SAVE FERRIS - episode one

Short prologue found here
http://www.facepunch.com/threads/1043366-SAVE-FERRIS-prologue

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to be continued

I don’t know why, but the expressions in the last panels read “Rapist and Rapee”

It seemed to me like there was a whole lot of dialog that could have either been left out, or shortened to make it more natural.

I thought more of “jizz” and “deer caught in headlights.”

Try to make the panels/text a little bigger. If file size is a concern save the images in photoshop as optimized jpegs which look as good as regular jpegs and lower the quality until jpeg compression starts to become noticeable. The white gaps between the panels are somewhat out of place too.

Also go easy on the radical blur.