It had some cool editing effects, but it was VERY hard to watch what was going on. A lot of it was taken from that horrendous ‘goggle-vision’ thing. At one point, the character shot an enemy but you couldn’t see the enemy die because the vision was obstructed by the two goggle things. All in all, some great editing, some good dialog (ending was cool), but the framerate and cinematography really have to go.
Try using catmull more to your advantage, it had a great atmosphere and some good dialog however some of the actual camera shots (no first person crap) looked shoddy.
I’d give it a 3/5, just for the effort you put into it.