect example of what people should be saying, it doesn't HAVE to include how to fix things, but he's not critical like a jackass.[/QUOTE]
Well yeah, who really cares if the shirt is purple or blue. That's not going to destroy the film, bad shots, poor voice acting and a lacking plot is what destroys a film.
Cool.
[QUOTE=GodlyT;24866383]Just a note, you shouldn't refer to yourself or others as the consumer, seeing as he isn't making it for you, just a note buddy. [/QUOTE]
Well, allow me to retort! The name isn't buddy and if he wasn't making it for "ME" he wouldn't of posted it here. He posted it here for publicity and the publicity comes from the consumers who watch it. That's all I'm going to say.
Hey I like turtles too.
It looks pretty cool
not sure about the clothes thought, I don't know much about the backstory but wouldn't it make sense for the citizens to be wearing....I dunno more "Casual" clothes instead of blue jumpsutis?
[QUOTE=Mendelevius;24990085]Well, allow me to retort! The name isn't buddy and if he wasn't making it for "ME" he wouldn't of posted it here. He posted it here for publicity and the publicity comes from the consumers who watch it. That's all I'm going to say.[/QUOTE]
Haha Pulp Fiction quote right there :P But I agree with Mendelevius, Fumples put it up here so people could watch it. A consumer by definition is a person or thing that consumes. By watching the video we are consuming the images and sound, as we are constantly consuming by being alive. So consumer is me, you and anyone who watches the video, even if he didn't direct towards anyone in particular.
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