After watching your comic i must say that i give you credit on trying on something serious. But i’m going to be frank with you, it wasn’t that very good. Now i am not going to compare you with the 07’ers or the 8’ers since that would just be cruel but what i can tell you is that first of… Do not ever work on a comic in the photo editing program you’re using. I’d suggest you’d use photoshop or GIMP and find tutorials on how to make comic layouts, bubbles and find the correct font for your editing.
It also feels like posing that you barely wanted to put effort into this video wich is kind of sad, but i’ve been in your shoes so i know how it is. I don’t say you should DO this but i want to suggest that you take a bit longer working on poses before a screenshot and find the correct camera angle!
When it comes to the story, i am not so sure what to say about it, i do not feel like i understand anything and to be quite frank the four - five frames before the metrocop teleported his way into the building telling him to put his hands up didn’t make much sense either.
I’d also suggest that you start using a good image upload website